The story of Telina Delvanni


Prolouge..

Like it or not, I chose to start this story, and were really inspired by the storys of OverrideB1, Alexander, Treydog and Minque.

I do not know how good this story is, and cant write all times,so if you start to like it, please be patient.I would be wery happy if people were to give me some comments, even constructive criticism.



I started my life in the dark brotherhood. As a child, mere 8 months my parents were killed by an unknown assasin.When the guards checed the house, they found me, and sold me to the dark brotherhood, as cheap labour.

But the brotherhood had other needs for me, and I started the training to become an assasin.My skills grew, and being a dark elf, my natural resistance to fire helped me many a time. At my age fo fifteen I started to study the arts of magic,but only usefull skills ofcourse. My skills with the short blade, wakizashis especially grew to be wery dangerous, and when I were twenty years old, I were the most dangerous assasin in Cyrodiil.

So many would think that I would soon rise to he top ranks, one of the masers of the guild, didn't like me, so he gave me a writ on a member of the royal family,but he tipped the guards of.So when I was about to enter the big mansion, the guards came.

"Stop you" he said. But one of the guards, had already struck down on me. I easly dodged the blow, and in return the guard felt how it is to get a dagger in his lung.
In the cofusion I jumpede up on a wall, and took my poisonous darts out of my pack.

"Where is she"one yelled "there up on the""SPLAT" he had got the dart in his ugly face, and he fell dead to the floor, just as the others ran up on the wall.
I unscheated my twin wakizhashis and ran upon them.In a whirlwhind of fast blows on guard dropped to the grund with a severed artery, meanwhile i stabbed my wakizhashis into the back of one, crushed his spinal column, while the other got it in his neck.

Thinking this was a good place not to be, I jumped down into the courtyard,only to get a hammerblow in my head,so I was knocked out cold.

Waking up three days lateder with an unspeakable headache, I were taken to the local magistrate.Beacuse one of the guards had stuck agains me first, my counter attacks counted as self defense, but I had though trespassed royal territory, and were given three years in prison, and when I had finished my time I would be taken to court again.

I remeber little of my days in prison, altough my skills dropped rapidly, I were still wery good with shortblades. One day I where put on a blindfold, and taken into a carridge,where I where for three days,until I were taken onto a ship, wich would take me to a place, far beyond my imaginations

A good start. I'm curious how the law decided that killing guards was self defense, since any legal system I've seen counts killing guards, no matter who started it, as a really bad thing. Especially royal guards, and especially when trespassing on private property.

The story is very easy to follow, and you develop your ideas quite well. For your next post, you might want to consider running spell check or grammar check, which might help fix a couple of language issues. In spite of a couple language issues, this story is off to a great start and I look forward to seeing this story develop.

Edit: Welcome to the forums.

You have some good influences.



Try this.

I do not know how good this story is, and can’t write at all times, so if you start to like it, please be patient. I would be very happy if people were to give me some comments, even constructive criticism.

I started my life in the dark brotherhood. As a child, mere 8 months my parents were killed by an unknown assassin. When the guards searched the house, they found me, and sold me to the dark brotherhood, as cheap labor.

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Again. Try this

But the Dark Brotherhood had other needs for me, and I started the training to become an assassin. My skills grew, and being a dark elf, my natural resistance to fire helped me many a time. At my age of fifteen I started to study the arts of magic, but only useful skills of course. My skills with the short blade, wakizashis especially grew to be very dangerous, and when I was just twenty years old, I was known as the most dangerous assassin in Cyrodiil.

So many thought that I would soon rise to the top ranks that one of the masers of the guild, who didn't like me, gave me a writ on a member of the royal family. In any other case I would have declined this suicide mission but I was determined to show him I could do anything. Little did I know that before I began my mission the master had tipped the guards off with information of my plan. So when I was about to enter the big mansion, the guards came.

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"You there! Halt!" he said. But one of the guards had already begun to hammer away at me. I easily dodged the blow, and in return the guard felt how it is to get a dagger in his lung.
In the confusion I jumped up on a wall, and took my poisonous darts out of my pack.

"Where is she?” One yelled. "There up on the -" SPLAT! He had got a dart in his ugly face. He fell to the floor dead just as the others ran up on the wall. I unsheathed my twin wakizhashis and ran upon them. In a whirlwind of fast blows one guard dropped to the ground with a severed artery. Meanwhile I stabbed my wakizhashis into the back of one, crushed his spinal column and stabbed the other in his neck.

Changed a few sentences to make them run together smoother but the plot has not changed from your original.



Thinking that the walkway was not a good place to be I jumped down into the courtyard. However my appearance in the courtyard was only greeted with a hammer blow to my head. I was knocked out cold before I knew what happened.

Waking up three days later with an unspeakable headache. I was taken to the local magistrate. Because one of the guards had stuck against me first, my counter attacks counted as self-defense. But alas I had trespassed into royal property and for that I was given three years in prison. When I had finished my time I would be taken to court again.

