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mALX


Chapter 6:


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How does one take charge of fate? It seemed that I had been shoved around by fate my entire life.

I liked this line, it tells a lot about Valrimor's strength of personality that he hasn't let that ill fate smother the kind side of him. He is an Awesome character!

I had to quote this whole three paragraphs for being outstanding:

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The Nord did indeed help. Some unfortunate woman must have met up with one of the wolves. There were no human remains in its belly, but there was a silver ring with a garnet stone. Ralof wondered why I would even bother opening the stomach. There was a simple explanation, which I conveyed to him.

“I once witnessed a wolf attack. A whole pack descended on a couple having a romantic walk in the woods. Due to some…uh…local circumstances…I wasn’t able to help them. And there were lots of wolves!” I explained, on my knees as I skinned a wolf, “But I digress. The woman had been wearing some stunning jewelry. When I examined the corpses, it was obvious that her finery had become part of the wolf’s main course. Ever since then, when I kill a wolf, I check for jewelry. You would be surprised how many rooms and ales I have found in wolf guts.”

The Nord just looked at me for a moment, then shook his head and went back to work. When we finished cleaning the animals, I asked Ralof where the river led and he told me northward to a series of falls. That was perfect. I tossed the carcasses and entrails into the river, knowing that if they weren’t devoured by mudcrabs first, the falls would reduce them to fish food. After rinsing the wolf blood from my hands, the task was completed and we set of again for Riverwood.


How real is that! I absolutely LOVED the detail of this, you have taken the short trip to Riverwood and made it your own in a HUGE way! I remember that wolf attack, scared the crap out of me! The idea of getting the pelts and meat right there - VERY hunterish touch to Valrimor!


mALX


Chapter 7 – Riverwood

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It was a small town indeed. In fact, the word “town” was probably too grand a title.


This detail was another perfect one. Riverwood feels like a settlement, not a town - you have an awesome talent for vividly giving a feel of a place with very few descriptive terms, what a gift!

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My ears perked at the mention of mead.


BWAAHAA! I love Valrimor's inner thoughts, he is very humorous!

Awesome Write, all these chapters! I absolutely LOVED the Interlude background on Valrimor, that has to be up among my favorite chapters!




Acadian
Finally, a moment’s rest as Val and Ralof reach Riverwood for a respite and some Nordic hospitality. I see Val is already tasting the mead even before he drinks!

’The smell of cooking food had entangled itself in tendrils of chimney smoke and caused my stomach to growl.’ - - An enchanting description that allowed my stomach to join Val’s in growling.

‘With that, Frodnar gave a stern military salute, and then assured us all that no Imperials would sneak up on us during his watch. He did an about face and ran to the south gate. The dog chased after him, barking support.’ - - This is a delightful touch of humanity and, dare I say, cuteness that is so welcome in this harsh northern land. happy.gif
jack cloudy
Oh Frodnar, you're so cute when you want to murder people for their political leanings. Too bad you're a pranker, cause I hate prankers.


And having Hadvar/Ralof tell the tale of Helgen and the dragon never get's old. Though I personally like Hadvar's version just a bit better. It must be because he's accused of being drunk. kinda ironic what with Hod hogging the mead and all.

Speaking of which, mead! New experiences and tastes await!
Grits
Interlude: I really like the way you’ve provided some of Val’s background. You’ve shown a bit about Val’s origins, but not too much at once. I’m drawn in and interested in learning more. I also wonder how much Val knows about his violent beginning. That might complicate his relationship with his inner Nord. Very engaging!

Chapter 6: Ralof must have thought I had lost my acorns.
What a delightful expression!

I just love the very Bosmer description of the forest followed immediately by the thought of more libations.

The Thief Stone chose him, neat. The wolf-gut treasure was another great touch. In our house we call that… well, it’s a rude name that includes the only place a wolf might carry a garnet. Yeah, “ear” garnets. whistling.gif Of course in our stories we can ignore the sometimes silly things the game throws our way, but a plausible explanation always makes me grin. (And wish that I’d thought of it! tongue.gif )

Chapter 7: I’m glad you gave such a detailed account of Val and Ralof’s arrival in Riverwood. I’ve always thought Gerdur’s remark that no one else had come up the south road today was particularly grim.

And finally, the mead is almost within reach! biggrin.gif

SubRosa
Finally Val is going to have a chance to drink all of Gerdur and Hod's mead! biggrin.gif

Now that Val is finally out of immediate danger, I wonder what he might do next? Go to Whiterun to tell Jarl Ballin' about the dragon? Or strike out on his own? I suspect that nothing is going to happen until the mead start flowing though... wink.gif
ThatSkyrimGuy
Fate has brought us together again, but first...

@ mALX - A heartfelt welcome back mALX! Hug_emoticon.gif I think I can speak for all when I say you were missed. I'm glad you enjoyed the Interlude as much as I enjoyed writing it. Thank you very much for your kind comments on it and the chapters that followed.

I remember that wolf attack, scared the crap out of me! -- Me too! ohmy.gif

@ Acadian - Val is indeed looking forward to that mead. smile.gif I chuckled a moment when "cuteness" was preceded with "dare I say". Thank you kind sir!

@ jack cloudy - Were you never a prankster as a kid? tongue.gif

Though I personally like Hadvar's version just a bit better. It must be because he's accused of being drunk. kinda ironic what with Hod hogging the mead and all. -- Oddly enough, I have never chosen the Hadvar side when I've played the game. I guess I'm too much of a rebel at heart. cool.gif

@ Grits - Welcome back! biggrin.gif

The wolf-gut treasure was another great touch. In our house we call that… well, it’s a rude name that includes the only place a wolf might carry a garnet. Yeah, “ear” garnets. -- "ear" garnets! rollinglaugh.gif

@ SubRosa - I got two words...Jarl Ballin'! OMG, I was dying when I watched that! rollinglaugh.gif And you are correct...nothing is going to happen until the mead starts flowing. wink.gif

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Thanks to all of you for your continued comments and compliments. As always, they mean a lot to me. smile.gif Let's drink some mead!

Previously - Valrimor and Ralof had finally made it to Riverwood, where they were extended the hospitality of Ralof’s sister, Gerdur…

Chapter 8 – Mead and Morning Muzziness


17th Last Seed, 4E201 - Continued

The house of Ralof’s brother-in-law was austere, giving no overt hint of either wealth or poverty. It was an L-shaped single story building with no interior walls at all. The space looked much larger than it really was due to the high steep rafters. A dining and cooking area occupied one end. There was a cook pot suspended from a spit that spanned a bed of glowing coals. Ralof went to it straight away and stirred its contents. At the other end of the house were beds and a sitting table. But what caught my attention immediately was a bar, just like one you might see in a tavern, near the back wall. Several bottles, of what I could only assume to be the mead that had been spoken of, beckoned to me from its surface.

“Where is Gerdur keeping the bowls these days, Hod?” Ralof asked.

“In the cupboard there, right side door,” he replied, and then said, “Get some of that rabbit stew. You look like you could use it.”

It took a moment of silence before I realized Hod was speaking to me. I tore my gaze from the bar and said that some stew sounded good. He was motioning for me to sit at the table, and joined me as I did so. Ralof brought over three steaming bowls, and then centered a plate of bread and cheese on the table. All of us began eating heartily. It was some of the best stew I had ever tasted. There were chunks of potato, carrots, leeks, and tomato suspended in thick gravy with large pieces of rabbit. Just the right amount of garlic gave it a little heat.

“Oh my Gods,” Hod said suddenly, and stood up. He went to the cupboard and grabbed three flagons. A small thirsty grin crept to my face, and then vanished just as quickly when he picked up a water pitcher and returned. He filled all of our mugs, apologizing for not remembering drinks as he sat back down. I thanked him and took a sip of water with feigned enjoyment. We ate the rest of our meal in silence. Gerdur entered just as we were finishing up with cleaning the dishes.

“It’s good to see that you men knew where to find the wash pot,” she jibed. Ralof looked at me and winked as she continued, “Now get out of my kitchen and let me finish. Hod, get some mead for my brother and his friend.”

“That sounds wonderful!” I said with a touch too much exuberance, and then finished with a toned down, “Thank you.”

The three of us went over to the bar. Hod stood behind it while Ralof and I pulled up stools and sat. Our bartender set out three ornate steins and dutifully filled each with mead. He handed me an empty bottle and said, “I bet you’ve never had mead like this before.”

I held the bottle in one hand and raised my stein with the other for a taste. It was small, compared to a wine bottle, and it barely filled my stein. The label proclaimed it to be “Honningbrew Mead” in Nordic style script, with a stylized beehive pictured below the writing. The mead rolled over my tongue and I closed my eyes. It was sweeter than what I was used to, but it was damn tasty! By the time I opened my eyes, the stein was half empty. I stopped abruptly when I noticed Hod and Ralof staring at me.

“Did you not get enough water?” Hod asked, and started moving as if he were going for the pitcher.

“Plenty,” I said, reaching out to stop him, “I was just caught off guard by the quality of this mead. It goes down so easy.”

“Aye,” Ralof chimed in, giving me a knowing glance that undoubtedly had to do with wine consumption in the caves beneath Helgen.

The mead went down smoothly indeed. Gerdur had long since retired for the night when Hod stood staring at the bar, dumbfounded. A little over a dozen empty mead bottles littered its surface. I was responsible for at least half of them.

“Wass da matter, broder-in-law?” Ralof asked with slurred curiosity.

“Dares no more mead,” he replied matter-of-factly. Then he shrugged and turned to me as he raised his stein to quaff the last of his mead, “So tree-hugger, what brings you to-”

I reached out and grabbed the arm that was raising his stein, squeezing his wrist hard while I hissed through clenched teeth, “Bosmer. It’s Bosmer, if you please. I’ll thank you to remember that from now on.”

I could feel an inner heat beginning to build along my forearms. Panic replaced my anger, and I quickly released my grip. When I did, I shoved Hod’s arm hard enough to cause him to drop his stein. It crashed to the floor, spilling the last of its contents. The two men were staring at me. Hod looked offended, angrily frowning and clenching his fists. Ralof stood and turned to Hod, swaying slightly as he did so, and put a hand on his shoulder. I didn’t know if it was to calm his brother-in-law or to keep from falling over.

“Don’t mind Varlimor…Vemralor…damn…Val, Hod. He’s,” -hic- “had a rufffff day,” my friend stuttered and slurred in my defense.

“Yeah…what he said,” I added, then stood up and walked toward a bed.

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18th Last Seed, 4E 201

My ears started working before my eyes did. I could hear faint sounds grow louder, ever so slowly, when suddenly an excruciating crash jangled every nerve in my body. My eyes snapped open and I sat up. My sight found Hod picking up a broken plate on the other side of the room, at the same time a rush of pain clawed into my head.

“Ugh,” I moaned as I grabbed my head and glanced around.

Someone must have put me in bed. They could have at least taken my boots off…

“Hey Ralof, look who joined the living,” Hod said, giving me a stern scowl.

Ralof poked his head around the corner and said, “Good afternoon, Val.”

Afternoon?

I looked up at the high windows. The light was coming in at a very steep angle, so if it was afternoon, it was not much past midday. The smell of bacon and eggs still hung in the air from breakfast, causing my stomach to roll over. I swung my feet to the floor and grabbed my head again to crush another flare of pain. I picked up the backpack and checked its contents. My wealth was not impressive. There was some rabbit that needed cooking soon, some bread and apples. A couple healing potions, two wine bottles, one of which was not for consumption. Lastly, a leather pouch with a little more than sixty Septims. I rose and shuffled to the dining area. A large plate that was still about half full with cold food sat in the center of the table. I sat down and placed my head in the palms of my hand, fighting off another thudding wave of headache.

“Good stuff, that Honningbrew, eh?” Ralof said with a grin.

“Why is Hod looking at me like I killed his dog?” I asked.

“We’ll worry about that later. Have a bite, then go over to the inn and order an herbal tea. Best cure for muzziness.”

I did as he suggested, eating cold bacon and eggs as my gurgling stomach protested. When I had downed as much as I dared, I rose and headed out, squinting hard as the daylight assaulted my eyes. It took a second for my eyesight to adjust, and for me to get my bearings.

Side road to main road. Inn. That way.

The entrance to the inn was raised above the road level, probably to accommodate a basement for storage. A wooden porch lined the front of the building. There was a bench on it and steps beckoning to the road. I walked up and sat down heavily on the bench. I had some thinking to do.

Okay Val, let’s take stock. You have a little food, and even less money. Gerdur wants you to go to see a Jarl. Ralof wants you to join a rebellion. A dragon wants to incinerate you for no good reason at all! And for toppers, you may have made an enemy of your hostess’s husband. All in all, it’s not one of your better days. Oh yes, and this wonderful headache. You need a plan. You know what happens when you have none.

I needed to clear my head before I could make a plan. I got up and entered The Sleeping Giant Inn.



Grits
I tore my gaze from the bar

laugh.gif Val really picked the right guy to flee Helgen with.

Ralof poked his head around the corner and said, “Good afternoon, Val.”

Oh no! Val has a Nord’s thirst and a Bosmer’s capacity. Plus he may have almost singed his host’s wrist. Yikes!

Of course I’m wondering if Val might have a dragon’s temper or if it’s just his own, but I am quite content to wait and see. I’m enjoying the pace of your story, and the level of detail is to be savored. smile.gif



Also I feel the need to make stew for dinner... *stomach rumbles* tongue.gif
Acadian
Let me open by again thanking you for following the stories of Buffy, Maxical, Teresa and Grits over on the commentasaurus thread. It is a nostalgic joy to ‘relive’ each of these stories again via your kind and insightful comments to each of us. happy.gif


This episode opens with a stunningly effective scene-setting description. Not only was it a pleasure to read, but it left me envious of how efficiently you brought us right into the easy to picture home, with its bubbling pot of rabbit stew and tavern-quality bar. I could almost feel the fire, hear the crackle of embers and smell the stew.

Uh oh. Looks like Val can be a grumpy drunk.

I enjoyed when he sat down outside the inn and took stock of his progress so far. Not only a nice summary, but neat to hear how Val views his situation to date.

