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Olen
I'm glad to see this start again. I read it all over a couple of days a few months ago and it's excellent, I like the degree of emotion there is in the story, the hopes and fears of your characters are far more realistic than many fantasy stories which makes them come off the page nicely.

I also like the development of the plot, I shall have to go and re-read the rest of Sethyas Volume II...

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minque
This made my day! An update, a new chapter, continuing the story of Sethyas....ohhhh...Could it be any better? Well yeah...even more updates f course!

Anyway, a strong opening of chapter 4. The conversation between Rayne and Sethwas is well described, yet so sad...I mean I think she actually love him and I also think he loved her...once. Not immediately when thay got together, no he was still numb with grief over Ilmeni, but I honestly think he loved er at certain times. What made him stop loving her I can't exactly figure out but maybe it will be revealed, either here or in the Retcon-thread.

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Dear Reader,


Do you really think you only have one reader? *lol* I can assure you we are quite some folks who follow this story with utmost pleasure! wink.gif

I'm glad you decided to continue, which also inspire me.... wink.gif
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minque
Ooookay..on we go, right Seth? farewell simple life and uncomplicated love! Or what? It seems as he somehow got at ease with life...but that could be an illusion.

Anyway I can't wait to read about his encounter with Lexie, how on Nirn would a love-story with a goddess turn out, if that is what's going to happen? huh.gif

Sethyas, Sethyas...my thoughts are with you, and I wish you luck, as always! wink.gif
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Olen
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Good stuff, I'm glad you had the time to update.

I like the dimension you're bringing out with Almalexia, though I can't see it going well somehow...

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minque
Ohhh! You just made a dull depressing day to a really shiny one, Blackie! How I've been waiting for an update, sitting patiently..(ehhh???) hoping for it...

Aaaanyway, Seth is doing work for Lexie? Hehe I do hope he will get a nice reward when he accomplish his task.... wink.gif

I hope you will find the time and inspiration to continue....(like soon..)
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Olen
Wooo more Seth!

Great as ever, I like reading about him, brightens up a morning.

More... please verysad.gif

EDIT: you must be psycic - I got ninja'd with another part while replying biggrin.gif
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minque
YAYYY.....The Postmachine is back! Been away for two days, and what do I find? Three(!) updates!! Awesome!

You mention the Queen, may I ask who she is? I'm sort of senile these days, so I can't remember who she is...hmmm

I so much liked the list of artefacts and Seth's notes about them...
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Chrysamere - Retrieved after duel with Serenes Uncle, returned to the Imperial Legion.


So he gave that back? Very honorable...

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Ice Blade of the Monarch - Retrieved from Rotheran, given to Athyn Sarethi as present.


How he appreciated that gift!

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Ring of Phynaster - Retrieved from tomb, given to Serene Catraso as present.


Oh? Sweet, sweet brother...

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Staff of Magnus - Retrieved from Witches Coven in wilderness near Mount Kand. Currently in possession of Mages Guild on loan from Bal Isra Estate. Serene very disappointed in me.


Hmmm, yeah, she would have wanted him to keep that one

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Warlock's Ring - Retrieved from Witches Coven in the south. Gifted to Serene Catraso. Very grateful.


Why who wouldn't be?

Question is, which of these will he give to the museum? I mean all of the things represents a part of his life...I wonder and.....

I'm waiting for the next part, ..ohhhh aye! Love it, just love it
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Olen
The list was great. Very Seth.

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Auriel's Bow - Retrieved from Ghostgate. Details unimportant.
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Spear of Bitter Mercy - Heard that there was Sheogorath shrine below my apartment in Vivec, God of Insanity spoke to me. Spoke to crazy hermit. Killed giant netch with fork. Still not sure where the fork is.

These were brilliant, I love the dead-pan humour.

And now he's remaking Trueflame... I can't wait to read more.
canis216
Ooh, good to see this story resumed. I wonder who could have retired the pawnbroker? wink.gif
minque
Yessssss....more Sethyas! Humorous, brilliant as always! Blackieblackieblackie......S.G.M!
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minque
The things he went through! The nightmares....wonderful! Now get me right, it wasn't all pleasant for Sethyas, but it forced him forward, to what? I don't know, but it will be revealed, I'm sure of that.

I think we have come to get sort of more "under his skin" you tell about a Sethyas that is somewhat changed, for the better I want to believe...

I hope he will achieve what he's after when going under the city...and not get into such severe trouble that he'll be hurt (again)

One thing is for sure, someone on the island of Vvardenfell is thinking about him, hoping he's ok. Maybe this someone manage to reach him...who knows!

Wonderful updates, Blackie, makes me urge for more....
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Olen
I like it smile.gif. I'm not sure what else to say... its readible, well done and you really seem to be in the head of Sethyas, he's an very strong character and great to read about.