I remember little of my days in prison and although my skills dropped rapidly I still was very good with short blades. One day I was forced to put on a blindfold and taken into a carriage. I stayed in that same cramped thing for three days before I was finally taken out and led onto a ship with a destination far beyond my expectations.

Again I changed some sentences. But you'll find your story is still as original as ever.

Overall I liked it and would love to read more of it. Please keep it coming.

First Mplantinga I have decided to make the story a little more real than morrowind are someplaces, beacuse the guard had aleredy struck me, In decided that the court would treat it as self defense (although in morrowind, if you taunt the guards, and the strike you, you will get no bounty on you.) To Jonajosa, thank you for comments. I will try to improve to get the readers more happy. I will try tho post more tonigth but cant promise anything. My internett is chrashed so I can only post on school and on a nett cafe.

When I was on that hatefull ship, I fell asleep almost instantly. I where walking over a sad landscape filled with a thich and harsh red ash. It was a sad place the ash was everywhere and I saw dead plants lying in this dead place. I was crying as I saw the pain this land had suffered, and I saw a big cliffracer fly over me.

Then a terrible, but in the same time beautiful voice came to me. "They have taken you from the imperial city's prison, first by carriage and now by boat, to the east to morrowind. Fear not for I am watchfull, you have been chosen". I awoke, by a voice and someone who slapped my face. "Wake up, stand up"I stood up, "you where dreaming, whats you name"? "Telina Delvanni" I said, and he quickly introdused himself as Jiub, he was in a poor state, he was thin and had a big scar over his eye.

"I heard them say we reached morrowind, I'm sure they'l let us go". "Quiet here comes the guard" he told me. The guard walked over to me and grabbed my wrist, to take me with him. "This is where you get off, come with me", he said. " I can walk on my own, thanks".

We walked up the deck's, I thought it would be pushing my luck, far to much to try and grab his sword and hammer him into tiny bits, "well well Telina, you cant have all in your way", I said to myself.
Up at the deck he said "now get off the ship, and go down to the census office".

I went down, but there I bumped into another guard, who insisted me on telling what race I was. "What an idiot, cant he see that I'm a dark elf", I thought inside me. After telling that obviously drunk idiot, that I was a dark elf he told me to get my, cute butt into the cencus and excise office.

Comments would be nice, both me and Telina would be very happy for all supporting comments.

Ye both would huh?

Okies....First it´s a good start....especially after you followed the good advices you already got....so I´d say go for it! It´s good, and if you also add things that is not encountered in-game it will be even better....it´s amusing to read about how other folks interpret the game and how they use their imagination to create a story about it!

So I´m looking forward to read more about Telina´s adventures!


Oh..say hello to her from me will you?

Chapter one:A new life

I walked into the office, and took a look around. The room was dimly lit, with the walls, slowly starting to lose its bright colour. As I walked into the room, I noticed all the silverware and books standing on the shelf, in the right side of the room. Especially I noticed the big limeware platter, wich would probably be worth over fivehundred septims.

At last I went over to the old and grey looking man, who had big pits on his ugly face, and the look he gave me clearly shoved a strong disgust for me, and all I stood for. "Ah there you are, we've been expecting you, now you'l have to be recorded before you're officially released, there are a few ways we can do this and the choise is yours".

Here he gave me the options of either answering his questions, filling the forms out myself or picking from the class list he had in front of him. "My name is Telina Delvanni,a mage and born under the sign of the lady", I chose to lie to him, as I did not want this kind of people to know that I was an assasin.

"Well then you answered my next question to, but before I stamp these papers, make sure this information is correct". Giving the piece of paper a small look, I nodded to show it was correct. "Good, now go to the captain in order to get your release fee".

I then started to walk around the room, making sure I had an "accidential"stumble, that knocked a candle or three over papers on Ergallas desk. With the guard and Ergalla buisy with putting the fire out, I realesed them from the heavy burden that Limeware platter would have of them, I then walked slowly out of the room and closed the door after me.

I was standing in a big hallway, and when I walked into the main room I found A "few" items of interest, wich included a worn out dagger and a flask of sujamma, a lot of silverware and other stuff. Thinkin they could by no means make sure that all off theese items would get the proper care I disposed them of the items, and walked out into the courtyard....

Much better. Nice detail on your suroundings in the building.

Thank you. I will propably dont be able to write before monday, but there might be a short one, with some humor in it( or so Telina tells me) tomorrow night...

So, do you like it. I shall write more tomorrow night, and will propably, come as far as entering addamasartus, but im not sure.. Telina has agreed in telling me some more, and would be happy of any replies... :P

So sorry I havent been ableto write in the last days, but now it comes.Im not that happy with it, but thats up to you to decide....




When I walked out onto the street, I noticed the buildings, had the same grey deceing look, and then it caugth me. The stench of fish, anfd lucky me who HATED fish. So in all of my luck I had landed up in a fishing village, the gods had to hate me.