Oh, a disclaimer if it is not obvious. I do not venture north of Cyrodiil, so what I see and learn of the northern province comes from fics/screens and vids right here at chorrol. The reason I mention it is that my context for Skyfics undoubtedly reflects my lack knowledge as to what is provided by the game (NPCs, locations, quests) and what is created by the writer. It is actually kind of a fun perspective. tongue.gif
mALX
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I also loved that Val "tore his gaze from the bar" but this line had me in stitches:
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He went to the cupboard and grabbed three flagons. A small thirsty grin crept to my face, and then vanished just as quickly when he picked up a water pitcher and returned. He filled all of our mugs, apologizing for not remembering drinks as he sat back down.


Uh oh, tempers' not the way to thank a host for sharing their bed/food/and at least 50% of their mead with him! Urk!

Your descriptive phrases are amazing for scene-setting! One example out of many:

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The light was coming in at a very steep angle, so if it was afternoon, it was not much past midday. The smell of bacon and eggs still hung in the air from breakfast

I am loving this story! Awesome Write!


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SubRosa
I cannot imagine Jarl Ballin' any other way after seeing that vid! biggrin.gif

I love it, Ralof goes straight to the stew, and Val straight to the bar! laugh.gif

I see Hod and Gerdur stock quite a bar. Honningbrew!

And there is another tell-tale sign of a temper in Val. Booze and a temper, always a good combination. I bet that is going to get him into trouble in the future.

“Hey Ralof, look who joined the living,” Hod said, giving me a stern scowl.
I can see Val has worn out his welcome.
mALX
QUOTE(SubRosa @ Jun 3 2013, 02:32 PM) *

Finally Val is going to have a chance to drink all of Gerdur and Hod's mead! biggrin.gif

Now that Val is finally out of immediate danger, I wonder what he might do next? Go to Whiterun to tell Jarl Ballin' about the dragon? Or strike out on his own? I suspect that nothing is going to happen until the mead start flowing though... wink.gif



OMG, that's what I get for reading the chapter out of my email - I missed this post! What a vid, although they could have cut it off after the third verse, lol. Loved this!



McBadgere
Excellent stuff!!!...

All caught up again...Sorry about that...Miss me?... huh.gif ... tongue.gif ...

Absolutely loved the journey down from Helgen...The bit with the wolves (very Assassin's Creed III with the Huntsman's Creed™ thing.) I absolutely love the - admittedly slightly grim - rationale for looking in the stomachs...Also, explains why you find jewlery when you kill the wolves and "loot" them...

And the stone-scene was cool...I was usually The Warrior to start with...This is not a shock...Simple man, simple goal...Rob Smaaash!!... biggrin.gif ...

OOoh yeah, the Bosmer thing, being soothed by the wildlife and the bow work were cool touches too...

Riverwood was a brilliantly done chapter...Still loving the way you weave the in-game stuff with yer own...Fantastic stuff, truly...*Applauds*...

The Mead chapter™ was also excellent...From the description of the room (something I also loved in the previous chapter about the titular town) to the meal and the drink...While it's actually very detailed, it's also so brief, and I am in absolute envy of your ability...I know damned well that it would take me half a chapter to do the same... laugh.gif ...

It's sad that Val managed to slightly lose his temper, but understandably so...Host or not, casual racism - even if it was without true malice - is never good...

Such good writing, loving it...

Apologies for getting so far behind...Definitely enjoyed reading so much in one go though...Brilliant stuff!!...

Nice one!!...

*Applauds heartily*...
ThatSkyrimGuy
Well, it only took 8 chapters, but the calendar finally clicked over to the next day. I am truly pleased that you all are enjoying the level of detail. I was a little concerned that it might be dragging the story out too much (8 chapters to tell of events that all happened the same day), so if it does get too boggy, let me know.

@ Everyone - A very gracious thanks for all of your very kind comments. They mean a lot an inspire me to keep going.

@ Grits - Val definitely wrestles with his temper, regardless of where it came from (I'm glad you are content to wait and see).

Oh no! Val has a Nord’s thirst and a Bosmer’s capacity. -- Great observation! You nailed it. biggrin.gif

@ Acadian - The pleasure is all mine to provide the nostalgic joy you referred to. The stories are really fun to read.

I do not venture north of Cyrodiil, so what I see and learn of the northern province comes from fics/screens and vids right here at chorrol. -- This touches on why I write in so much detail. I shouldn't assume that all of the readers have played the game, although I do know that many have. This also gives me the idea of adding screenies, like SubRosa does in her story. Perhaps I will in upcoming chapters.

@ mALX - I am so glad that you got a kick out of Val's disappointment that water would be served with dinner. I wanted to balance the dark segment that was coming with some humor.

@ SubRosa - My wife does not play the game (probably because it isn't a Facebook App tongue.gif ). So I showed her the Jarl in game, then showed her the Jarl Ballin' video. She was rolling! Thanks again for sharing that.

And there is another tell-tale sign of a temper in Val. Booze and a temper, always a good combination. I bet that is going to get him into trouble in the future. -- Probably a good bet... wink.gif

@ McBadgere - Welcome back! biggrin.gif Glad to see you got a break from silage harvesting to have some quiet time reading.

All caught up again...Sorry about that...Miss me? and Apologies for getting so far behind... -- Never have to apologize for RL events. Trust me, I know how it is to have a heavy work schedule. Of course we all missed you m8.

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Once again, thanks for following Valrimor. Now here is some weekend reading for you all. I hope you enjoy...

Previously - After a nice hot meal and what turned out to be too much mead, Val faced the following day with a hangover and scowls from Hod, whom he had offended the previous night. He was about to cure his hangover and make some plans at The Sleeping Giant Inn…

Chapter 9 – The Plans of a Sleeping Giant


18th Last Seed, 4E201 - Continued

The main hall of the inn was dominated by a huge fire pit running down the center of the room. Tables and benches were lined against the walls, which were decorated with various animal pelts. The floor also had pelts serving as throw rugs here and there. Candles, set deep in hollowed cattle horns, were in sconces on every pillar, and also in chandeliers high among the rafters. Each table also had its own candle in a horn. All in all, it made for a cozy atmosphere. A bard at one end of the room was lightly tapping out a beat on a tight skinned drum. The serving bar was at the other end. A man, presumably the barkeep, was cleaning the bar top and a woman had just entered the hall from another doorway that may have led to the kitchen. As I approached the bar, the woman seemed to be demanding the barkeep’s attention.

“Orgnar, are you listening to me?” she asked.

“Hard not to,” the barkeep, who I now knew to be Orgnar, replied.

“The ale is going bad. We need a new batch,” the woman proclaimed.

Ale is going bad? How does someone let that happen?

“Did you hear me?” she asked.

“Sure did. Ale’s goin’ bad,” Orgnar said as he continued to wipe down the bar.

“I guess you don’t have potatoes in your ears after all. Just make sure you get another batch in soon,” the woman demanded. With that she turned and walked away. I pulled up a stool and sat at the bar, and then asked Orgnar how much a cup of herbal tea cost.

“Thirty-one Septims,” he replied.

Half of my gold. I am poorer than I realized.

My head made the decision without me and ordered one. While he was away, I tried to concentrate. It was no use until this headache was gone. Orgnar returned with my tea and I laid the coins on the bar. Thirty-one Septims paid for a large flagon of the tea.

“Drink it all down, if you want that muzziness to go away fast,” he advised. He seemed to be a less than happy fellow, which was just as well, for I was not in a chatting mood. I rose and took my beverage to one of the tables. The tea did indeed have an amazing effect. By the time it was gone, I felt as though my late breakfast might stay put, and my headache had eased considerably. The bard had switched from his drum to a fife, but I was too deep in thought by then to appreciate his talent.

Ok, first things first. As usual, I have to fix whatever happened last night. Ugh! Then, before I do any favors for sisters, I need some coin. Let’s try not to resort to thievery. Remember the jail in Kvatch? Let’s get it honestly for a change. Ralof’s revolution has to wait too. Get the whole story first. That means lose the Stormcloak garb. I have the wolf pelts and there is a smith in town. I could get some decent leathers.

Suddenly, the bard began singing a song that interrupted my thinking and froze my breath. I had never heard the words until now, but the tune could not have been more familiar if I had composed it myself.

We drink to our youth, to days come and gone.
For the age of aggression, is just about done.


My mother used to hum that tune to me as a child. As the lyrics went on, I thought that maybe I was mistaken. Surely this revolution hadn’t been going on for fifty years. She never sang the song, but the tune was unmistakable. A dark depression began to wrap its black arms around my heart. I shook my head to fend it off.

Stop thinking about it. The song will be finished soon. There is too much ale and mead here for you to start thinking about your mother. Focus. Let’s review. Fix mess. Get coin. Lose Stormcloak label. See the blacksmith. Not necessarily in that order. That’s the plan.

I stood and returned Orgnar’s flagon to him, thanked him, and left the inn. I planned my speech during the walk back to Gerdur’s house.

Oh how I hate this…

By the time I got to the door, I had it well rehearsed and knew exactly what I would say to them. I walked in the door and they were at the dining table.

“Ok. Hod, Ralof, have a seat,” I said. They looked up at me from their chairs, puzzled.

“Good,” I continued, “listen, here’s the deal. I drink. I like to drink. It is my…never mind…I like to drink and that’s that. When I do, I don’t always behave as I should, or would normally if I were sober. Am I making sense? Anyway, I am going to stay at the inn so I don’t cause you any more trouble. It’s better that way.”

The two looked at each other, then Hod said, “No hard feelings Valrimor, but perhaps you are right. For aiding Ralof, Gerdur has made it clear that you are welcome to anything within reason. What you did last night was not within reason, especially after I had shown you my hospitality and shared my mead.”

Ouch. It’s always like this. I made the bed, so I have to sleep in it. This would be easier if I could remember what I did.

“I know, Hod. I am truly sorry,” I said, and then I turned to Ralof, “About your rebellion, perhaps I will go to Windhelm one day. But it won’t be today, or tomorrow. This armor belonged to your former comrade,” I gestured to what I was wearing, “I will leave it with you if you wish. Otherwise, I am going to sell it and purchase something that doesn’t label me with either side.”

“Gunjar would want its owner to use it as he or she saw fit. It is yours to sell if you chose to do so. Hopefully I will see you in Windhelm. The rebellion could use a man like you, if you can stay clear headed enough,” Ralof said with conviction.

“Ok, there is one last thing I need. If I don’t get to tell her myself, please thank Gerdur for me and tell her I will make it to the Jarl as soon as I am able,” I told them, and then I saluted Ralof in the manner I had seen his nephew use, and left the house.

There. As apologies go, that was pretty mild. Remember the house mother at that brothel in Leyawiin?

My next destination was the blacksmith. I could hear the clanking of hammer on steel, so I walked to the forge at the side of the building. A very muscular Nord was there, pounding the sparks out of a rod of red hot iron. He introduced himself as Alvor, and bragged that he could make a war hammer that would crack a giant’s skull like a walnut. I had spent many a day working for blacksmiths all over Cyrodiil, so I knew my way around a forge. Of course, that day’s wages often went to a night of merry-making. Then I would be too worn out and muzzy the next day and would get sacked by the smith.

I asked Alvor if he had any work that needed to be done around the shop. He needed some daggers and helmets made and said I could keep one of each as payment. I told him I would prefer coins over goods. He was fine with that, so I spent the rest of that afternoon working at the anvil, grindstone, and fitting bench. When I had finished the work he needed, Alvor allowed me to use the forge and bench for personal use. He traded tanned leather for my wolf pelts and some gold. I made myself a good set of leathers and was finished about an hour after sunset.

Since much of our business was based on trade and barter, I didn’t leave Alvor’s shop with much more coin than I had arrived with. I went back to the inn hoping that I had enough for a room. Orgnar instructed me to see Delphine, the woman that was brow-beating him during my first visit. She was at an alchemy table mixing up powdered ingredients for some type of potion. I apologized for interrupting and inquired about a room. She said a room would cost ten gold pieces for a day and a night. I paid her and she showed me to my room. It didn’t leave me any drinking money, but that was probably a good thing because I was exhausted. I hadn’t put in an afternoon at a smith’s shop in a long time. Muscles that I forgot I had were reminding me of their presence. I undressed and cleaned up at the wash basin. Looking at my bed, I realized that this wasn’t much of a room for the price.

You’ve slept in much worse many times.

I retired for the night with my plans rolling over in my thoughts, and fell into a deep, dreamless sleep.

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EDIT: Nit picked.
SubRosa
He seemed to be a less than happy fellow
If you had to put with Delphine, you would not be either! laugh.gif

I liked how the tune to the song was familiar to Val from decades before, even though the words had been changed. That is how folk songs stay in a culture, like Over The Hills and Far Away, which I have seen several different sets of lyrics for.

Well at least Val manned up and said he was sorry for whatever it was he did the last night. Looks like he has experience at that. He certainly has his share of character flaws! That is a good thing mind you. Perfect characters are boring. The ones with issues are the ones people can connect with, because they are as imperfect as those of us reading. Plus it is always inspiring to watch them grow and (hopefully) overcome their problems.
Grits
Ale is going bad? How does someone let that happen?

I’ve thought the same thing. How is ale left to go bad? This is Skyrim! ohmy.gif

Sounds like Val has a lot of experience with apologies. I like the natural way you are revealing Val’s character, the negatives along with the more endearing aspects. As SubRosa said it’s often the flaws that make a character really connect with readers.

I particularly enjoyed the way Val handled getting out from under the Stormcloak label. Despite his troubled heart and drunken behavior (and history of thievery) he does not seem to be an anti-social person.

Fix mess. Get coin. Lose Stormcloak label. See the blacksmith. Not necessarily in that order. That’s the plan.

Done and done. smile.gif I can’t find fault with Val’s work ethic!
Acadian
No worries on your level of detail. I think my record was nine episodes to cover one particularly busy day during the Tournament of Archers. I expect I’m not alone in endorsing that the journey is more important than the destination.


Another wonderfully descriptive, scene-setting opening paragraph that pops us right into the tavern.

A very clever way of revealing Val’s age! Merely a young elf in his fifties it seems. I’m with Grits in liking and chuckling over his sound plan of action.

“Ok. Hod, Ralof, have a seat,” I said. They looked up at me from their chairs, puzzled.’ - - Heh, here you elegantly display the problem with over rehearsing a ‘speech’ to the point of losing the ability to adjust when the venue would so dictate. Nicely done!

