Elisabeth Hollow:
Thanks Honestly, lately Ive only been updating when I have free time. I'm having more free-time than I thought I would, so I might be able to keep up with my normal updating schedule, but for now, whenever i'm free, i'll post.

mALX: The fight was funny because Vokun couldn't fight back. That and he's not really a person who enjoys heights, so being flung up into the air made him act a bit....strange to say the least.

Acadian: After Westley spent the initial part of his fight with Vokun beating himself up against trees and rocks, it was wonderful to finally see Vokun get that punch in the mouth!

Westley isn't the best fighter. He has horrible fighting tactics, and was so mad at Vokun, he could't think straight, so he ended up crashing into trees instead of hitting his target. Vokun was able to move out of the way of Westley's attacks in time, though in the end, Vokun got the beating he deserved.

This is awful

SPEW !!! This whole entire fight scene had me in hysterics, but that line nearly choked me to death! I am LOVING this story!

This quote sums up everything needed to know about Hastrel right now, lmfao!

The wonderful arguments among Westley’s party continue, even in the thick of fighting. I wonder who the rogue werewolf was? And darn that Vokun - he got away again with nary a punch in the mouth nor errant arrow to the knee this time.

I had to chuckle at the image of our intrepid band given pause to enter an Ayleid ruin. Who knows what nightmares might lay below? Could be vampires, werewolves or other such horrors in there!

You did a great job of quickly establishing a fearful atmosphere inside the dungeon. Ah yes, dancing through blade traps. . . .

One notable distraction throughout this delightfully fun episode was that, although you correctly labeled the werewolf as rogue in the title, you then referred to it as ‘rouge’ (a reddish color) throughout the episode.

mALX: I'm glad you're enjoying the story  in my own opinion I'm not the best writer though. Im not doing so good in Language Arts, especially with essays, and I remember a particular story called "The Carrot" I wrote in class in first grade or kindergarten. I can't remember when I wrote it. The story went like this:

"There once was a carrot, and then a rabbit ate it, and it died." Everything was spelled wrong though, and and I wrote "THE END" when i finished in big red letters and drew a horrible picture to go along with it.   

Now that nothing of it, compared to "The Carrot", this story isn't half bad  

Anyway, thanks for reading mALX, I appreciate it.

Elisabeth Hollow:

You're not that far from the truth He's quite oblivious of everything around him, and is pretty self-centered.
He'll eventually learn not to be like that though, though it will most likely be the hard way.

Thanks for reading! 

Acadian:

If there's an argument, it's best to assume that Hastrel started it  



Hmmm....that arrow wouldn't have gone near his knee. He'd be walking around with an arrow through his face if he hadn't been so lucky  



I'll tell you this much:

He's/she's an important character, so pay close attention to him/her  

And thanks for reading.


Everyone: Thanks for reading, even though there are only three(on rare occasions four). It means a lot that you're taking the time to read my story   

This is longer than I remember

I love the way you divided this chapter up into segments so we could see what was happening with each. Well now I feel sorry for Vokun, you've really brought a new perspective of him with this chapter! Awesome Write!

Hastrel is a jerk, lol

And even dungeon clearing doesn't focus this group on the task at hand. Great fun!

So, Vokun has his own problems and we learn a bit more about the rogue werewolf.

mALX:I love the way you divided this chapter up into segments so we could see what was happening with each. Well now I feel sorry for Vokun, you've really brought a new perspective of him with this chapter! Awesome Write!

Don't feel sorry for Vokun. Yes, he's depressed, but he doesn't think before he acts. He's actually killing other people, just so he feels better. That's just one of his bad habits though.

Like I just said, he acts before thinking. Someone could look at him wrong, and if he gets upset....well let's just say that that person goes missing.....  

He also pretends he doesn't care when something bad happens to him. He did care about his family....but when they died he sort of just tried to shake it off and act like he doesn't care so he wouldn't look weak. If there's one thing you should know about Vokun, it's that he can't stand looking weak.

 If he were to die in a way that he considered cowardly, he'd be turning in his grave  

Elisabeth Hollow:

He's very self-centered(even more that Vokun, if that's possible.) If he's in danger, and using someone as a human shield could save him, he'd do it. He doesn't care about the consequences as long as they don't kill him or harm him. So....yea. In other words he's a self-centered a******.


EVERYONE: Ignore the crappiness of this post. I had writers block

Pls no ban mods I'm sorry

I love your explanation of Vokun in your comment thanks. That does tell a lot about him that I hadn’t picked up yet, thank you!

I love how they gawked at Janus for breezing past the buttons they were unable to activate, lol. Still, this one passage had me rolling, especially after all their trouble escaping the ruin and worrying about Hastrel throughout:



Awesome Write!