I had only walked a few yard's, when I bumped into a person, that would never forget me, he was a little bosmer.. "Hello, are you the new exile?" And without even waiting for an answer he went on. "They took my ring, you know,the imperials, they hate poor old Fargoth for being lucky,so they always take my things". I was getting really tired of this little bosmer, and formed out a plan. I took out my money pouch and slipped the entire pouch into his hands.

"Well thank you"he said with a little smile, just as he was about to clap my shoulder, I stepped rapidly backwards, just as the guard saw it, and he ,missed my shoulder, and his hands hit my breasts. "How dare you" I screamed out, and just after he heard a loud -"SMACK" and he laid flat on the ground, with marks from my flat hand on his cheeks.

The guard came running to me, and said." I saw everything, and this is the last time Fargoth, so now we're going to the captain". I smirked widely as I walked into the tallest building on the street, wich I reckoned had to be the tradehouse.

When I entered I saw a large counter with a tall altmer named Arille standing behind it, so I walked up to him. "Greetings miss, what can I do for you"? "Well I would like to trade in these items, i'm carrying".

We bickered a lot on the price, but even with my low persuasion skills, I managed to get a whole ninehundred and sixtyfour septims for the items. When I was about to leave I forgot that all I had to defend me with, was a rusty old dagger, so I walked back, and told that I wanted some weapons, armour and spells.

After a while with price bickering, I walked away with a set of citin armour minus the helmet and greaves, aand a good old fasioned steel katana, which had started to become my favourite weapon in prison (but only training weapons in wood ofcourse), slightly happy with my purchase I walked up the stairs, only to be met by a large nord.....

This is definitely a good story which gets better with each new addition. I enjoyed your --unique--way of dealing with Fargoth. I've never understood why almost everyone is so hostile to him (I find him more funny than annoying), but the way Telina dealt with him is sure to satisfy many of the anti-Fargoth persuasion.

With regards to my earlier comment: I didn't mean to imply that you shouldn't add your own artistic flair to the story, since that is precisely what makes most of these stories great. I was just confused about that particular choice, since it didn't seem to make sense to me that you could call it self defense if you were caught trespassing. However, if that's the way you want things to be in the story, I'll just have to deal with it.

Keep up the great work. I look forward to seeing how this simple Mage (cough-Assassin-cough) will fare now that she has been released.

Nice fight with Fargoth. Thought it was rather enjoyable. Its different than most other stories we hear about Fargoth.

"Hello lassie, please, don't be afraid I wont hurt ye". He boomed on with his big voice. "Ye see, I a've tis problem, and was wonderen if ye would help me out"? "Whats the problem I asked with my little voice(compared to his)? "Ah tis is this filty litle elf named Fargoth, and he ceeps, delaying his protection money, in other words taxes, I don't know where he ceeps his money, but he ceeps stalking in town, around elleven o'clock, and if ye would hide up in the lighthouse, ye would propably be able to see where he goes".

"Well I would be deligthed to help you out, and I'm going rigth now". I smiled as I thougth inside me ("Ah finally some free money, and that idiot of a nord has practically handed them over to me"). I walked straigth into the lighthouse, without even caring of the woman who lived there. The ligth inside was dim, and it was wery dark, but when I came up it was a little lighter.

There I found yet another of this local alcohole, and a book named the wedding dowry, I walked outside, and the sight that met me was magnificant. I could see many miles ahead, but now was not the time for looking at the landscape, I sat down where a little mer would have difficoulties of seing me, and I started to read this book of mine.

The book was wery good, and my aleredy good skills with illusion, had improved, beacuse of what the book had taugth me. It was close to midnight when Fargot started to move around, and after ten boring minutes he walked into a pool, bent down by the treestump, and raised himself up quickly, and walked away. I stood up, but when I had done that Fargoth saw up against me, and I stepped backwards rapidly.

Mistake nimber one,(do not step rapidly backwards on the top of a tiny ligthouse). A long fall and some broken ribs and bruises later I lay at the ground, in . You guessed it, a deep muddy pool, with a large treestump in it.

I managed to raise myself to the ground, and a small glimmer, in the ground, to my left caugth my eye. There stood a large axe with a clear enchantment on it. I took it up and examined it, the name stood on ancient dunmeri, and from my translation(I was wery good with languages) the axe was named Ice Sting. I used the healing spell, Arille had sold me and I could feel my wounds slowly healing.

I walked over to the muddy pool fargoth had hid his stuff in, and examined the treestump, inside it I found a lockpick, a diamond, and nearly threehundred septims. I walked slowly towards the tradehouse, thinking that what that idiotic nord didn't know, wouldnt hurt him......

I'm glad to see that the fall from the lighthouse didn't cause any permanent damage. It helps to keep a story feeling real to have characters make mistakes like this. Poor Fargoth really has a hard time in this story; why can't we just STOP-THE-HATE?!?!? An excellent installment; please keep them coming.

Nice story! Glad you keep it up, always nice with a female main charachter!

Oh...but please don´t double-post in the future! Use the edit-button! m´kay?