’There. As apologies go, that was pretty mild. Remember the house mother at that brothel in Leyawiin?’ - - What a delightfully teasing hint at another misadventure where alcohol was undoubtedly involved!

And an afternoon of hard, honest work at the forge to garner some leathers and a bit of gold. All in all, a good day!


Nit: ‘I didn’t leave the Alvor’s shop with much more coin than I had arrived with.’ - - You don’t want ‘the’ preceding ‘Alvor’s shop’ I’m sure.
mALX


On how long it takes in chapters to cover one day - I know exactly what you mean. 3 weeks can take three months of reading sometimes, and I've had to keep writing the time that has passed, afraid someone might think it was years, lol.

I like the way Val cleans up his messes as he goes so there are no burnt bridges left behind. Also liked his references to troubles he'd gotten into in Cyrodiil!

His skills are tremendous, he is def an asset to whichever side he gets on if he ever does choose. I think my favorite part of this chapter was his aching muscles after working at the Smithy's - that little detail added in brings the reality home perfectly! Awesome Write!

PS - if you are about to read chapter 5 on my story, if you can hold off a few days I have been re-writing it - just had a few things happen in RL since I started, and didn't get the re-write finished. Sorry about that, I'll try to hurry myself.



ThatSkyrimGuy
Let me start by apologizing for not getting to post in The Commentasaurus thread this week. RL prevented me from doing so, but I will get back at it on Sunday.

@ SubRosa - I am glad you can appreciate Valrimor's short-comings. I agree that perfectly behaved characters can be perfectly boring.

...like Over The Hills and Far Away, which I have seen several different sets of lyrics for. -- One of my favorite Led Zeppelin tunes! tongue.gif

@ Grits - I agree! Ale should never go bad in Skyrim! tongue.gif

Despite his troubled heart and drunken behavior (and history of thievery) he does not seem to be an anti-social person. -- Indeed, as long as he is sober...

@ Acadian - Good catch on the nit and appreciated. It has been picked. goodjob.gif

A very clever way of revealing Val’s age! Merely a young elf in his fifties it seems. -- Actually, the math had already been given in the Interlude when he was born, but I'm glad you liked that.

@ mALX - Val does try to clean up before moving on...or sometimes he just gets out of Dodge! tongue.gif

...Also liked his references to troubles he'd gotten into in Cyrodiil! -- Mostly a result of the author having loved the other game too. biggrin.gif

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Thanks again to all of you for your great comments, compliments, and continued following. Here is the next installment...

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Previously - Valrimor had cured his hangover and devised a set of plans to get started with his new life in Skyrim. He had made a “to do” list and was well on his way to completing it…

Chapter 10 – From Straight and Narrow to Crooked for a Cause


19th Last Seed, 4E 201

My room at The Sleeping Giant only had a few small windows set high on the wall above the head of my bed. When I awoke, scant light was coming in through them, and I was unable to discern whether or not the sun had fully risen yet. So I just lay there, reflecting on my plans. I had accomplished three of my four goals. I was down to the last one…get coin. Normally, this would require less than a full day’s “work”. But I had promised myself yesterday that I would try to gain the funds I needed honestly…legally. How to do that?

Hunt…

Hunting was probably my best bet. It played to my strengths, as I have had to stay keen with my bow skills. More often than not, it provided my food when I traveled. After bagging some deer, I could tan the hides of my kills and sell the leather, or even better, make armor and sell that instead. It seemed like a lot of work.

Concoct...

Alchemy was another option. I had certainly seen plenty of alchemical reagents during my walk from Helgen’s back door to Riverwood. And where one mushroom grows, so do more. I would have to ask Orgnar about using the inn’s alchemy table. This was certainly less strenuous than hunting and working at the forge, assuming there was a local demand for potions.

Time’s-a-wastin’…

With that thought, I rose, splashed some water from the basin on my face, and got dressed. The main hall was deserted, except for Orgnar behind the bar. The unmistakable aroma of bacon hung on the air, whetting my appetite. Delphine was talking to Orgnar from the kitchen. All I caught of it was something about the Riverwood Trader being robbed. Taking a seat, I ordered some bacon, cheese, and toasted bread with a glass of milk. There were breadsticks in a ceramic crock on the bar, so I helped myself to one and waited for my food. Orgnar soon returned with my order.

“I heard you talking to Delphine yesterday about some ale going bad,” I said to kick off a conversation while I ate.

“Yep, it’s turned alright. I already have a batch that I started a few weeks ago. Should be ready to serve in a couple days,” he replied, in his usual monotone and to-the-point style.

“So you brew your own ale then?” I asked.

“All of the inns in Skyrim brew their own ale. It doesn’t have the shelf life that wine and mead do. So having it shipped in is dodgy,” Orgnar explained, “The ales that are shipped over distance are quite hoppy and tend to the bitter side. An acquired taste for sure.”

“That’s interesting. So the selection of ales must be widely varied here in Skyrim,” I said, reaching for my milk to wash down some toast.

“Indeed. In the larger cities, the variety of ales, wines, and meads available to the palate of the discerning drinker is immense,” Orgnar said, “Right now, all I have on hand is my own brew, Sleeping Giant Ale. Up north, where temperatures stay much colder year round, they brew lagers and pilsners as well. It doesn’t stay cold enough in my cellar, so I only brew ale.”

There are lagers and pilsners in the cities to the north?

My mouth was watering. I had heard tell of these beers, but never tasted either one. Brewing ale could possibly be another source of income, or at least save me from spending as much money in taverns. Not for the immediate future, but certainly a consideration once I had a foothold here. For now, I needed to change the subject so I could get moving.

“So, Orgnar, is anyone around here looking for some hired help?”

“As a matter of fact, some of the Jarl’s men were passing through and left this notice with me,” he replied while rummaging under the bar. Then he handed me a wrinkled sheet of paper and said, “Here, check this out.”

The note stated that there was a reward for taking care of a bandit problem at a place called Valtheim Keep. I could ask the Jarl about it when I go to see him about the dragon, but that didn’t help my immediate situation.

“Do you need this back?” I asked.

“Keep it. No one around here is going that far down river.”

I folded the note and put it in my breast pocket, and then stood and asked, “What do I owe you for breakfast?”

“It comes with the room,” he replied.

As I turned to leave, the alchemy table caught my eye.

“One more thing,” I said, “can anyone use that alchemy table?”

“It works like this. You pay a two Septim fee per elixir. That covers the cost of the vials and lets me have a little pocket money. Clean up after yourself when you are done. Of course, you pay for any damage caused by explosions,” Orgnar replied. I bade him thanks and went out into the morning sun.

It occurred to me that, even though I had used it several times, I had never thoroughly examined my weaponry. I sat on the bench outside the inn and spun my quiver around to inspect my arrows. They were of low quality with iron heads.

The Empire sure did skimp when it came to outfitting their archers.

Two of the arrows were warped and useless. Three more needed some adjustment to the fletching. That left me nineteen acceptable shots. I turned my attention to the bow. It was just a simple long bow. Again, low quality, but serviceable. Either way, it would have to do until I could afford better. I stood and started toward the south entrance of the settlement. I was starting to get into a hunting frame of mind when the sign for The Riverwood Trader squeaked on its chain and caught my attention. Then I remembered what Delphine had said. Out of curiosity, I stepped into the shop, and apparently at a bad time.

“Well one of us has to do something!” a woman yelled at a man behind the counter, presumably the shopkeeper.

“I said no!” the man railed back at her, “No adventures! No theatrics! No thief-chasing!”

“Well what are you going to do then, huh? Let’s hear it!”

“We are done talking about this!” he yelled, and then noticed I had walked into the shop, “Oh, a customer. Sorry you had to hear that.”

The woman turned toward me, her face still full of fury, and then stomped off to a table near the fireplace and sat without saying anything else. I walked up to the counter and said, “No worries.”

“Welcome to the Riverwood Trader. I’m Lucan Valerius, proprietor and ever the target of my sister’s ire. I don’t know what you may have heard, but we are still open. Feel free to shop.”

“Well sir, it is about what I have heard that brought me in. Delphine was telling Orgnar this morning that the Riverwood Trader had been robbed,” I told him.

“Yes, it’s true. Damn thieves! They must have picked the door lock. Only one item was stolen. They left behind all of these treasures as if they were mere trinkets,” he said, spreading his arms as if to present his wares, “As I said, feel free to shop.”

I looked around the shop from where I stood. It was small by most standards, but there were several shelves filled with all manner of bric-a-brac. Some of it was useful, some of it not so much. I did notice some traveling gear.

“What was it they stole?” I asked, turning back to face Lucan.

“It was an ornament, a golden ornament in the shape of a dragon’s claw,” he replied.

“Was it worth a lot?” I pressed, while my mind turned this into a possible business venture.

“I have never had it appraised, but I would think so.”

“Would it be worth a lot to have someone retrieve it for you?” I queried, making my pitch.

“I do have some extra coin,” he mused, and then asked, “Would you be willing to try?”

“I would at that. But I can’t leave today. Alas, I am strapped for cash and will need to build my assets over the next week or so, to allow for the purchase of provisions…” I bemoaned, letting the words trail off and dropping a hint at the same time.

“I’ll tell you what. I’ll pay half up front if you will leave today. I’ll even throw in a bedroll,” he offered, taking the bait.

“You, my good man, have a deal,” I said with a smile, “Now, what can you tell me about these thieves? Any detail can help.”

“I can tell you where you will most likely find them. They will be in one of two places, either Embershard Mine or Bleak Falls Barrow.”

Bleak Falls Barrow was the place Ralof had showed to me, up on the mountain.

What was it he had said? Naught but evil…haunted by draugr…

“I know where the barrow is. Where is this mine?” I asked.

“If you head out of Riverwood to the south, you will eventually see some steps going up a hill to your left. Follow them and it will take you straight to the mine,” Lucan directed as he tossed a small sack of coins on the counter, “Here’s half. You can have that bedroll over there on the shelf.”

I took the money and bedroll, said a farewell to the two of them, and left the shop. I stopped at Alvor’s, hoping to purchase a better bow and a few more arrows. Unfortunately, I was still short of cash for the fine hunting bow that he had for sale. So I resigned to make do with what I had, adding five more arrows to my quiver to make my arsenal an even two dozen.

This was going to work out perfectly. I had promised myself that I would not steal to gain cash, but now I was going to steal anyway. Now I was going to rob some thieves.

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EDIT - Nits picked.
Acadian
My knowledge of ales, beers and meads is embarrassingly limited to the ability to properly spell ‘Budweiser Clydesdales’. laugh.gif Therefore, I found the lesson on ales very interesting. And, no doubt of great interest to Val as he daydreams of retiring to brew his own ale!

Val was very smooth as he parlayed the trader’s theft into a bedroll, small bag of gold and a paying task.

I like that you seem to limit his quiver capacity, and think that the quantity you use is sound. Quite some time ago, I adopted 25 as a max quiver capacity.

So, it looks like Val is off for a dungeon crawl. Hopefully, he’ll survive and even find that missing dragon claw. I'm anxious to see the tactics he'll use without dragons in his face or Nords to babysit at his side (assuming that he's going solo). goodjob.gif


Nit? Not sure if it’s intentional or not that the last two letter of this episode’s title are of a smaller font than the rest of the title.

Nit: ’So I just laid there, reflecting on my plans.’ - - Here you want lay vs laid. The verbs lay vs lie are quite confusing. To lay is to place something and requires an object. To lie is to recline. To make things much more confusing, the past of lay is laid, while the past tense of lie is lay. wacko.gif Googling ‘lay vs lie’ can generate some clarity on sorting out the differences of this complex little brain twister. One such site that can explain this better than I, and includes a little chart is here: http://www.writersdigest.com/online-editor/lay-vs-lie
mALX


I've been unable to get over here to read till today - first the electrical storm knocking down our power, then the tornado warning yesterday - what free time I've had I've been working on that mod all week finding the issue with the water not showing up and fixing it numerous times (just to have the issue still there, lol) - fixed now.

Over the weekend I'm going to be catching up my reading, so won't be able to do the re-write on chapter 5 of my story. I hate to ask, but can you give me another week before reading my story? I am so sorry for the delay, and will send you a PM as soon as it is up so you can get to it in your leisure - I apologize, and so appreciate your patience in both my delays in reading your latest chapter and keeping up with my updates on mine for you. embarrased.gif Thank you. <3


jack cloudy
Hohoho, looks like Hod didn't need to help with drinking all the mead. hubbahubba.gif But what happened that got them all so upset with drunk Val? I doubt it was the kitchenware.


It's nice to see him try a 'legal' way of making money and even more nice to see some planning and preparation. Like Acadian, I like the low number of arrows and how some were tossed out for being lousy. Ingame I end up hoarding the things (seriously, it's too much effort to remove them from my inventory) I remember not having that much of a problem in the day archery was nearly impossible to use and the arrows weighed a ton. But now? Why bother?

But for Val, less arrows is better. It keeps him light on his feet. Besides, he's Bosmer. He'll make every shot count.
SubRosa
here are lagers and pilsners in the cities to the north?
And probably Nords and Imperials, and other races too! laugh.gif Seriously, you gave us a nice discussion about the realities of brewing in Skyrim, something I never really thought about before.

Of course, you pay for any damage caused by explosions,”
biggrin.gif

Interesting thing about the iron arrowheads. The famous bodkin arrowheads that the Welsh/English Longbowmen used which have been recovered have had iron heads. The only steel heads found have been broad-bladed ones, more for hunting than war.

Well, at least Val found an honest way to make some coin, and less strenuous than chopping wood or digging up ore. Though a mite bit more dangerous than picking flowers and shooting deer either. Still, if he lives through Embershard and Bleak Falls, he'll likely be set for cash for some time!
Grits
I enjoyed Orgnar’s brewing discussion. I’m not such a fan of IPA, so I’d be ordering a pint of the Giant. tongue.gif

I love how Lucan presented the likely bandit hideouts. You’ve given this scene the comfortably familiar feeling but brought it to life with no trace of zero-weight arrows or quest markers. Very fun to read.

This was going to work out perfectly.