I was giggling this whole chapter! I hated when the buttons didn't work. Good job for someone who has writer's block!

Oh, those traps sure sound familiar! Damn confusing buttons. Something tells me that for Westley, ‘patience’ is simply two four letter words glued together.

What a loot score! An ancient Ayleid carrot!

A real chuckle at the end to realize Hastrel was safely outside.

mALX: 



The funny thing about it is Hastrel knows how to use all of thise buttons too. He fled the ruin shortly after everyone split up(he pulled himself out of the water when nobody was lokking and waited for everyone to go away from the entrance. Thanks for reading, I appreciate it   

Elisabeth Hollow: I still haeve wriers block. It's annoying  

The butons in the ruin  Westley was exploring got stuck, and he lost his patience with it. He doest have much experiece with Aylied ruins either. The only other Aylied ruin he's been in was Miscarcand, and he wasnt very happy about going there. If you've done the main quest, you'll know why    Thanks for reading   

Acadian:  

That actually happened to me in game. I walked into an Aylied ruin(I forget the name) with about....100 lockpicks. I found a big Aylied cask, and thought "well there must be something good in here!" the lock was very hard. I only had one lockpick left when I managed to finally open the damn thing. And guess what was in it.

A GODDAMN CARROT!

I was so pissed off that I turned off the Xbox and went to watch TV

Thanks for reading my story   

Everyone: Ive decided it would be interesting if I played my villain for this story on skyrim. I also think its a good way to get into Vokun's head to see what he's thinking, explore his personality more, and see what everything is like from his PoV. If you'd like to see a screen, just ask.

Also, I'm still cursed with writer's block, so I'm sorry if this chapter is confusing and terrible

Thanks for reading this when it was active guys

The above two quotes nearly killed me laughing, but the section from Vokun’s point of view was heartbreaking. That is twice you’ve made me feel bad for Vokun, regardless of knowing what he’s done. Awesome Write!


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So Vokun is just insane Wow.

He's a bit more than just insane. He belongs in sheogoraths realm .

To top they he's extremely bitter and vengeful, so that doesn't help his insanity situation, and he's very violent.

Bad combo

He also suffers from Post-Traumatic stress disorder.

Lol. Hastrel is such a weenie!

Darn, we still don’t know enough about the mysterious Decimus werewolf.

And some good development of Vokun. I can see why he dislikes werewolves so much. But his underlying nature of being a jerk peeks through in how he treated his wife and son. So he still rates a punch in the mouth.

He sure does.

mALX: 


Don't feel bad for Vokun, it's a bad idea!

He had a depressing childhood though, but remember, he's already screwed up in the head to the point where it's not possible to help him, and feeling bad for him will not get you anywhere.



Thanks for reading mALX   






Whatever was holding his mind together is officially broken   

He'd be thriving in the shivering isles though. I wonder where he'd live   

Thanks for reading 'Liz!






Sadly, the fight you witnessed in this chapter between Vokun and his wife wasnt the worst of the fights. You'll find out later on the fights would get quite......violent, and Vokun's son could only stand by and watch   

But he definitely deserves to be punched in the mouth still   

And congrats on your new position Acadian   

Not much of a writer though

I really like how you've given everyone distinct personalities in this story! GAAAAH! Cannibals? URK !!!! Awesome Write !!!

So Westley got separated and captures by cannibals? GO WOLF, WESTLEY!!!!

‘The horizon was a rich golden-orange with hints of light purple, light blue, and pink. The stars were beginning to invade the sky, and it was starting to get dark.’
KoB, this is a nice description and easy to envision. Well done!

Little Hastrel takes apologizing to a whole new level.

Captured by cannibals! I’m expecting Westley to wake up sitting in a stewpot of water over a big fire!

mALX: Cannibals are only one of the many nasty "creatures" that war can bring out. Westley and the gang will have to deal with a lot more trouble later on, lol.

Elisabeth Hollow: The cannibals are in for a hell lotta trouble trying to kidnap and eat a werewolf. It won't go well in thier end. And I hope you cheer up soon   

Acadian:  thanks Acadian. I enjoy describing things(sometimes I get to carried away though   )



When it comes to apologies, he's more useless than ever

Glad to end this

WESTLEY, NO!! :'(

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First off, I am so sorry it took so long to get here and read - very hectic week.


GAAAAAH! Urk!


SPEW!!! LOVE your humorous dialogue, and it always catches me by surprise when you tuck it into a serious situation - I need to stop sipping drinks when reading your story !!





SPEW!!! ROFL !!!