Good work anyway!

Alrigth, I've been away for a while (I was at the hospital), but I have some upcoming posts on tuesday and friday, so please just wait a little more, and again, so sorry for my absence..

Sorry to hear that you were at the hospital. No apologies are necessary; we're glad to see you back and hope that you are feeling better. I will look forward to your upcoming posts.

So... many... commas. Try and cut down on those. I see never ending run on sentences. Try and make them into compund and complexe sentences. Also take cae of where you put your commas. The object of a preposition can never be the subject of a sentence.

So sorry, I was at the hospital again, I have been operated, after I was infected by cancer (but they discowered it so quickly, that I got rid of it wery quickly, the only downside is that I lost my hair, and is not allowed to do P.E in school for the next two monts, but Telina has to comfort me a little more, decided to share some more of her history to me)



When I walked into the dimly lit room, I was again, disgusted by the look’s of the decaying walls. I walked over to Arille, and asked “ eh Arille, you would’nt happen to know of a good bookseller, would you”? “Well, I have some book’s myself, this one actually came in two hours ago.”

I studied the book, the title was wery interesting, the title was “The legend of Aurora”, I read a little on the first page, and was so stunned by the text in it, that I bougth the book on the spot, without even trying to lover its hefty 269 septims value.

I walked up the crispy wooden stairs, and were met by the booming noise of Hrisskar. “Well lassie, a’ve ye found that Fargots hiding place”? “No” I answered quickly, “but he has started to meet a rather grimly looking orc” I lyed to him. After the numberous swearing of Hrisskar, I left him to himself, and walked over to a rather shaggy looking redguard bartender.

“Ah what may I do for you” she asked friendly. “Well give me a room for the nigth and some sujamma, with fried kwama eggs, by the way, you wouldnt happen to have a map lying around, that I could bu”? “So you are new here, huh, well in that case food and drink is on me, this is my map, you can keep it as I have no need for it.”.” The room will cost 13 septims.

I digged up 13 septims and started on the food. The egg’s was the funniest things I had tasted yet, after my egg’s was finished I stared to drink fom the sujamma. The purple liquid was strong tastin, and left a burning aftertaste in the mouth, but I noticed that after a few glasses the pain in my side was getting easier, I bid the bartender goodnigth and went into the room I had rented.

The bed was’nt the most comfortable, it was stuffed with hay and rough wool blankets, ignoring the itching wool, I layed down and started to read the book I had bougth. It was about a tale, of how one could use a blade called Aurora to negate the powers of everyone before you had used a machine to turn themselves into god’s, I doubted that this was the only book of irt’s series, and after reading a little further I found out that this legendary blade was to be found inside a legendary ruin called Sorordrin. I started to think of the powers this blade was supposed to have, and with the tougth of perhaps turning myself into a guard I fell asleep.

Thanks for another great update. I'm glad the operation went well, and that you seem to be feeling okay. A special thank you for continuing to work on this story through your illness.

Comments would be nice please. And can anyone give me some good tips, so that I can further improve this story.

I like your story a lot..but you wanted tips how to improve huh? <well one thing would be , when you write a conversation, it´s easier to follow it if you begin a new line when a new person talks!

Otherwise..it was fine!

Hey guys, I'm feeling much better now, and I have no syndroms of something bad, wich means the got me fully cured. Thanks for the advice and nice comments that everyone here has given me, and I shall give out another one tonigth (hopefully).

By the way, nice new signature Minque. Thanks alot guys, you have really helped me in my writing of this story.Alrigth here it comes.

As I woke up some five hours later I felt myself quite well, considering my bad fall, it took a while before I remembered where I was. So ten minutes I was dressed and was walking out of town. The nature would propably be fine if it wasn't for my hatred of being put into a place like this. As I were walking along the coast, I came to an oval door, the inscriptions, was almost impossible to read, as it had nearly wanished beacuse wind and weather,but the name was clear enough Omaren.

I guessed this was some kind of tomb, and my wery annoying (not to mention self dangerous) curiousness, made me go into the tomb. The tomb was quite dim, and was made up of some sandlooking walls, with full of deep cracks in it. I walked further into the tomb, first left turn, rigth turn left, left again, and I lost my count , and worried wether I would ever find my way out again. Just as I was about to turn back, I found myself in a large room, with a friendly looking ghost in it.

But the ghost wasn't that friendly and before I knew about it, it hadc thrown a fireball at me. I maneged to twist myself away from the hot flame, and drew my katana. I ran against it, and made many quick slashes at it, but by sword just went through it, without inflicting damage. And then I remembered the flame spell Arille had thougth me. And I screamed out the words.

"Incendio". The fireball hit the ghost, who started to dissapate in front of my eyes. I walked up to the little platform in front of me, and I saw a urn, whith a little ligth emnating it, so I turned the urn upside down, and out of it came a little ring, which I quickly put on my finger. I could feel the enchantments, boosting my magic skills by far, and the name on it, showed that this was actually the famous mentors ring itself. Feeling proud of my new discovery, I ran out of the tomb, ( I found the way out after some panicking twenty minutes).