Uh oh. I know what happens whenever I say something like that! laugh.gif
ThatSkyrimGuy
First things first...Thanks to everyone for commenting and following along. I appreciate it very much. biggrin.gif

@ Acadian - Thank you so much for the lay vs. lie vs. laid vs. lay stuff! Very helpful indeed! goodjob.gif And good catch as well on the font in the title...it was an oops. Both nits fixed.

I like that you seem to limit his quiver capacity...
This is one thing about the game mechanics that I have always disliked. The fact that arrows and coins have no weight makes no sense.

@ mALX - I am glad that you have regained that sparkly juice that we all take for granted (electricity) and that the tornadoes missed BFE TN. No apologies needed and I'll look forward to your PM. Just good to hear that you and yours made it through the weather safe and sound.

@ jack cloudy - Yes indeed, Val is quite the capable drinker...just needs to control his temper.

Ingame I end up hoarding the things (seriously, it's too much effort to remove them from my inventory)
I am just the opposite. I RP rather diligently, so I make it a point to limit myself to two dozen. I would gladly add mods that give weight to arrows and coins, but I haven't bothered to look for them yet. I am sure there are some out there.

@ SubRosa - I have not researched arrow types, and perhaps I should, since I did go to the trouble to research bows. I have merely been going by the damage value in-game to gauge quality.

Seriously, you gave us a nice discussion about the realities of brewing in Skyrim, something I never really thought about before.
This is a direct by-product of my Bro-In-Law brewing his own beer. I have learned a lot about different types of beers by helping him out. Being a taste tester has its perks too! tongue.gif

@ Grits - Nor am I a fan of IPA, and I'm pleased that you know what it is! I couldn't use the term IPA in the discussion because there is no India in Tamriel. laugh.gif So I just had to call it "hoppy".

Uh oh. I know what happens whenever I say something like that!
Same here! laugh.gif

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On to today's installment...

Previously - After overhearing Delphine tell Orgnar about a robbery at The Riverwood Trader, Val had decided to investigate. This in turn led to an agreement with Lucan Valerius to bring the stolen Golden Claw back to its owner…
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Chapter 11 – Embershard Mine


19th Last Seed, 4E201 - Continued

I paused for a moment on my way out of Riverwood. It had become a beautiful late summer day. There are those down in Cyrodiil that would consider this weather autumnal, but cooler weather has never bothered me that much. A light breeze was whispering through the spruce boughs. Seeds with white feathery sails rode the air currents. I inhaled deeply and relished the fresh air scented with pine. I continued south on the road until I reached the steps that Lucan had directed me toward. I was enjoying the day so much that I made the turn off the road as casually as anyone taking an afternoon stroll. The steps wound up the hill, bending to my right. When I topped the rise, I heard a deep voice yell, “Hey!”

I barely had time to unsling my bow and get an arrow nocked before a rather large orc had closed half the distance between us. I shot while back pedaling down the stairs, so my aim was not true. The arrow clanked off of an iron pauldron covering his left shoulder and did nothing to slow my attacker. Fortune was with me however, as the bandit lost his balance on the top step while preparing to swing his mace. I side-stepped and watched the orc tumble past while I nocked a second arrow. He came to rest with his back against a tree, and I let the arrow fly. The iron head found his center mass, penetrating a weak spot in his armor. The orc let out a brief cry before my next shot shattered the bridge of his nose, silencing any chance for further calls of alarm. He was effectively pinned to the tree like a notice on a bulletin board.

Val, you idiot! Were you going to knock on the door with your bow on your back as well?

Thankful for not losing my life to carelessness, I continued toward the mine entrance more slowly with an arrow nocked to my bowstring. Fortunately, there were no other guards standing watch outside. The entrance itself was a set of double doors with a small window in each one. I peeked through one, hoping to see what was on the other side, but all I could make out was the glow of a torch. Gingerly, I pushed one of the doors. It didn’t move, so I pushed harder. It was still frozen in place. Pushing on the other door ended with the same result. Neither would budge no matter how hard I pushed. I reached toward my breast pocket for a lock pick, and then stopped when I noticed there was no keyhole.

A locked door with no lock? It must latch on the inside…

I stared at the unyielding entrance, perplexed. I considered knocking, but dismissed that as foolish because more than one person might answer. After a moment of further thought on the matter, I decided to try and pry my way in with my dagger, hopefully by lifting the latch with the blade. I held one door handle with my left hand and used my right to apply pressure between doors with the point of the dagger. The blade wouldn’t penetrate the crack. I released the door handle so I could use both hands on the hilt of the dagger, but my bracer strap caught on the knob…and pulled the door open.

Are you kidding me?

I looked over my shoulder, unconsciously checking for witnesses to my stupidity, and then entered the mine. As soon as I did so, an all too familiar claustrophobia set in.

Gods, I hate being underground…

I pulled my wine bottle from my backpack and took a healthy pull to calm my nerves. It took a few seconds for my eyes to adjust, so I had another swig and put it away. The only light was coming from a torch, set in a sconce near a cart, and some meager daylight from the doorway windows. The mineshaft sloped downward almost immediately. The cart was sitting at the top of a wooden track that paralleled the walkway. I listened carefully for sounds of activity. Not hearing any, I crept forward, doing my best to ignore the feeling that the walls were closing in on me.

If this was indeed a bandit lair, as the assailant tacked to the tree outside proposed, then there would be traps. Lighting was provided by torches set in sconces spaced far enough apart that seeing the ground between them was not easy. That would make spotting any traps just as difficult. Bandits tended to place trip lines or pressure plates near the entrance to their lairs. These particular thieves proved to be no different, but also showed ineptness at setting them, as a poorly placed trip line was plainly visible in the torchlight from a nearby sconce. It traversed the walkway, but not the cart track, so I merely walked around the end of the thing. The shaft turned left and appeared to lead into a larger chamber almost immediately. The echoes of trickling water danced off the walls. I froze when I heard voices.

“Aren’t you worried that someone will wander in here? This place isn’t exactly hidden, you know,” said a seemingly concerned denizen.

"Are we going over this again? I told you we have someone standing guard out there, and don’t forget about the rock trap. So don’t worry, and get some rest. Your shift is coming up and I don’t want you dozing off like last time!”

Little did the second voice realize that the guard was now decorating a tree trunk and his rock trap had been avoided with ease. I crept in a little closer. Directly in front of me, there was a wooden catwalk leading into the cavern. In the dim light, I could make out the silhouette of someone that had come up some stairs at the other end. He had turned away from me, heading into another passage on the other side of the chamber. Looking around, I could see the water below the catwalk. There was a fire down in the area that the bandit had come from. A couple bedrolls lay near it, and one appeared occupied. Suddenly, movement caught my eye. There was another silhouette, standing backlit in an opening that was higher and to the left of where the first had disappeared into the shadows.

Is this the same man? I wish I could see better!

The man turned around and walked away. A few seconds later, a bandit reappeared at the end of the catwalk. He was coming across! I drew my bowstring back and waited. But then he stopped, waited a few seconds, and returned the way he came. I let off on the bow, exhaling as quietly as I could.

It has to be the same guy. He is making his rounds…guard duty.

I acted quickly. I got the bottle of spider venom from my backpack and anointed the head of the arrow. I had it nocked and ready when the bandit guard reappeared in the other opening. I drew back and shot. I could not follow the flight in the dim lighting, but grinned as I heard the bandit grunt. A second later, he fell and did not move again.

One down…

Creeping out onto the catwalk, I kept an arrow nocked and tensed against my bowstring. Using every bit of my skill, I made it all the way to the stairs that led down to the camp area.

“What was that?” inquired a voice from below, and I saw a man rise from a bedroll. He reclined again, permanently, with some assistance from my bow. I looked and listened intently for any indication of other bandits in the area. Satisfied there were none, I continued deeper into the mine.

Discipline Val…keep going until you have them all…

I continued using this strategy, classic sneak and snipe, with perfect success. The drawback was that it was very time consuming and very tiring. By the time I had dispatched the remaining thieves and reached the opening at the other end of the mine, I was exhausted, hungry, and thirsty. Darkness had fallen outside the mine, and I still had to search corpses, cabinets, sacks, and barrels, to find that claw. If I had my tent, I would camp outside the rear entrance of the mine, but such was not the case. All I had was the bedroll and I was too tired to build a lean-to.

I went back into the mine, grabbed the first torch I came to, and retraced my steps back to what had been the obvious hub of activity in this lair. This was in the main cavern, where there was a well banked forge and other smith’s equipment. Up some stairs and across some catwalks were storage areas and a sleeping area. I went to a storeroom and found some bread and apples. I ate a quick meal, washed down by a couple of ales.

Gotta hand it to thieves, they always have some ale around…

I returned to the sleeping area and looked at the bedrolls. As a rule, bandits were a notoriously unhygienic lot. I decided to sleep on top of a bedroll rather than in it. This way I could leave my bedroll bundled for a quick escape if need be. I would search for the claw after a nap. With the aid of the ales that I had found and consumed, sleep came quickly.

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EDIT - Picked some self-discovered nits.
mALX



Chapter 10 - Val has a lot of skills to tap for resources, very impressive guy!

The details on the making of beers/ales - very interesting details there, also Val's musings on his equipment. Geez, I hate to see him tackle Bleak Falls Barrow with only a bow and 24 arrows! Urk!


Chapter 11 -

I especially liked Val's early bumbling on going in, first not being prepared - but the door had me in stitches!

LOVE Val's sneak and strike methods with the bow, very well written so it could be visually imagined as he went through! I liked his musings on the lack of hygiene among bandits, lol. Always thought the same myself. Really enjoyed this chapter, Val's way of going through the bandit lair quietly striking was so interesting and intriguing, I loved it !!
He and Buffy both fight from a vantage point and stay out of sight, very cool imagery !!

Awesome Write, both chapters - and I so apologize for getting behind, between the storms and that mod I have really gotten behind on everyone and feel terrible about it!





Acadian
Another wonderfully captivating opening paragraph that teases all the senses. With a twist – Val was so entranced by the day he wandered right up to the cave! ohmy.gif After his near miss with the orc and difficulty opening the door, I was getting worried that perhaps he was getting in over his head (easy for a Bosmer to do). Fortunately, his Bosmeri bow and stealth abilities helped him safely clear out the bandits. Val needs a ‘dispel cooties’ spell to cast on strange bedrolls – very handy. tongue.gif
SubRosa
Arrowheads actually tend to be pretty simple. They fall into two basic categories. There are broad-heads, which are best for unarmored targets like peasants or game. Then narrow-points like bodkins, which are made for piercing armor. Or at least have the right design to pierce armor. The aforementioned English bodkins were not really great for armored targets because they were made of iron instead of tempered steel. It should be noted that modern re creationists using English Longbows and bodkin arrows always use steel tipped arrows, which naturally work quite well against steel armor, but of course are historically inaccurate. The English Longbowman had to get really close to an armored opponent to get a successful arrow shot. For example at Agincourt the French had to advance on foot, uphill, through the mud, and the English archery still failed to stop them. The archers only turned the tide of the battle when they dropped their bows and joined in the melee with axes.

Of course the ES universe has a much wider scope of materials available for an archer. Where RL tends to just have iron or steel (and in a few cases bone or stone). I can imagine a broad-headed ebony arrow going through a steel breastplate like tissue paper. Or likewise a steel bodkin shattering on a glass breastplate.

There are a lot of different specific designs to the two types of heads of course. This pic gives some ideas, with armor-piercers at the top, broad-heads the bottom, and a sort of middle of the road head in between. Do some googling and you will find a lot more. Teresa used those middle leaf-shaped points early in her career, then later when she upgraded to elven steel moved to swallowtails (the very bottom).

Another interesting thing about the arrow shafts themselves, is that while many cultures used the standard three straight lines of fletching, some folks actually put the fletching on in a spiral pattern. That caused the arrow to spin just like rifling in a gun barrel, and made it more accurate.

In the TF I have the Imperials doing their fletching the standard way, and the Bosmer using the spiral pattern. I really did not use the regular bows from the game, like steel, silver, dwarven, etc... I only used two types. The longbow for the standard Imperial bow, and the composite bow (the Hunnish Bow to be more accurate) for the Bosmer design. In Morrowind they have chitin bows, but the story never went there. Other provinces would likely have their own special materials in the TF as well. I just never explored them.

*Phew*, on to the story now!

“Hey!”
Oops, Val's idyllic stroll through the countryside has led him right into a viper's nest! I had to laugh at the poor orc though, losing his footing on the steps and falling! Easy enough to believe though.

Then of course I was smiling at poor Val as the dastardly door stymied him. At least until his bracer intervened! biggrin.gif

Perhaps Val should learn a low yield shock spell for bedroll bugs? wink.gif
Darkness Eternal
Right. I have some catching up to do! Shame on me!

Chapter Four: Odd twist of fate alright. Looks like someone ate a nice dose of payback as Ralof took care of her! You know, I have to confess that I am starting to like Valrimor. He's just one of those characters that stick to you and is fun to read about. His sarcasm, as an example, is wonderful!

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“No, I would rather stay here and finish this wine,” I replied, “but lead on sir.” I replied with a flourishing gesture toward the door.


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The name of the chapter . . . I can only read it with a sexy deep voice. Yes . . . closer . . . into the bowels.

Chapter five: Imperials, and spiders, and bears. I can see where this is going.

A relief that he found some arrows, and an Imperial bow from the archer. He won't be needing that any longer wink.gif

"More for me."

Damn right! cool.gif

The battle was well-written and I loved Valrimor's self monologue and the bear scene. Shot the thing in her hind quarters with spider venom. It is potent stuff, indeed!

Interlude: My writing style of often like this. I personally enjoy it that way. I just find the use of first person narration difficult, but it certainly gives us a tale through the eyes of the character.

Now, what I love about this chapter here was a good description of what the world was like after the fall of the septims. War is out there and the world is left a nastier place than it was before. Though going by lore, corruption of guards and authorities have always been in the ES. Especially in the Waterfront District in the Imperial City, and I am quite sure everywhere else would have the fare shares of dirty guards. But you're spot on that war creates chaos, and breeds thievery and murder and bandits!

Here we see tavern brawls, broken lutes and Cyrodiilic brandy! Ah . . . a tavern is a tavern, isn't it? No matter where you go! Hehe!