Oh dear gods Westley, NO !!!!!!! Urk!!! What a cliffhanger, I hope Westley runs away! GAAAAAH! Awesome Write!


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I chuckled to learn that the smartest of the little cannibal band had four legs. Never doubt the judgment of a horse when it comes to sensing danger.

‘I put my hand on his shoulder "Don't worry, I haven't forgotten my name. I'm just not sure I can trust you."
Westley shows much wisdom here, tempering honesty with prudence.

"I'm sorry, this isn't important, but you keep saying ta instead of the"
A delightful technique here. When something may cause the reader pause, addressing it right in the story is a great choice!

‘I realized that The Ring Of Hircine had fallen off my finger when the cart flipped.’
Similarly here, you answered an unspoken question just as it might have occurred to the astute reader.

Afer is likable, but has just made a suicidal error in judgment. Westley’s reaction is terrifying but justified. A very powerful ending to this episode!

STOP BEING LAZY AND CONTINUE THIS DAMN STORY!! XD

Missing your story, Kobby! Hope you can pick it up again when you get over being sick from those damn pills!

Elisabeth Hollow: Westley acted out of self-defense.Like Acadian said, Westley's actions may have been scary(and maybe even a bit harsh), but he had a good reason. Had Afer not attacked him, things would have Hine very differently.

mALX: sorry you were having a crazy week mALX, I hope everything is a bit better now   



Yes, please, I don't want to be responsible for paying your repair bill



Like I said to Liz, he had a good reason for doing what he did! Afer brought death upon himself!

Acadian:



Thank you you said it far better than I could have, lol.



Yup. And the cannibals made the mistake of dismissing the horse's warnings.... 

Everyone: sorry it took so long to post this. I went to Africa and got sick. I was also being a bit lazy,

Removed

"I DO WHAT I WANT!!"

I love their arguments so much XD

Yay! Westley lifted that ol’ wagon and freed the horse.

"Actually Imbel, I'm pretty sure if you looked hard enough, you could find a building or plant that will attempt to eat you-"
True, this.

“Besides, you'll be less scary if you're dead."
Also quite true.

Welcome back KoB. Another fun episode, as concern for Westley is rapidly replaced by the neverending bickering of Jakben and Hastrel. I don’t know how long Janus will be willing to continue trying to referee.

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GAAAAH! Westley's going to kill Smooth-Scales? Urk!


SPEW !!! ROFL !!! This whole section had me in hysterics! You haven't lost your touch, Kobby! Awesome Write, and I am so happy you are back and writing it again!



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Elisabeth Hollow:

The arguing has barely begun

Acadian:

Janus will be tearing his hair out pretty soon, lol. Hastrel and Jakben agreed to stop fighting, but that's not going to happen

mALX:

BLECH. I've been busy lately, lol. Haven't had much time to sit down and write, lol

Wow this is so much longer than I thought

MAN Hastrel gets mad! They push each others' buttons a whole lot. And Poor Westley is looooost.

ROFL !!! Like he doesn't have them too, lol.


SPEW!!!! ROFL !!!

The whole fight between Imbel and Hastrel had me in hysterics, then Imbel shouts this:

I lost coffee everywhere, ROFL !!!

It was so good to see you finally updating again!

Nice to learn that Smooth-Scales likely survived.

‘Hastrel shivered "I'm cold! I want a blanket!"’
Ooh, this really nails the little whiner!

Gosh, if I was Westley, I’m not sure I’d want to be found by the three vampiric arguing amigos!

Elisabeth Hollow: Yeah, he gets pissed, but a short walk and he'll be all better

mALX: I'll be updating a bit more often now. I've had my break, lol

Acadian: You'd expect Hastrel to be the LAST person complaining about the cold, considering he's form Skyrim, lol

Lol. If I had to deal with all the arguing, I'd take the first carriage to the end of the world

So long

Seems like Westley’s having a rather nerve-wracking walk trying to escape the bad vampires and get back to his friends, the good vampires.

Wow, Jakben sure made short work of those bandits!

Janus hoarding food making poor Hastrel drink dead bandit blood!

Gosh it’s nice to see you continuing the madcap adventures of Westley and Company!

What a great paragraph! I love the imagery you conjured with this!



BWAAHAA! I love this !!!

Jakben’s fight with the bandits was Awesome!

You had me screaming laughing at Janus waking up and accusing Jakben of stealing his ring! ROFL!



You’re killing me! ROFL !!!




SPEW !!!




*mALX choked to death laughing*


AWESOME WRITE! And so good to see you posting again !!! You have been missed!

I've been pestering him to write for three weeks now XD

Good girl, you hounded him back to the front lines! Lol.