As I walked up on the road, and started to walk back towards Seyda Neen, and as I was halfway there I heard a loud scream, and someone falling towards me, frome the sky, ( Is it a plane, a bird, a dog, no it is a Bosmer, hahaha). He hit the ground, with a sickening crunshing sound, and was dead. I walked over to the dead bosmer, and stripped him, of his cloak, the book, some interesting scrolls (actually dangerous, that I was going to sell at my first oppertunity) and a fine sword with a little spark spell.

On my way to the silt strider, I saw a door, half hidden in the mountain, with the name Addamasartus on it, with the tougth of exploring the cave I walked in. I had walked only one step before a ragefull shriek met me.

"You in'wha". So I hope you will like it, in the next post I will write about ( you really didn't think I was going to tell you where you). so for now, Goodnigth and god bless us

Liked it.

One tip though. Read your story out loud to yourself before posting it out on the web. It helps.

Quick thinking with the fireball. Another great installment; please keep them coming.

Hi again, my health is increasing more and more, so I'm getting better every day, which gives me increasing pleasure and happyness, to write this story. And also that people are actually watching it and replying on it. I am sorry to say though that this computer I'm writing on this time dont have Word, so there will propably some spelling/grammar mistakes, but please bear with me guy's and gal's.

Thanks for all replyes and have a good

The woman, was running towards me, with a spiky looking dagger in her hand. I had just managed to draw IceSting, when she was on me. She took a fast slash against my chest, but my chitin armour stopped it (barely). I struck back with a powerfull downward chop, and when she had raised her dagger, my axe hit it, with the same force as the hammer on the anvil. Her hand was pushed downwards, but to her luck, it went straight into my left tigh.

I screamed, and fell to the floor, dropping my axe, cursing my lack of greaves and holding my leg. She laghted at me, but that was all I needed, her to lower her guard. I quickly chanted the words "momento friskus", and my thigh was healing. I picked up IceSting, and started to rain down blow after blow on her. In the end, IceSting hit her in the shoulder and clipped her arm straight of, the enchantments on the axe was apparent, her shoulder was turning to ice, and soon her head was ice to, I pushed her backwards, and she fell down and hit the ground.

-"Crash". Her head broke into tiny pieces of ice and gore. I quickly took up the dagger, ready to throw it at the first person available. I walked deeper into this dark cave, it was full of stalagmites from the roof, and the walls was wery rough, and hard. As I opened a door, I had but taken two steps, when I heard the wery well known sound of something flying towards you. With a loud -"Chunk" the throwing dart had hit my armour and glanced of it.

I started to run towards the thrower, who was actually another female Dark Elf, and threw the chitin dagger towards her. But chitin daggers were apparently not made for throwing and it flew wide past her. I was nearly halfway up to her, when a fireball flew past me and missed me by inches, and that could only mean one thing, there was two of them and one of them was apparently a wery pissed off mage.

So there I was, trapped between a fireball throwing mage, and a girl, with a wery dangerous aim. I continued to run up against the throwing star girl though. As I was running up the stairs, one of the steps, was broken, and that step was ofcourse the one I had just placed my foot on. I broke trough it, and fell down into the water below me.

When I had reached land, I noticed a little rot, on the one of the pillars, supporting the main walkway. Picking up IceSting in a two-handed-grip, I started to chop away on the pillar. The effect was quick, the woodwork turned into ice, which was easily smashed to small pieces. After doing that on three pillars, the whole walkway fell down, and the two bandits, was impaled on the large and small lumber pieces, that fell on them.

It took a whole lot of time to reckognise what I had actually done.

"Great Telina, really great"."How am I going to get up back there now"? I asked calmly to myself.

The answer was on the now wery dead mage, as he carried 4 levitating potions. I drank deeply from one of them, and floated up to the doorway again, left the cave, and walked over to the siltstrider. There I was met, by a large man, who asked me where I wanted to go.

"Balmora please", and after giving him some of my precious septims, I walked into the strange animal, and fell asleep.

Wow; that was certainly an unexpected and unique way of dealing with the bandit cave. I'm glad to hear that you are continuing to get better, and that you are sharing your unique creativity with us. I look forward to seeing how Telina fares once she arrives in Balmora.

Hello, another on is coming up. I have now completed the first chapter and have started to write on the second one, but dont worry. I havn't posted more than about one half to three quarters of the firs one, and I shall try to make weekly updates. Yesterday, I was at the hospital for a check again, and walked out with the happy reults, of my cancer being completly gone, and I now only have to come in for a check each half year, the next four years. So since it Is closing to christmas, I decided to give you a long one. Enjoy, and have a merry

I heard a voice talking to me again. "wake up, we have arrived at Balmora, now I wust get back to Seyda-Neen".


I walked out of the stinking creature and was met by an awesome sight. The town was filled with large and small buildings, which were made of a strange mix of rock and sand.