So we get a glimpse of his mother, eh? Awesome. More backstory on his character and history that I've been dying to see. I will return to continue and catch up on him! Enjoying read so far! goodjob.gif
ThatSkyrimGuy
First things first...

@ mALX - You needn't apologize for getting behind. RL has a terrible habit of biting our backsides when we would rather it didn't. I'm just glad that normalcy has returned to your neck of the woods. Thanks so much for continuing to follow the story.

Geez, I hate to see him tackle Bleak Falls Barrow with only a bow and 24 arrows! Urk! -- Fear not...Of course, Val has no idea yet, but there will be plenty of ancient Nordic arrows for him to pick up in Bleak Falls Barrow. wink.gif

@ Acadian - Val did indeed have his senses teased as well, almost to a fault! I loved the quip about being in over his head being easy for a Bosmer. laugh.gif Thank you for the compliment on the opening.

Val needs a ‘dispel cooties’ spell to cast on strange bedrolls – very handy. -- A potion would be more Val's speed (Tamrielic Rid-A-Bug?)

@ SubRosa - Wow Ms. Rosa! You have given a wealth of arrowhead information, and it has pointed me to some very interesting articles on the history of such. Thanks so much!

I had to laugh at the poor orc though, losing his footing on the steps and falling! Easy enough to believe though. -- I know...I have always pictured orc bandits as big bumbling buffoons. Strong in the extreme, but not very coordinated or intelligent.

@ Darkness Eternal - Welcome back and thank you for rejoining! biggrin.gif

Interlude: My writing style of often like this. I personally enjoy it that way. I just find the use of first person narration difficult, but it certainly gives us a tale through the eyes of the character. -- The main reason I write in first person is exactly that. I find it easier to relate the protagonist’s feelings in first person. But I wanted the Interludes to be third person because Val is not relating the story. And speaking of Interludes...

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Thanks again to all of you for your kind words. This next installment will be another Interlude. To save you from having to go back and look at the dates on the first one, I'll tell you that Val is 3 in the first part and 7 in the second part...so here goes...I hope you enjoy it.

AUTHORS NOTE - This post has been edited from its original issue. I need to thank SubRosa for her invaluable help in resolving a "head-hopping" POV in the narrative. I have edited this to reflect the changes that she so helpfully pointed out. You rock SubRosa! Hug_emoticon.gif

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Interlude 2


16th Last Seed, 4E153

Valrimor sat at the table, scribbling with a piece of charcoal on the back side of an old copy of The Black Horse Courier. Elli was doing some cleaning around the house, and dusting was the task at hand.

“Ma?” he said to his mother, in the way that young children do before they pose a question.

“Yes, son?”

“Where’s my da?”

The question came when Ellinar was utterly unprepared for it, and completely defenseless. Her heart suddenly ached again, as it had every night for the past year and a half. Tears began to well in her eyes, and she had to turn away, feigning that she had gotten some dust in them.

“He’s away on a job,” she replied.

“What’s a job?” Val asked.

Elli sighed, pausing a moment to ponder explaining a job in terms that Val could understand, and then said, “It’s what people do to earn money, so they can buy food and clothes.”

“Oh,” he said, and returned to his masterpiece, adding a swirl here and a jagged line there. Without looking up from his work, the boy asked another question.

“When is he coming home?”

Now tears trickled down Elli’s cheeks. Her bottom lip quivered and her voice broke a bit when she answered him, “Soon, son. Very soon, I hope.”

“Good,” said Val, then held up his work of art with a proud smile, “Look ma!”

Elli wiped her eyes and turned toward her son. She wished that the boy looked like Erik, and then felt that familiar pang of guilt she got every time she had such thoughts. She did her best to put on a prideful smile and told Val that it was beautiful.

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21st First Seed, 4E157

The mage watched the boy with keen interest. The child was playing with a squirrel. No, playing wasn’t accurate. He was having the squirrel play for him. Of course the mage was aware of the Bosmer ability to command animals, but he had never seen a display like this. The boy was making the squirrel perform tricks and then rewarding it with pine nuts.

“Are you watching this, Varnel?” the mage asked his apprentice.

“Yes indeed, Master. I have never seen the ability used that way before,” Varnel replied, and then asked, “Shall we locate the parents?”

“I do believe so. I would be curious to see if his command of other forms of Magicka is equally as keen,” replied the mage.

Varnel stopped a passing woman and inquired as to where they might find the child’s parents. The woman pointed to a house just a few doors down. The mage directed Varnel to go and get the parents while he stayed and watched the boy further. The Altmer did as the mage requested, while the squirrel completed a double back flip.

“That is truly impressive, young mer,” said the mage, clapping his hands softly.


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Valrimor had decided to go outside and play. His mother was in one of her sad moods and she wasn’t much fun when she was like that. He walked up the street to see if his friend could play, but Lang was busy with chores. So Val went to his favorite alone place. It was a rock outcropping behind Hammer & Axe. He sat on the rock and waited for Bushy. It was a squirrel that he had taken to playing with when no one else could play, named for its big bushy tail. Some time back, Val had figured out that he was able to control animals with some sort of thinking trick. It wasn’t long before the squirrel showed up and Val tossed it a pine nut. Then he concentrated real hard and made Bushy do a flip, tossing another nut to it as a reward. After a few more flips and somersaults, Val was smiling and feeling better. Suddenly, he heard clapping. He looked up and saw a hooded man applauding the squirrel.

“That is truly impressive, young mer,” said the man.

“Who are you?” asked Val. The man had a kindly look, with a crooked smile and a light in his eyes.

“My name is Tolfdir,” the man replied, then continued, “It is amazing, what you can get that squirrel to do. Can you do other things with Magicka?”

“I made Bushy run up Miss Armelia’s skirt once, but I got in trouble for that,” said Val.

“No, I meant other Magicka, besides playing with animals.”


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Meanwhile, Varnel arrived at the house that the woman had indicated. He was about to knock on the door, secretly hoping that no one would be home. He was not fond of Bosmeri folk. His uncle had been killed by a rebellious tree-hugger when The Dominion had taken over Valenwood. But the Altmer apprentice would not jeopardize his standing by refusing a task from Master Tolfdir, so he dutifully knocked. A Bosmer lady answered the door. She looked as if she may have been crying, but her eyes widened when she saw who had knocked.

“What do the Thalmor want at this house?” she asked contemptuously, sneering on the word “Thalmor”.

“I am not here as a representative of The Dominion, ma’am. I am here at the behest of Master Tolfdir. He would like to speak with you about your boy,” Varnel replied, doing his best to keep a civil tongue after her snide salutation.

“What about him?” Elli asked, and stepped past the Altmer to look for Val. She saw him talking to a man in a hooded robe. “Who is that?”

“That is Master Tolf-”

“Val! Get over here, son,” Elli yelled.

Valrimor started toward his mother with Tolfdir on his heels, and Elli started to move toward Val. The Altmer apprentice grabbed Elli’s arm and said, “Ma’am, we just-”

“Get your hands off me you piece of Aldmeri dung!” raged Ellinar.

Varnel’s hand shot out and slapped Elli’s face hard enough to knock her down. He looked over toward Tolfdir to apologize, but noticed the boy instead. The child was staring at him with daggers for eyes, and blue-white balls of sparks were dancing in his palms.


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Valrimor was about to answer Tolfdir’s question about using Magicka when he heard the unmistakable voice of his mother.

“Val, get over here son,” she yelled from near their house.

There was a tall golden skinned elf in a robe similar to Tolfdir’s standing near her. Val stood and excused himself politely as he started walking toward his mother. The tall elf grabbed his mother’s arm and she pulled away abruptly, saying something to the elf. Suddenly, he saw the elf hit his mother and all reason left him. He was enraged in a way that he had never known in his young life. He let out a feral howl as he raised his arms. Lightning shot from both hands in undulating ribbons of blue-white fire. Sparkling tendrils had formed at the ends of the bolts. They had completely wrapped the Altmer’s head, dancing in and out of his eyes and ears. Varnel’s mouth opened in a scream of pain while sparks arced between his teeth. The rest of his body stood rigid as a post.


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Tolfdir had asked the boy if he could do other things with Magicka. The young mer responded that he had made the squirrel run up a lady’s skirt once. Chuckling a bit at the thought of it, Tolfdir told the boy that he meant other types of Magicka besides using his Command Animal ability. The boy was about to answer when a woman called out.

“Val, get over here son,” the woman yelled, undoubtedly the boy’s mother.

The boy, whom he now knew to be Val, excused himself politely and started walking toward the woman and Varnel. The mage followed him, looking forward to meeting his mother. Suddenly, the mage saw Varnel strike the woman, knocking her down. Everything else happened so fast that Tolfdir was caught completely by surprise. The boy had let out a yell and raised his arms. Before he knew it, his Altmer apprentice was being shocked to death by an astonishing display of concentrated lightning coming from Val’s outstretched hands. Tolfdir watched in horror for a moment and then gathered his wits enough to cast a Drain Magicka spell at the boy, but he was too late. When the lightning finally stopped, Varnel fell as a puppet whose strings had been severed. He lay with his scorched, eyeless skull gazing toward the sky. The boy seemed to come back to himself and looked at what he had done. He started crying hysterically. When his mother reached him, he jumped into her arms and sobbed uncontrollably.

“I didn’t mean to ma!” he cried into her shoulder.


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22nd First Seed, 4E157

Elli’s heart jumped when she heard the knock at the door. It would be the City Guards, come to take the two of them before the magistrate. Because the boy was so young, she would have to answer for his acts. She turned to her son and told him to just sit still and stay quiet, no matter what happened. Valrimor just nodded, with a look of fear and uncertainty. She opened the door, but was surprised to see that it was Tolfdir instead of the Bruma guards.

“Go away! You’ve caused enough harm,” Elli said, and started to close the door. Tolfdir stopped it with a firm hand. Val tensed in his chair.

“Please miss, allow me to enter. I mean no harm to you or the boy. We need to talk,” said Tolfdir.

Reluctantly, Elli gave way, but she admonished the mage against any ill intent and finished by saying, “Remember your friend.”

“He was not my friend,” Tolfdir said as he looked for a seat, “he was my student. I am an instructor at the College of Winterhold.”

“What is it you want with my son?” Elli asked.

“I did not travel all this way just for your son, miss…”

“Ellinar,” she said.

“Ellinar, we came in search of possible candidates for the College. Enrollment is way down ever since the unfortunate disaster in Winterhold. As a matter of fact, going all the way back to the Oblivion Crisis, practice of the arcane arts has fallen off all across Tamriel. This is of great concern to the Arch-Mage at the College. He fears that Tamriel is at risk of not being able to defend herself against daedra or some new arcane threat. So he sent me and my apprentice to recruit likely students. Your son fits that bill, especially after his display yesterday.”

Elli took a moment to absorb all that she had just heard, and then asked, “How much will it cost?”

“Only applicants pay tuition. There is no charge for candidates that we actively recruit. Your only cost would be emotional, as you would not be able to accompany him,” Tolfdir replied.

This held weight with Elli, on both sides of the scale. On the one hand, she would miss Val terribly, even if the boy was looking more and more like her rapist. She wasn’t sure if she could bear the loss of her one remaining true love. On the other hand, money was very tight. She was working as a serving girl and maid at Olav’s Tap and Tack, barely making enough to feed them both. She had gone without on some nights just so her son could eat. He would be well provided for at the College.

Valrimor had been listening to all of this, and when he sensed that his mother was seriously considering it, he spoke up, “You want me to go to a school and learn how to do what I did yesterday?” Panic was creeping into his voice. He turned to his mother then and begged, “Don’t make me go, ma. I made that man burnt and dead. I don’t ever want to do that again. I don’t want to learn how. Please don’t make me go!”

Elli went to her son and held him. Tolfdir looked at them both and tried to further his case.

“I don’t want to teach you how, boy. I want to teach you control. You seem to already have a grasp on the how part,” said the mage.

“It only happens when he is angry,” said Elli, “He doesn’t even realize he is doing it.” She related instances of burned toys and flying dishes that occurred in Val’s early years, and then finished with, “Yesterday was the first time it has happened in several years. I thought he was past it, or had learned to control it. It was definitely the first time it has ever been directed at a person.”

Tolfdir continued to press, speaking directly to Val, “I can teach you control. I can help you make sure that you never repeat what happened yesterday.”

“NO!” Val yelled, “I won’t do it. I won’t ever use that again, not even to learn how not to!”

Tolfdir rested his elbow in one hand and stroked his beard with the other for a minute, and then stood and gave a slight bow to the two of them. He went to the door, and then turned to face them again.

“Valrimor, I’ll not force you. Should you ever change your mind, you come to the College of Winterhold and request an audience with Master Tolfdir. Regardless of how far in the future that may be, I can help you, but only if and when you want that help.” said the mage. He turned to Elli and said, “You need not worry about the magistrate. I have spoken to him and informed him that I would not be pressing charges. I placed all of the blame solely on Varnel’s shoulders. Good day.”

With that, Tolfdir left. Val looked at his mother and promised that he would never do it again. Elli just hugged him and said, “I know, son.”

But she knew better. He had his father’s temper.
SubRosa
I love the idea of using an old Black Horse Courier for coloring paper! How perfect!

I see Val's mother is not ready to tell him the truth yet. I suspect that story will be a long time coming.

Tolfdir! Yay, how nice to meet my favorite absent-minded wizard from Skyrim.

Well things did not go well with Varnel. Looks like Val has had issues with controlling his emotions for a long time. Not that anyone is sorry for seeing an Altmer being killed after all. I suspect most of the Bruma guard simply said good riddance...



nits:
You have fallen into the trap of head-hopping, which many people not used to writing third person tend to do. What I mean is that you are showing us the inner dialogue of multiple characters in the same scene. For example, near the beginning of the Second Part we are privy to Varnel's inner thoughts about his brother being slain by Bosmer rebels. Then later in the same piece we are privy to Valrimor's thoughts as he sees Varnel hit his mother.