Your perspective on the whole nerevar thing is interesting and adds a side to the story which is fresh and unlike any other fanfic I've read. And Seth's reaction is bang on of course.

Great stuff.
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minque
NOOOOO! Not a cliffie....NOW!!! How do you think I'm gonna fall asleep tonight? Not knowing if that Seducer-thingy is going to kill my Seth or....hmmm well doing something else with him... wink.gif

The plot is really tightening now, and getting more and more interesting...

So I sincerely hope that I, when I return tomorrow evening, will get to know what happens to my favourite dunmer!

Pretty please...
Olen
And we meet the seducer... I want to know what happens.

I loved the Dwemer ghost, you got him bang on. I laughed a few times in his exchange with Seth.

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I swear, no one is happy with a simple blade that cleaves bone...always need the special effects.

Brilliant smile.gif He's so much better than old Yagrum.

Great stuff.
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Olen
Ooooh a new character. Novel idea too.

I wonder what Almalexia will amke of her...

I like this story, it's fun to read smile.gif
minque
OMG! three updates...heh you are the post machine again! heureka!

I'm sorry I haven't commented for three days, but RL really has taken its tribute out of me... mellow.gif

Now then, I'm truly impressed how you described the interaction between Seth and Pene, just brilliant, going from "oops I'm gonna die..to showing great power towards her". I must admit I'm not so familiar with Daedra's personality in common but this creature really is special. I wonder...will she be tied to Seth for all eternity?

Now of course, what will happen next? What will he do with her? what services can she provide? I really like the way this story is going, thrilling indeed...


(So he thought of Serene in the moment of truth? Very sweet. I assure you she got the message! wink.gif )
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minque
Oh la la...So the lil' seducer helped out in the fight? Pretty sweet of her I think. Or might it be her urge to serve her "master"

Anyway this was a great update, I will give you my favourite lines:
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That was honorable?" I asked bemused.

"You didn't say not too." she replied stoically.

"'Twas a jest. I appreciate your help." I replied.

"A...jest? If you appreciated it, then why state otherwise?"

"It's a mortal thing. Humor. It help us cope with danger--"

She began to laugh slightly, and I stopped mid-sentence, she knew us mortals better then I thought.


brilliant! Got a good laugh here

I love the interaction between Seth and Pene...what will this lead to???


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minque
Ahhhhh!!! She's a telepath!!!! YAYYY awesome! Good thing Seth got his fair share of practising that in the past huh! hehe!

So the sword got its flaming magicka....awesome (pyroil tar...wonder what the chemical formula of that is?..)

Now the scene is set....let the play begin! Looking so much forward to see what will happen next...

You're a blessed writer Blackie! Love it...
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Olen
The post machine is gathering momentum again biggrin.gif And so is this story, the end of Tribunal is excellent and I'm looking forward to reading about Seth doing it.

Pene is a good addition, she offers a chance to play Seth's character off and makes this piece even better. I'm surprised Almlexia didn't realise what she was, but then the godess is mad - you're certainly showing that.

As Minque said - love it smile.gif
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minque
Lovely! beautiful....The interactions between Pene and Seth is.....I don't know what to say....more than brilliant!?
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"Why are you Daedra so violent?" I asked her, raising a hand.

"I could ask you the same question." she retorted.


Well that's truth, right?? biggrin.gif
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"You can read my head. But you don't know my heart. As we broach into this prickly territory, let me set some rules. You can talk to me via telepathy, and you can read memories I give you permission to read. But no further than that. Are we clear?"


Why does this sound so familiar?


You know how happy I am that you continue this story, right?? I'm sorry I missed to comment on your second last post....nope I won't even try to excuse myself, you already know how RL can be sometimes...




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minque
ah, the clockwork city....well I've never seen it so this is going to be a treat! Let's hope Pene will be of some good assistance, I think Seth's gonna need it...

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Upon thy return, you shall know the love of Almalexia!


Now what does that mean?...Hehe
Olen
Woo good stuff, I haven't commented for a while but I have been reading about Seth's exploits. That bit of retcon lore piqued my interest too... Solstheim... Interesting.

Great stuff, your description of the clockwork city is already good and I'm fascinated to read more.
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Olen
Great stuff, using their own traps against them is always a good tactic and always entertaining to read.

The interplay between Seth and Pene is well done, she's becoming steadily less condescending and more open, especially with her examination of the dead fabricant and wondering what made it go. The comment about their ruins was brilliant too smile.gif
minque
Ohhh excellent writing! So good descriptions of the devices and stuff..hehe could almost see them jump through those swinging blades. That reminds me of something....a movie I think but I don't remember

S.G.M
Remko
And then..... nothing...... aaaaarrgghhhhh
I loved it Black Hand!
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Remko
What do you think? Of course I read the whole thing smile.gif
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Remko
An update soon? YAY!! biggrin.gif biggrin.gif


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