As I was walking down the magnificent street, I saw signs over the buildings, and went towards the sign that had just caught my atension. On a sign, I saw two wands crossed over each other, with the name Mages Guild over it.

I quickly walked into the building, and was met by a female dark elf.
"Hello, what may I do for you outlander"? She asked quickly.

"Err, is it possible to join the Mages Guild, please". "Oh and bu the way, why do you call me outlander"? I asked with a strict tone.

"Ah well first, yes, I shall make you a member of the Mages Guild"." Second, I Call thee outlander, beacuse, you are not a native Dunmer as we Dark Elves call ourselves, now do you whish to hear the mages oath"?.

"No, I do not wish to hear the mages oath".

"Well, in that case, I name you associate, of the Mages Guild, now we give you cheaper travel and you are allowed to use any item in the equipment chests in all of the guild hall's, in Vvardenfell".

With that, I took my leave, contempted to find this Caius Cosades.
I walked out of the Guild hall, and started to walk down to the other side of the river, as the South Wall Cornerclub, would obviously be at the south side of the town.

I was disgusted by the look of this part of town, the garbage was just thrown outside of the door, and homeless people, suffering from some kind of addiction, were in all of the small backstreet's.

Finally I reached the club, and went inside. Inside it was a tence expectation in the air, as everybody were ready to kill anyone who tryed on something. In my way down the stairs, the Kahjiiti woman I had just passed actually talked to me.

"Hello, strange, can kahjiiti come with a suggestion", and without waiting for an answer, she continued. "Will stranger join the Thieves Guild"?" Kahjiitis name is Habashi Sugar Lip's by the way".

"NO I WILL NOT JOIN YOUR BLOODY GUILD, YOU WRETCHED BEING" I yelled at her, the thought of a stupid Kahjiit calling me stranger, asking me a question, without even waiting for an answer, and then come with the actual question, mede me wery angry.

When I came down I asked the man behind the counter. "Sorry, for my earlier yelling, but do you know where I can find Caius Cosades"?

"Well, no I dont, but Bacola upstairs will propably know".

I left the man, and walked back up th stairs, and when I was at the top of the stairs, Sugar Lips Habashi, came running towards me, yelling.
"Yes, yes, yes, I found it, I got a diamon". Just when she was about to pass me, I stepped my leg in front of her, and she ran straight into it and fell.

She flew to the bottom of the stairs, and hit the counter with the sound of both wood and bone splintering. Satisfied with my actions ( I hated all other races, sake for the Altmers, and maby a few Bosmers ) I walked up the stairs, and met up with Bacola.

"Hello, I trust you are Bacola"." You see, I must find the man named Caius Cosades, and I was told you know where to find him".

"Yes, firs you must go up to the last street, on this side of the river Odai, and walk to the other end, there in a small house is Caius, oh by the way you are never welcome in my club again, so get out of here quickly".

I walked yout of the club, and finally found the house. I knocked hard three times and went in.

Merry Chrismas folk's.

I certainly wasn't expecting the kind of behavior we have just seen from Telina. Very cold, uncaring, and racist. Certainly a different kind of character than the stories here usually feature. I'm curious to see how you're planning to develop this in the story.

Interesting, quality writing, as usual. I will look forward to seeing how her meeting with Caius will turn out.

Oh dear....now I must be honest....I did not like the way Telina was treating Sugar-.Lips!

No need to let her fall down the stairs....


But it´s a well written description of an evil woman....which now I unfortunately lost almost all sympathy for

First, I would like to explain Telina's history a little bit. She was brought up by assasin's, no family, the other races were treating her like scum. In prison, she lost all respect for the human race, beacuse she was beaten up wery much. The Kahjiit's and Argonias, are comletly different races, and she is kinda afraid of what's new, and what's different, but as she gets used to Morrowind, and isn't brainwashed by the dark brotherhood all the time she will get nicer.

Thank's though for being honest, and I promise I shall not do anything that evil against someone again. I hope you will forgive me especislly Minque, I did not meen to dissapoint anyone. .


Inside, I was met by the stench of something, I wasn't comletly sure of. In the corner by a bed, there stood a man, in travel stained pants, and bare chested.

-"Hello, are you Caius Cosades"? I asked rather stiffly.

-"Ah yes, I am Caius, and you must propably be Telina Delvanni".

-"How do you kno" I started, but he interrupted me.

-"How I know who you are, is unimportant, what is important though is that I am given that package and letter you were given".

Completly taken away by this man's knowledge, I handed over the package and letter, and let him read it without uttering a single word.

-"Hmm, it look's like the Emperor wants me to introduct you into the Blades, now before I give you any missions, you should get out and join a couple of factions, and get some experience, and now I can answer any questions you may have".

-"What is the Blades"? I asked.

-"The Blades are the Emperors spy network, we are his eyes and eares, now you shall be given the rank of novice in the Blades, and theese 200 septims, now I reckomend you get a room as it is getting late". He handed me over twenty 10 septims, and showed me out of the door.