Now there are basically two different perspectives you can use when writing Third Person. There is Third Person Omniscient Perspective, where the audience knows what every character is thinking. Then there is Third Person Limited, where the reader only knows what a single character is thinking. Basically try to imagine your story as a movie. With Limited Perspective, you only have one camera and microphone, and they are mounted in the head of your narrative character. So the readers see, hear, think, feel, et... whatever that character alone does. But they do not know these things about anyone else. Omniscient is like Monday Night Football, where there are cameras and microphones everywhere, covering every angle of the action from everyone in the stadium. I suggest steering clear of Omniscient, as it just does not read well for many reasons, not in the least because in real life no one knows what everyone is thinking and feeling. We can only guess these things.

Now you can use more than one viewpoint character when writing Third Person Limited. However you need to end the scene completely before you switch viewpoint characters. The reason is that every time you switch viewpoints, it jars the reader. When a scene ends that is less of an issue than when you are in the middle of a scene. In the middle of a scene it is called head-hopping, and it is confusing to the reader.
jack cloudy
More flashbacky goodness! It's a shame Val takes after his father I suppose. That's gotta be unpleasant when they get the 'talk'. Although, I don't remember if they had the 'talk' before Val went to Skyrim.


The best part for me wasn't the emotional heartache however, or even the trauma Val got. The best part was how this flashback serves as a setup for another tool in Val's arsenal. Now if he uses magic in the future it won't feel like something pulled out of thin air. (granted, it had been mentioned before already, but actually seeing is better than just being told about it.)


And I too like Tolfdir. Maybe we'll get to see more of him at some point? wink.gif
ThatSkyrimGuy
There is now an author's note at the beginning of the latest post. This is due to the nit that SubRosa pointed out to me. My apologies to Jack for the corrections coming after his reading. And I'll take this opportunity to thank SubRosa again for her wonderful assistance.
Grits
Embershard:

The door antics had me laughing. If the bandits put a “Push” sign up they might not need a guard. tongue.gif

It was good to see Val settle his nerves in the old Nord way and then carefully proceed in the Bosmer manner. I like how he used the poison on the guard who could have alerted the other.

Ugh, and now he has to ransack the whole place. Hopefully he will find something to make the trip worth his while (and not too much more ale or he might need another nap).

Interlude 2:

I particularly liked Elli’s guilt over her thoughts about young Val’s appearance. While her heart aches for Erik her beloved son reminds her of her attacker.

Oh, and now we see that Val’s temper has always been a part of him. Yikes. And he has an open invitation to the College, but he hasn’t really considered going there. I wonder if he’ll change his mind.
mALX


Val making the squirrels do tricks - absolutely had to love this scene, what a huge idea to show other uses for the magic that a child might think up to entertain themselves! Real worldbuilding there, I love it!

Your description of Varnel's electrocution was AWESOME !!! It doesn't get better than that, LOVED how you wrote how the shock spell worked - and explained Val's not wanting that book in the dungeon!

Val's burnt toys was a touch of humor in perspective of his out of control anger - loved that, it reminded me of my own son's XBox controller getting thrown a few times, lol.

Whoa, a temper like his father - very powerful ending line !!!

Awesome Write, I loved this chapter!



Darkness Eternal
Time to officially catch up.

Chapter 6:

Out in the open, and on a path to Riverwood. Good to know Val made a real friend out of Ralov of Riverwood. I enjoyed the description of the flora and fauna here, and how our protagonist can relate somewhat to it. To him, its all natural.

We also get a glimpse of the barrow and the creatures within. I have a feeling our protagonist may just pay a visit to this lair and find himself under its shadow, too.

The Huntsman Creed. I'll have to remember that.

Chapter 7: We get some Nord warmth at last in a cozy home.

I must applaud your writing her. You certainly are no amateur when it comes to detailed writing and the young Stomcloak boy who's well on his way on almost becoming a little soldier wink.gif

You did well to add and expand upon that part of the tale, and once again I clap in the good prose and style of writing. Simple yet detailed and great enough to keep us entertained. With Valrimor, this certainly is made possible!

Chapter 8: This made me hungry.

Nord/Mer Hangover! You should have a mini side plot for that laugh.gif

After that near death experience at the Headsman's axe and a rough and perilous escape, some mead is good right about now( I know he had some wine back at Helgen, though, but not to this degree). Doesn't matter where in Nirn you go, heavy drinking almost certainly always leads to brawls. Don't call Val a tree hugger! nono.gif

Chapter 9: Ah. The inner workings of turmoil in a character's mind. This I like! You did well here. Characters with flaws and problems of their own makes us sympathize more with them. He did good to apologize. And I have a creeping feeling he's going to get into more trouble with his drinking problem. We're in Skyrim, Val, drinking ale and wine to Nords is as normal and regular as breathing. Ale is Skyrim's water!
ThatSkyrimGuy
First things first...

@ SubRosa - I love the idea of using an old Black Horse Courier for coloring paper! How perfect! -- What else are they good for? tongue.gif I actualy got the idea watching my step-son color on a kiddie placemat when we went out for dinner a while back.

I've already said it a couple times, but I have to thank you again for your help with "head-hopping". You ROCK! biggrin.gif

@ jack cloudy - More flashbacky goodness! -- Thanks! I find that I am really enjoying writing the Interludes. It makes me think outside the box.

@ Grits - If the bandits put a “Push” sign up they might not need a guard. -- To borrow a mALX-ism, there was a near Mt. Dew SPEW when I read that! laugh.gif Glad you enjoyed the door fiasco, and thanks!

@ mALX - LOVED how you wrote how the shock spell worked - and explained Val's not wanting that book in the dungeon! -- Thanks so much! smile.gif That dungeon flashback was actually the inspiration for this whole chapter.

@ Darkness Eternal - Time to officially catch up. -- And you're almost there! smile.gif Thanks for sticking with it and for your most kind comments.

Thanks again everyone! smile.gif Now, back to the story...

Previously: Valrimor had cleared Embershard Mine of bandits, leaving none alive, and was getting a well deserved nap after his sneaking and sniping…

Chapter 12 – Up to the Barrow


20th Last Seed, 4E 201

After my rest, it took me several hours to search Embershard Mine for Lucan’s claw. Unfortunately, the artifact still eluded me, but the search itself proved to be quite lucrative. I was able to leave the mine with considerably more coin than I entered with, along with several gems that I was sure would bring a nice price. It was impossible to haul out every saleable item in one trip. But if necessary, I could return for more.

I returned to Riverwood almost a full twenty-four hours from the time I had left Lucan’s shop, and The Riverwood Trader was my first destination now that I was back. I wanted to give my employer an update, as well as turn the gems I had found into coins. He was standing behind the counter when I entered, and seemed eager to hear what I had to say.

“I’m glad to see you back in one piece. So tell me, did you find those damned thieves?” he inquired.

“Well, I did find thieves. But apparently they were not the ones responsible for stealing your artifact. I searched every nook and cranny in Embershard Mine. There was no claw to be found. However, I did find these,” I said as I placed several gemstones on his counter.

“Nice! Very nice indeed!” he said, holding one up to a lantern and peering through it.

“Would you care to buy them? I need more cash to better equip myself before I head out for Bleak Falls Barrow and continue the search for your claw,” I asked, emphasizing the incentive for him to purchase the stones.

“Certainly, I’ll give you two hundred Septims for the lot,” Lucan offered.

It was less than I had hoped for, but I agreed to Lucan’s price. He paid me, and after telling him that I would be making a fresh start in the morning for the barrow, I bade him a good day and left the shop. I went straight to Alvor’s to purchase the hunting bow that I had been coveting. Between the gold that Lucan had paid for the gems, and the additional coin I garnered for selling a few pieces of fur armor to Alvor, I now had plenty of cash for the bow and additional arrows to restock my quiver. The hunting bow was nothing close to the quality of my own Elven bow, which was undoubtedly now part of the ruins of Helgen. However, it was substantially better than the long bow I had been using. First of all, the limbs had recurves. Also, the nocks for the bowstring were clad in steel. The long bow had been one single piece of wood, but this bow had separate limbs connected at a riser, with an arrow rest and a leather clad grip. Alvor even threw in a couple spare bowstrings and let me test the bow first behind his shop. I shot three arrows in rapid succession. All three flew true and hit within an inch of each other, clustered in the bulls-eye of the target. Extremely pleased with my new acquisition, I left the shop.

It was another gorgeous day and I suddenly had the urge for a walk in the woods. I could use the rest of the afternoon to harvest for an evening alchemy session, and perhaps even bag a deer. Few things in life are better than an afternoon stroll through a forest. The abundance of life, the aroma of wildflowers and pine, and the thrill of a hunt all have a quickening effect on my heart and will invariably bring a smile to my lips. I was already grinning with a spring in my step when I left the settlement.

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Later that evening I was seated at a table in The Sleeping Giant. I mopped up the last of my stew from my bowl with a piece of bread, ate it, and chased it down with the last of my wine. The bard was singing an ode to someone named Ragnar the Red. Orgnar passed by and I requisitioned another goblet of wine. Minutes later, he returned with it and took my dishes back with him. The wine was a dry white with a slight smokey undertone. It was delicious indeed.

The day had been a good one. I had elevated my status from destitute to nearly solvent. My sojourn into the woods had led to a deer kill and a fine harvest of various fungi and flora. I was able to barter the deer hide and some coin into a full set of camping gear. I also had made good use of the inn’s alchemy table, concocting some healing potions and some poisons to replace the spider venom I had used in the mine. I sat back in my chair with a smile as the bard concluded his song with a line about Ragnar’s red head rolling on a floor. Gulping down the rest of the goblet, I rose and headed to my room for a good night’s sleep. There was no telling what tomorrow’s trek might bring, so rest seemed the wise choice regardless of how good the wine tasted.

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21st Last Seed, 4E 201

The morning was grey and chilly. Low hanging clouds obscured the summits of the nearby mountains. The damp air threatened rain as I left the inn and headed north along the main road. It was such a complete difference from the day before, but I had heard that the weather was quick to change in Skyrim. Still, this felt more like the verge of winter than a late summer day in Last Seed.

I had checked all of my provisions and was satisfied that I had everything I would need. After crossing the river, I stayed to the left and followed the crude path that started upward toward my next task. Lucan had told me that there would be an old abandoned tower just a few hundred yards before the barrow. The first drops of rain began to fall well before I had located the landmark. By the time the tower was in sight, I had passed the snow line on the mountain and the rain had turned to mostly sleet. It was coming down at a much steadier pace. The wind was coming in cold gusts down the mountainside, occasionally causing the ice pellets to sting my cheeks.

The tower was in disrepair and looked as if it might topple at any moment. But what truly caught my attention was the glow of a lantern near its base. If the barrow was indeed a thieves’ den, it would only make sense that they would have an outpost here. Crouching and creeping slowly, I approached with an arrow at the ready on my bowstring. I managed to get very close without detection. A guard, for lack of a better term, was pacing a stone bridge that led to the entrance of the tower. He would disappear through the doorway and return at regular intervals. A woman with red war paint on her face was standing with her back to a spruce tree, undoubtedly seeking shelter from the precipitation beneath its boughs. Both sides of her head were shaved bald, leaving a shock of hair that stood straight up in a row that ran along the center of her scalp. After timing the guard’s trip, I added more red to the paint on her face with an arrow shot through her head and into the spruce trunk.

I’m getting good at tacking bandits to trees…

The guard evidently didn’t hear the arrow hit the tree, but immediately noticed something amiss upon his return and drew his sword. It was the last thing he would ever notice in his lifetime, thanks to an arrow through his breastbone. His sword clattered on the bridge deck as he fell off the stone arch, landing with a muffled thud on the snow below.

I looked at the old keep and debated whether or not to enter. The odds were slim that the claw would be in the tower, but I could not risk it. I was crossing the stone archway toward the entrance just in time to see it filled by what may have been the largest man I had ever seen. He had biceps as big as my thighs and thighs as big as my waist. I tried to stop myself, but a film of sleet had collected on the bridge. Instead of stopping and retreating, I lost my footing and sat down hard, biting on my tongue as my backside met the stone. Searing pain and blood filled my mouth instantly. My bow skittered away from me on the same carpet of ice pellets that had robbed me of my footing.

The huge Nord gave a yell and charged, raising an enormous war hammer as he did so. I tried to get up, but kept slipping, unable to get a foothold. I scrambled backward, looking and feeling akin to a mudcrab on a frozen pond. By chance, my hand found the sword of my earlier victim. Without hesitating, I grabbed it and launched it toward my attacker as hard as I could. It spun through the air, end over end. Because the Nord had both arms raised to deal a blow with the hammer, he was exposed and vulnerable. The point of the twirling sword found the bandit’s throat in an amazing stroke of luck. He stood there, momentarily dumbfounded, and then toppled over the side of the bridge. I stared for a second, equally dumbfounded, and then laid back, looking at the sky and sighing with relief. The sleet had started mixing with snow. Ice pellets and snowflakes were hitting me in the face as I took a moment to catch my breath.

I need a drink!

That thought motivated me to investigate the building. Not just for the claw, but for some ale or mead to numb my bleeding tongue. I spat a crimson stain on the bridge to try and get rid of some of the coppery taste that filled my mouth. I didn’t want to waste a healing potion on something as petty as a bleeding tongue. I gathered my bow and continued toward the entrance. Inside the tower, I did not find the claw during my search. However, I did find a couple bottles of ale and just over fifty Septims in a leather pouch. Even better, I found a healing potion, so I could heal my tongue after all. After doing so, I chugged down one bottle of ale, and then leisurely drank the other on my way out. I raised the bottle in a mock toast to my fallen attackers as I passed.

“Here’s to ya,” I quipped, and made my way toward the barrow in what had become a full blown snow storm.


Captain Hammer
I have added this to my reading list, making it my first official Skyrim-fic posted here (though I suppose I have to add others, now).

This is a well and truly impressive start, from the snippets in Valrimor's past that detail his origins and upbringing to the drunken flight through the caves beneath Helgen and then to Val's misadventures in Riverwood. It is a good start and I'm interested to see how this Nordic Wood Elf proceeds in the lands of Old Skyrim.
mALX



Your descriptions in this chapter (and in particular describing the weather the first two paragraphs of the 21st Last Seed) are outstanding!

That Nord must be absolutely enormous for Val to find him huge, ROFL !!! (I can say that now that I've seen Val's screenshot, lol).

I LOVED that Val slid on the ice here, really great idea to make him vulnerable at times (especially given his size and muscle mass!)

Also LOVED that he toasted the fallen enemy on the way out, nice touch! (But GAAAAH! He didn't search them! Lol).

Awesome Write !!!


Acadian
An interesting interlude with fun and squirrel games that turned deadly. The decision not to go to the College of Winterhold flowed quite naturally from the events and reactions in the scene. We glimpse some possible history of why Val seems to perhaps eschew spell casting. A chilling thought at the end as Elli laments that Val seems to carry the dark temper of his rapacious father.

And back from Embershard Mine with gems but no claw. A new bow and evening of white wine, then off to Bleak Falls Barrow.

Tacking more bandits to trees!

’My bow skittered away from me on the same carpet of ice pellets that had robbed me of my footing.’ - - Uh oh. This does not bode well – although it was fabulously worded by the writer. wink.gif Whew! You did a nice job of incorporating the fortuitous sword tossing while using Val’s own incredulity at his success to temper the feat. This was especially effective since it was preceded by his slipping, falling and back-skittling like a mud crab. tongue.gif
jack cloudy
Overconfidence comes before the fall. And the slapstick comedy battle. tongue.gif Val's shock at having it actually work was the punchline.

I also like how he takes a methodical approach to his search for the claw instead of psychically knowing where to go. That includes looking into sidespots on the offchance it is there. (One of the things I dislike about Skyrim. I literally got a quest recently where the NPC went "so bring me the staff." Without telling where the staff was, what it looked like etc. I had to go in the journal to find the location. kvleft.gif )


And finally, I really appreciate all the breaks he takes to upgrade his gear, eat, drink and just do some other stuff than quest. It helps sell that he's searching the claw as a means to an end (money) rather than an all-important goal in itself.

PS: I just saw one of Val's screenshots. He is one handsome pointy-eared Nord.
SubRosa
Selling off loot, a new bow, and then a nice stroll through the forest. Sounds like Wood Elf paradise!

Things were going so well until that icy bridge. Eeep! That was a close call.
ThatSkyrimGuy
First things first...

@ Captain Hammer - Thanks for joining in and thanks even more for your very kind words. I hope you will enjoy Val's further exploits.

@ mALX - Also LOVED that he toasted the fallen enemy on the way out, nice touch! (But GAAAAH! He didn't search them! Lol). -- Thanks mALX! The weather was too nasty to search the bodies, plus two had fallen off the bridge. Hopefully, none of them had the claw! wink.gif

@ Acadian - Welcome back from your sojourn to Montana.

You did a nice job of incorporating the fortuitous sword tossing while using Val’s own incredulity at his success to temper the feat. This was especially effective since it was preceded by his slipping, falling and back-skittling like a mud crab. -- Thank you so much! I have tried hard to show that Val reaching 51 years of age entailed skill in combat, but I don't want him to seem like a super hero, because he SO is not! tongue.gif

@ jack cloudy - One of the things I dislike about Skyrim. I literally got a quest recently where the NPC went "so bring me the staff." Without telling where the staff was, what it looked like etc. I had to go in the journal to find the location. -- Same here! How could Lucan have possibly known that the claw would be in Bleak Falls Barrow when he didn't know what the claw was for? tongue.gif Thanks for the comments.

@ SubRosa - Things were going so well until that icy bridge. Eeep! -- laugh.gif Having spent several years north of the Mason-Dixon Line, I well remember icy conditions on bridges. Thanks for the comments.

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Previously: Val was on his way up the mountain in worsening weather conditions when he encountered bandits at an outpost near the summit. Having disposed of them, he continued on to Bleak Falls Barrow…

Chapter 13 – Into Bleak Falls Barrow


21st Last Seed, 4E201 - Continued

When I left Riverwood, I had prided myself in being prepared for the journey. I had double checked my equipment and provisions and patted myself on the back for thinking of everything. How quickly things change, for now I cursed myself for not bringing a scarf and gloves. The snow storm was nothing short of a blizzard. The howling wind, blowing snow, and freezing temperatures were wreaking havoc on every square inch of exposed skin. I was actually looking forward to entering the barrow just to get out of this weather.

The structure loomed large ahead of me. Massive stone arches topped with some type of stylized animal head were its main feature, but the blinding snow made seeing details impossible. A wide set of stone stairs led upward to where I presumed the entrance to be. I had reached the base of the steps when something stung the side of my face. I spun to see what had done it, but nothing was there. Looking down, I saw an arrow lying in the snow, and then I saw a second arrow ricochet off the stone wall next to the stairs. Someone was shooting at me! I retreated to the nearest cover, the corner of the same stone wall at the base of the steps.

I nocked an arrow and peered around the corner. Visibility was hindered greatly by the blowing snow, but I could just make out a shadowy figure coming down the stairs. He appeared to have another arrow of his own nocked and ready. I drew back my bowstring, then leaned out, took quick aim, and shot. I immediately understood why my attacker had missed me with his first two attempts. The howling wind played with the arrow like a toy. I could not be sure where it struck, but it certainly was not in my approaching antagonist. I cursed the snowstorm under my breath as I ducked back behind my cover.

Enough of this!

I slung my bow and drew my sword, waiting for the bandit to get closer. When I guessed that he was close enough, I jumped out and charged my enemy while letting out a scream at the top of my lungs. The initial surprise was enough to catch the bandit off guard. He did manage to fend off my first swing with his bow, but that blow had knocked him off balance and finishing him off was quick and easy after that.

“WHAT IN THE GODS NAMES ARE YOU DOING OUT IN THIS WEATHER!” I raged into the dead man’s face, while withdrawing my sword from his rib cage.

Unbridled fury seized me and ran through my veins like molten metal. Reason and caution had fled me in its wake. I charged up the steps and encountered another bandit guard. I could feel the explosive heat building down my arms as I dropped my sword. The guard was amazed to see me, for a moment. I raised my arms and blasted the thief with intense fire that did not stop until I was no longer able to sustain it. His screams had gone silent well before his charred corpse collapsed into the snow with a hiss and a cloud of steam. Still raging with anger, my fury and I continued to charge toward the barrow entrance. Suddenly, I noticed there was less snow and wind. This caught my attention enough to prevent me from rushing headlong through the doors. I had stepped under an overhang that offered a minimal respite from the elements. I took a moment to catch my breath, while cursing myself for losing my temper so completely. At that moment, I realized that I had not retrieved my sword.

For Y’ffre’s sake Val! Where did THAT come from? You swore that would never happen again…

After collecting my sword and returning to the limited shelter of the overhang, I examined the entrance. It was a pair of heavy double doors that appeared ancient in the extreme. Opening them quietly might prove difficult. But I certainly couldn’t stand out here in the freezing cold and wait for someone to come by to grease the hinges. With my sword at the ready, I gently pulled on the large iron ring. I was pleasantly surprised at how easily and quietly the door opened, and I was even more pleased to find no one on the other side guarding it. Pulling the door only enough to allow for my passage, I stepped through cautiously so as not to alert nearby foes. It closed just as easily and silently as it had opened. I stood there for a moment, watching and listening.

I had entered a large chamber. It had the look of being a temple in days past. But now, holes in the roof were letting daylight and snowflakes in. The floor was littered with rubble. An acrid, sickly sweet odor occasionally accosted my nostrils, like meat that had started to turn. At the far end, I could see light and movement. Voices reverberated off the stone walls, but not clear enough for me to make out what was being said. I sheathed my sword and readied my bow. Staying close to the walls and in the shadows of the rubble piles, I crept slowly and silently toward the source of light and sound. There was a dead man and several dead skeevers lying in the middle of the floor, but it wasn’t safe to investigate yet.

That explains the smell…

I stopped when I was close enough to hear what was being said. Two bandits were standing near a fire, a fairly large man and a female mer, but what race I could not tell. She was very concerned about getting her fair share, and he was trying to allay her concerns.

You’re about to have more to worry about, sister…

Indeed she did when she saw her comrade fall with an arrow in the back of his skull. Her worries were short lived though, as was she. I waited a bit to allow for more bandits to appear. When none did, I slung my bow and approached the fire. I stood in its warmth for a few minutes, holding out my hands and thawing the rest of the cold from my bones. While standing there, I contemplated what had occurred outside. A shudder ran through me, as much from shedding the cold as well as trepidation over losing control of myself the way I had. A knot of fear that I had not felt since I was a child gnawed at my belly.

Stop thinking about that! This was a fluke…an anomaly…it won’t happen again…relax…

I closed my eyes and took a deep breath. The odors that permeated the chamber snapped me right back to reality and the present. Since there was no sign of any immediate danger, and the worst of the chill had left my body, the first thing I did was open my pack and grab my wine bottle. I started chugging and had a third of the bottle gone before I lowered it from my lips. Replacing the cork, I set the bottle next to my pack and decided to investigate the chamber. First, I walked back to the dead man I had seen earlier. Upon closer examination, I wished I hadn’t. What I had thought to be a man was recognizable as humanoid in shape only. The skeevers had been at him…her…it…with a vengeance. As I looked around, I realized that there were many dead skeevers. Over a dozen of the dead rodents were scattered about the chamber, but there were no signs of wounds on the vermin. It was as if they had dropped in their tracks. I looked back again at the miserable excuse for a corpse and noticed a pouch on its belt. When I leaned down to grab it, I caught the unmistakable odor of spider venom. This poor soul had been poisoned, and then the skeevers died from feasting on tainted flesh. The amount of venom must have been extreme for the body to reek of it so heavily. I used my dagger to cut the pouch loose, and then used it again on each of the dead skeevers to harvest their tails.

I returned to the fire, figuring there must be some food and drink around somewhere. While searching for provisions the bandits would no longer require, I saw a chest. A grin came to my lips as I walked toward it. I could already feel the claw in my hands. The chest was locked, but not for long. The lock popped with minimal effort, causing my smile to grow as I opened the chest, and then it fell away from my face when I viewed the contents. There was no claw to be had, but I did gain some coin and a green vial with the simple label of “Boost”.

Looks like I’m going deeper into the barrow…

I shuddered at the thought of what I was sure would be tight, confined spaces. My search for food and drink was fruitless, which meant I would have to dig into my own provisions. I couldn’t believe these bandits didn’t have some ale lying around somewhere. After a snack of bread and cheese, chased with more healthy swigs of wine, I eyed the bedrolls arranged around the fire. It couldn’t be later than early afternoon, but there was no telling when I might get a chance to rest once I entered the tunnels of the barrow. As I had done in Embershard mine, I decided to lie down on top of one of the bedrolls for a short nap. I kept my sword out of its scabbard and within quick reach, just in case. Before I slept, I mused with a furrowed brow about my earlier outburst. It nagged at me like a bothersome insect that wouldn’t go away until I killed it. I decided to do just that, and opened my backpack to get the wine bottle. I finished of the last of it and reclined again. Thoughts of childhood and uncontrolled power swirled through my head as I dozed off…

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Black space stretches for as far as I can see, or not see, in every direction. I am not falling or floating. I am not paralyzed, but I can’t go anywhere, because there is nowhere to go. I am simply existing somewhere in space and time with no indication as to the passing of either. Now I can make out two red points of light that seem to be approaching me. No…not points of light…eyes, with pupils that are elongated to the vertical…serpent’s eyes. I have seen these eyes before, but cannot recall where or when. Fear begins to rise in me as a scaly head comes into focus around the eyes. The sound of massive wings beating the air accompanies a low hissing growl that is coming from its mouth. Then it begins to speak in a strange language that I have never heard before, but I understand it fully…

“Come as I know you must. Come and grovel before me. We shall tear you asunder with the voices of mayhem, my minions and I. The others shall soften you and make you regret your inevitable fate, our fate, the fate of all. Perhaps if you grovel sufficiently, I shall spare your life. But do not hope for such, for your life spared will be a life of supplicating misery, as an example to all human kind. It shall be a life of bowing to my every whim and begging for me to spare you no longer. The days of men and mer have come to an end. Come as I know you must.”

Suddenly, fire, frost, and concussive force alternately burn, freeze, and pound me, over and over again in rapid succession. The agony seems endless with no hope of ever ending…I can do nothing but scream…





Acadian
Frying his foe certainly did seem to come out of the blue. But then not really, considering your recent and revealing interlude glimpse into Val’s past. I smiled as his fire rampage conjured an ominous admonishment from the ancient Incredible Hulk TV show: ‘Don’t make me angry; you wouldn’t like me when I’m angry.’ ohmy.gif

’Since there was no sign of any immediate danger, and the worst of the chill had left my body, the first thing I did...’ - - As soon as I got this far into the sentence, I already knew what the next clause would reveal: - - ’...was open my pack and grab my wine bottle.’ - - You have clearly trained us to understand this aspect of Val well! wink.gif

Uh oh. The mixture of dead bandits and skeevers that Val describes sounds like there be spiders. . . .

More wine to wash down some bread and cheese. Then on top of a bedroll for some rest – and a troubling dream.
mALX


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“WHAT IN THE GODS NAMES ARE YOU DOING OUT IN THIS WEATHER!” I raged into the dead man’s face, while withdrawing my sword from his rib cage.


ROFL! I’ll bet the bandit/guard was thinking the same thing, lol.

Val’s temper may stand him in good stead to handle enemies others can’t if he can just get mad at the right times, lol. Very impressive write on the tantrum that toasted the second guard, I loved that scene!

Val was like a detective figuring out the clues as to the dead skeever and corpse, I love the way his mind works! Also, Val really knows his poison ingredients. He is a tremendously well rounded person one would want to have along on any survival mission (as long as you never made him mad and alcohol was in limited supply, lol).

Ooh, Val’s nightmare was amazing and intriguing! Fantastic Write!


Darkness Eternal
Chapter 10: "Yarh Ha! Yarh ha! The Nord's life for me."

Drinking, hunting, and alchemy. Quite the dream he has. There is some coin to be had to brew one's own ale. Especially in a province like Skyrim, the income would be great. Val strikes me as a smart individual here, too. I agree with Acadian on the quiver amount.

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Two of the arrows were warped and useless. Three more needed some adjustment to the fletching. That left me nineteen acceptable shots.