My head was in rebellion, with my heart, I had been sent into prison, then taken to Morrowind, so that I could become a spy for the Emperor. -"NO Telina, you are going to take it nice and easy, pretend like you never met this guy, and never go back to that house again", I told myself.

As I found myself walking up the stairs, to the more civiliced part of Balmora, I saw an inn, with the name -Eight-Plates. I quickly went in, and sat myself by the bar. Right next to me, there sat a small Kahjiiti, who fore some reasons, were crying.

-"Now what's wrong with you, little child", I asked, not even knowing what had made me do that.

-"Kahjiitis mum, Shugar-Lips-Habashi, lyes at hospital wounded, but Kahjiiti dont have enough money, to pay for treatmen, and if mum dye, Kahjiiti dont have house or work", she said, and now the tairs, were falling out of her eyes.

Now I was feeling really bad, I hadnt meant to severely injure the poor being, just cause a little pain. -"Dont worry, I shall pay for the treatment, how much do it cost"?

-"Treatment of mum, cost four diamonds, and Kahjiiti dont even have money enough for a half diamond", she said still sobbing.

-"Well, do you know of any where they sell diamonds"?

-"Diamonds for sale at Nalcyria-The-White-Heaven, the shop is north-east of here, in night she sleeps at bed upstairs, but must be carefull though, guards go outside often".

By those words, I told her to stay there untill I came back, and then I walked outside, and headed up to the alchimist shop. Some five hours later, the lights had been off, for two hours, so I sneakt up to the door, and took out my lockpick.

The lock, would been opened in just a few seconds, if I had been as good as I was back in Cyrodiil, but now I wasn't neither of the parts, and the lockpick snapped in two just as the lock was opened.

I quickly walked inn without making as little sound as possible. After a few minutes, I found it. A box with no less than twenty diamonds in it. Thinking a while, I decided that I should not take more than the four diamonds needed, so I only took four.

What was going on to me, I wondered, the prison, had propably made me soft, and I actually liked it, it gave me an actual chance to be a woman. I had just taken my hand on the door, when a voice cut through the air.

-"What are you doing in my shop, with my diamonds".

That was all for today, and again sorry, I did not mean to be a racist or to dissapoint my reader's, so I hope you will forgive me.

A rather rapid turn-around for Telina, to go from sending sugar-lips down the stairs to offering to pay for her treatment. This character becomes more interesting with each new installment. And now she's been caught stealing; I can't wait to see how that works out.

I can't speak for Minque, but my comments weren't meant to criticize you. I was not offended by what you wrote, I was just a little shocked that Telina behaved in that manner. It's your story; if you want your character to start out cruel and slowly learn kindness, then you should do that. The history you gave at the beginning of this latest post could have been worked into the story so that when she was at the South Wall, we would have understood why she was so cruel. Keep up the great work. Our criticisms are of Telina, not you; if you need her to be a bit cruel for a while, then you should do that. It's your story after all. I'm sure I can speak for Minque by saying that we'll read it regardless, especially if you're planning to have Telina learn kindness as the story progresses.

(Sorry for the insanely long comment. I hope I've managed to clarify my earlier comments.)

Oh dear me! Now I feel guilty..I was too harsh I guess! I do appreciate your writing! It´s just that I dislike unnecessary cruelty! And I love Khajiities....

But it was a good thing you explained about Telina´s background, that makes us understand why she acts like she does sometimes.

Now by all means continue your story.....and I hope you have no bad feelings towards me for my criticism...it was not meant like that!

Thanks Minque and mplantinga, I have no bad feelings, for anyone of you, but you did manage to get me feel rather guilty, and I suppose Telina was rather dodgy if not cruel.

Thanks for still wanting to follow this story, and I shall hopefully post another one tomorrow.

And again, thanks.

While I do see how you would misunderstand Minques comment I would like you to always remember this: Don't let others dislike of your ideas change your way of thinking. Don't be afraid to post your thoughts about someone or something in your story, and never ever feel guilty for the way you write your story.

Just a few things I thought might help you in the future. I had to learn them the hard way.

Got caught up and I must say there is an improvement from your earlier posts. Keep it up.

-"Oh no", I yelled. I ran out the door, and sprinted towards the Eight-Plates, as fast as I could. Meanwhile I heard the guards yelling me to stop.

I finally reached the Eight-Plates, and ran inside and saw the Kahjiiti girl. I quickly threw the bag with diamonds to her, after half-a-minute, she was gone, and I felt an armoured gauntlet on my shoulder.

-"Lets move outlander, you are going to the jail in the fort".

Then I was knocked out, ( I still dont know why the guards normally do that to poor Telina) given a bag over my head and then taken to the fort. After seven hours I woke up, just to find myself behind the good oldfashioned hatefull steel bars.

-"Hello, guard, anyone come here now". I yelled.

-"What do you want, Dark Elf" a wery big imperial asked me.