Ah. This I like. One of my archer characters has a habit of always checking her arrows. Whenever and wherever possible she inspected each and every one of her arrows for straightness, for a single arrow with even the slightest amount of warp would bounce off target or fail to penetrate as deeply as it should—and this defect would increase as the range grew. One had to make sure their arrows were as stiff as possible, for the fact that an arrow that would flex in mid-flight would have the same defects as an arrow already warped. Glad Valrimor knows this just as well as any other archer! Besides, bows and arrows to him are like arms and legs.

Chapter 11: We start this chapter off with a bang with our fellow Bosmeri Nord getting attacked by an Orc!

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He was effectively pinned to the tree like a notice on a bulletin board.

I can picture the image in my head! Excellent! The intense confrontation must be scary but a bottle of wine will drown all fears. Most of em anyway. His skills with archery and sneaky tactics shows here. He dispatched those guards with grace! Props to him! He'll live another day to drink more wine!

Interlude, II:Fast forward a few years and we see a young Valrimor with the precious inquiries of his father's location. His childike innocence is both lovable and yet heartbreaking. I am interested in hearing more about his father and a reunion somehow, perhaps.

Those mages. I wonder what they want Val for. He certainly is skilled with his racia abilities, much to their amazement. Of course, it doesn't end up going good with the robes Altmer asking questions about Val.

Ah, and so he's had a temper since youth!

Chapter 12: When a Bosmer loses his bow, he has to replace it right away! Good thing does gems came in handy! 200 septims came in fine here. Good to see him take a break. He deserves it after a run in with those bandits and the mohawed one. Hilarious to see him toast to the dead . . . that he killed. He'll find the gesture one-sided, I'm afraid wink.gif


Chapter 13: My favorite number! And a good chapter!

A warrior or a person in combat knows that feelings such as anger does indeed help. There's a whole science behind it, but none of that now.

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Unbridled fury seized me and ran through my veins like molten metal. Reason and caution had fled me in its wake. I charged up the steps and encountered another bandit guard. I could feel the explosive heat building down my arms as I dropped my sword.


"Use your anger! It gives you focus, makes you stronger!"

Heh. Quite the mad fellow here. No bandit stands a chance against his fury!

I gotta say the descriptions and Val's continuous drinking is both wonderful and amusing to read. And before heading off to what I assume is a spider's domain after all the dead skeever's, he has a frightning nightmare. One that just might mean something significant. Good read!
SubRosa
Uh oh, Val was almost caught napping in the snowstorm by the archers outside the barrow.

The howling wind played with the arrow like a toy.
This was a wonderful description of the issues with shooting in a storm.

I see Teresa is not the only one with anger management issues. Vals seem to be far worse though!

But I certainly couldn’t stand out here in the freezing cold and wait for someone to come by to grease the hinges.
I loved this thought! biggrin.gif

I couldn’t believe these bandits didn’t have some ale lying around somewhere.
There is Val's Nord blood talking!

I can guess who that scaly and winged dream visitor was! After that, I think I would need more wine!
ThatSkyrimGuy
First things first...A Happy Independence Day to all my fellow Americans, and a fine Saturday to everyone else! biggrin.gif

@ Acadian - rollinglaugh.gif @ the David Banner reference! Think how well that would apply if Val was an Orc! tongue.gif

@ mALX - Inspector Valrimor is on the case! laugh.gif "Move along...nothing to see here...move along..."

@ Darkness Eternal - You're all caught up now! biggrin.gif Me thinks I should have been clearer about Val recovering his bow before he moved on...oops...

@ SubRosa - I see Teresa is not the only one with anger management issues. -- I haven't come across that in my reading yet, but I'll take your word for it. wink.gif
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@ Everyone - Thank you all so much for the kind comments. As always, it means a lot to me. happy.gif On to the next installment...
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Previously - After fighting his way through a tower, a blizzard, and the bandit base camp inside the barrow, Valrimor had decided to get some rest before continuing his quest for the claw…rest that was shortened by a harrowing dream…

Chapter 14 – Encountering Arvel


21st Last Seed, 4E201 – Continued

I awoke not knowing how long I had slept, with the nightmare still fresh in my head. It was the same recurring dream that I had experienced over and over, ever since being a child. The details varied a little from time to time, but the message was always the same, and always terrifying. The hair on my arms was still bristling from the imagery.

“Your inevitable fate, our fate, the fate of all” the beast had said. Is fate truly drawing me toward an inevitable destiny like some sort of mystic lodestone? I had always considered dragons to be the stuff of my nightmares, until Helgen…

I shook my head to get rid of these thoughts and looked around. There was no longer light coming in through the holes in the ceiling, so I guessed that it was likely dusk or later. I looked at the empty wine bottle next to the bedroll with a frown, disappointed that it couldn’t prevent a nightmare. With a sigh, I decided I better get moving. I rose and gathered my belongings, then looked with trepidation at the opening that led deeper into the barrow.

Gods, I hate this…

The passage was narrow, but not excessively so, and started sloping downward immediately. I shook off a momentary bout with claustrophobia and followed the tunnel. Strategically placed braziers allowed just enough light to not trip on the vines and roots that claimed much of the floor. Occasionally I would come across what looked like tombs made of black stone with small urns on top of them. Not wanting to leave any leaf unturned, I checked each vessel for the claw. Finding the artifact that easily would be far too much to hope for, but I had to be sure.

As the passage made a left turn, I quickly halted and crouched when I saw a man with a torch traversing the same route as I was. He was entering a chamber a short distance ahead of me. I remained in the shadows and watched him as he examined the room. After a moment, he approached a lever in front of a closed iron portcullis. When he pulled on it, I heard hissing sounds, followed by the dull thuds of impact. The man groaned and fell. I waited for what I thought to be a prudent amount of time before approaching the prostrate figure. When I reached him, I discovered the cause of his fall. Protruding from several locations on his body were small wooden pegs with rudimentary fletching, the back halves of darts that had spelled his demise. Looking up above the gate, I discerned several holes that must have been the source of the projectiles.

So…don’t pull the lever….yet…

A quick search of the lifeless dart target garnered a few Septims and some lock picks to add to my stock. Examining the room, I noticed three small pylons of stone. Each was on a slightly raised circular dais. There were stylized animal symbols inlaid on the faces of the stones. Two had eagles and one had a whale. There were also images of animals on the wall high above the gate, etched in bas relief on what looked like stone tablets. One of these had fallen to the floor, but was basically intact. Two of them had snakes and a third had the same whale as on one of the pylons. I walked over and examined the three miniature monoliths more closely. When I reached out to touch one, I discovered that it would spin easily on its dais, and that when I spun it, another side had the same snake as one of the etched tablets.

Could it be that simple?

I rotated all of the stones so that there were two snakes and a whale facing outward. Nothing happened. I looked over at the dead man and the lever. The conclusion I reached was inevitable.

You know you have to try it…

I walked over to the lever, took a deep breath and prepared to dive at the first hiss of an airborne dart. When I pulled it, the gate shot upward, granting access to the chamber beyond. With a sigh of relief, I looked down at the dart riddled corpse and said, “Brains before brawn, my good man,” and walked through the gateway. Just past the raised portcullis, there was a chest that yielded another fruitless search for the claw, but it provided more loot to add to my collection. To the left, a spiraling staircase led downward. A sound, not unlike a dog scratching at a door to get in, came up from below. I doubted there were any pets in here, so I readied an arrow before starting down. About halfway, I met the would-be pets as several skeevers bounded up the stairs toward their deaths. I harvested the tails and continued onward.

The stairwell ended at the entrance to a fairly large room. Cobwebs festooned every corner and surface. Dust covered benches and shelves dotted the perimeter of the room and a large table was featured at its center. There was a dark green ceramic vial on the table labeled, “A Touch of Stillness”.

Perfume?

I uncorked the vial and waved my hand over the top to get a whiff of the contents. The unmistakable odor of canis root and briar heart told me this was no perfume. It was a paralysis poison, although a weak one. With a smirk of approval, I added it to my pack and then noticed a scroll that was also on the table. When I picked it up, I glimpsed a stylized eye stamped into the wax seal. I dropped the rolled parchment as though it had burned me.

The Mage’s Guild? That organization has been dissolved for at least two hundred years…

Though I loathed the prospect of carrying anything to do with Magicka, I realized that something this old must be worth some hefty coin. Gingerly, I retrieved the scroll and placed in my pack, and then set my attention back to the task at hand. As I proceeded onward, I heard a voice coming from up ahead.

“Is…Is someone coming? Is that you, Harknir? Bjorn? Soling?” the voice inquired.

I nocked an arrow and continued. Perhaps the voice was referring to the two thieves I had dispatched and the third that became a dartboard. I noticed that some all too familiar instances of web work were becoming distinguishable from the random cobwebs. As I wound my way through the tunnel, the voice spoke again.

“I know I ran ahead with the claw, but I need help.”

Hearing a reference to the claw spurred me forward until I reached an opening that was completely walled off by spider silk. The voice pleaded for help from the chamber beyond. I searched for another entrance to the chamber, but found none. Sighing with frustration, I thought over what would be the best way to proceed. Undoubtedly, there would be at least one spider in the next room. I dosed an arrow with the paralysis poison and nocked it, holding the shaft to the riser with my left hand. With my right, I drew my dagger and began cutting away the webbing that blocked the opening.

I had no sooner finished and stepped into the chamber beyond when an immense spider dropped from the ceiling about a dozen paces away from me. The disembodied voice screamed with terror and panic. I tossed the dagger, and then drew the bowstring back and shot. The spider instantly froze in mid stride and before the effects of the poison wore off, I had pumped three more arrows into its face. It never moved again. The voice shifted from panic to gratitude.

“Oh Gods, thank you!” it said, “Now get me down!”

I looked in the direction of the voice and discerned a wiggling mass entangled in the webbing. The chamber itself was fairly large, its walls coated with intricate silk patterns designed to keep the weaver fed. I walked over to the giant arachnid and milked its fangs into the now empty vial of paralysis poison for future use.

“Don’t leave me here, for Arkay’s sake!” begged the voice, “Help me!”

“Shut up!” I barked back at him.

Looking around the chamber, I noticed several bundles of spider silk that were not wriggling and complaining as much as the one at the other side of the room. Some were skeevers; others were human, or at least human-ish. I recovered my dagger and harvested the tails from the sticky rodent corpses. I couldn’t bring myself to search the desiccated human forms.

“Get me down…GET ME DOWN!” demanded the whining voice from the other side of the room.

“Oh, for the love of Mara, SHUT…UP!” I yelled with growing irritation.

I also noted that there were several spider egg sacs scattered about the chamber. The eggs were an ingredient of one of my favorite potions, and fairly expensive when purchased at an alchemy shop. When combined with elves ear or juniper berries, it made an elixir I called “Sure Shot” that fortifies a marksman’s abilities. I harvested as many spider eggs as I could find. Finally, I walked toward the plaintive voice of what would have joined the dried up bundles on the floor, had I not intervened. The whiner was a Dunmer of average build, still wiggling and trying to get free of his binds. I paused a moment to consider his predicament, and how I could use it to my advantage.

“Who are you?” I asked.

“Arvel Nalwyn, Arvel the Swift to my associates. Now get me down before something else comes!” the elf replied.

“You are Arvel the Stuck, right now. You’re also kind of demanding for someone that needs my help,” I pointed out to the Dunmer, “and not to mention that were whining like a child just a few moments ago. Let’s talk about this claw a bit first.”

“Yes, yes…the claw. I know how it works. The claw…the markings…the door to the Hall of Stories…I know how it all fits together. If you help me down, I’ll show you. You won’t believe the power that the Nords have left here!”

“You have it then?” I asked.

“Have what?” Arvel replied.

“The Golden Claw, you idiot!”

“Yes, yes, yes,” Arvel assured me.

“Then give it to me first,” I demanded.

“Give what to you?”

“The blessed claw, you exasperating fetcher!” I raged.

“Now how do you propose I do that while I am all trussed up like this, hmmm?”

He had a point. Of course, I could have just slit the Dunmer’s throat while he was defenseless like this and taken the claw. But I have never been prone to murder, except in defense from a known enemy. If he charged me after I cut him down, that would be different. I took a moment to think on how to best be prepared for Arvel’s actions once he was free. Of course, this delay brought forth another round of complaints from the Dunmer, fueling my ire. I tried to cut him loose in such a way that he would be off balance when he was finally free of the webbing. This proved fruitless, as Arvel performed a feat of acrobatics that assured he would land feet first.

“You fool!” the Dunmer said as soon as his feet hit the floor, “Why should I share the treasure with anyone?”

And with that, Arvel turned and gave a superb example of why he had his nickname.

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EDIT - Nit picked.
Darkness Eternal
Happy Muricah day to you, too!

So Val awakens from the nightmare, and the hours seemed to go by. Some wine would be nice, no? Too bad it ran out! I enjoyed his journey deeper into the depths of the barrow. Somehow I think the darts killing the stranger saved his life, but he's still a smart fellow regardless.

“Brains before brawn, my good man,”

A lesson many Nord men need to learn . . .


The fight with the spider. For some reason I thought I would've been longer, but squashing a giant bug shouldn't seem so trivial. Four arrows is sufficient enough. Have a taste of your own medicine, Frostbite?

The hanging thief was just another shout-for-help away from being shot with an arrow. If I were Val, I would've been peeved too. His irritation showed brilliantly with his snide comment! I had a kick out of this one.
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“You are Arvel the Stuck, right now. You’re also kind of demanding for someone that needs my help.


What a dumb man, that thief? His stupidity knew no bounds laugh.gif, but his swiftness sure was his advantage, or perhaps his downside as Val(who we know has a temper) might not take betrayal or trickery too lightly. Maybe Arvel the Swift just might be named Arvel The Stuck if Val is tempted to stick him like a piggy!

Good chapter! As always, amusing and interesting to read!
Acadian
Once again, thanks for the invaluable little ‘Previously...’ summary that precedes your updates.

Val did a great job of sharing his observations and solution to that dart trapped portcullis.

Ugh, spider. Complete with wiggling and noisy Dunmeri prey.

’When combined with elves ear...’ - - Oh noes! ohmy.gif

I guess Arvel the Swift was kind of a lose-lose proposition. Nevertheless, it was good to hear Val’s internal deliberations. Oh well. Deeper into the dungeon it’ll be I gather.
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