-"I want to get out of here" I said with a wery angry tone,( and there was aleredy shooting small sparks from my hands beacuse of my magic skills, was getting forced out by my anger).

-"Oh yes, you shall gat out from here in two weeks".

My anger was getting wery strong. I had just done a little thing. ( Wait a minute, I had resisted arrest, trespassed again, stolen a couple of diamond's and called the guards some terrible things after I woke up. Now I could understand why I had been given two weeks.)

Suddenly iy just snapped, I shouted out the words, -"Fiera Cronos". Fierce lightning bolts was pouring out of my fingers, and the guard screamed as the fierce electric powers was flowing trough him, and the metal armour was just increasing it.

I did not stop, before the armour lay broken and the awful stench of burnt flesh reached my nose. Lucklily the guards in the higher floors had not heard the screams of their friend, and I quickly disposed his body by throwing a fireball at him.

And now was the big old problem, how to breach out of an armoured cell, I lost all hope of getting out after an hour, and fell asleep, hoping that they was not going to send someone down to check at me.

A small -"Click" from the lock made me wake up, there stood the small Kahjiiti girl, with all my items and a potion off what looked like invisibility.

-"Come, take potion, drink and run out of here".

I did not even have the time to thank her before she was gone. Normally i hated beings like her, but the Kahjiits was actually getting almost acceptable to me. I heard the sound of a door opening, so I emptied the bottle, and ran as fast as I could back to balmora.

When I was back at the upper parts of town, I saw the sign on a building.

The Morag Tong.




Hope you enjoy, and I sincerely hope that you know why I wrote Morag tong at the end of this post. Merry Christmas.

But but but. Where is everybody? I know this is propably no meaning in this post, but I just want you'all to know that in the christmas holiday I propably wont be able to post anything, but to make it up to you I shall try to post a long one tomorrow, so it would be nice if ye commented on the last one before I post another one, in case of double posting.

Hey, Ok, it´s a good update...I like it...really, Telina had a nice experience with a Khajiiti huh! Well that´s GOOD! yay...see..kitties are nice, I told ya! Keep it up I tell you!

Heh...I could almost say the same, about comments..I updated my story not so long ago..but.....not too many comments, so But but,,....I guess that´s life, ppl are too busy to read just now

HELLO. finally it comes, the next update on Telinas tale. Hope to have some comments to Christmas, as nothing would please me more right now than to get some replies from me reades in this story.

* Looks out the window for a few moments, watching the snow get increasingly larger*



I walked into the guild hall, and was met by an rather dark room. The room was almost pitch black, only two small red candles was lighting up the room. The red light gave me the creeps all the way down my spine, and I would be glad when I got out of here.

I avoided anyone in the first floor, and walked straightly to the top as the manager would propably be there. After I came to the top he stood there, in a plain black suit, and he turned his head towards me.

-"Hello, outlander". "Are you here to know the newest rumours, or do you want to join the Morag Tong"?

-"The Morag Tong"? I asked unkowingly.

-"Yes, the Morag Tong is the assasination guild here in Morrowind, it is comletly legal, and acts nearly like a part of the law system". "If youkill someone for the guild, you will have gotten a writ for that person, and if you get arrested for that murder you just show the guard the writ, and then you are free to go".

-"Oh yes, I would like to join up", I said, just as he opned his mouth again.

-"Sure you can join outlander, there is one catch though".

-"Catch, what do you mean about catch"?

-"Well you see, only the guildmaster may join in a new person, and therfore you must prove youself, by finding our secret guildhall in Vivec, good luck".

I walked out again, and decided that it was not the time to go to Vivec yet. So instead I walked back to the siltstrider, and bought a ticket to Ald-Rhun.

Well done, this story is great! This is starting to be a thread im constantly checking so keep up the good work. Man I love this site it has so much cool fanfiction like OverrideB1, Treydog etc.

Oh hi. Nice that you like my story Elidor. PS: welcome to the forums.

I am a bit tight on my schedule, so I cant give more updates right now, but a new one shall come before or on New.years-eve.

Hope everyone have hadd a nice christmas, bye folks.

Right there Telina! Now you´ve had it..hehe Joining the Morag Tong huh? But it´s good to see a lady prove herself in this godforsaken country of Vvardenfell..


btw good luck finding the MT- guildhall in Vivec!

I have only read the prologue, and I think you are off to a great start.
It's interesting, and I am going to read more.

Is English your native language (please don't be offended! )? I am asking because there are some typos and run-on sentences, which distracts me from this great story that you are writing. Other than that, I am anxious to read more of this character. (We need more female BrotherHood/assassins! )

Please keep writing and keep up the good work!

EDIT: I'm almost finished reading, and I absolutely adore Telina, especially her, er, unique ways of obtaining stuff, etc. She's a joy to read about!

I'm glad you are feeling better!

Is English your native language (please don't be offended! )? I am asking because there are some typos and run-on sentences, which distracts me from this great story that you are writing. Other than that, I am anxious to read more of this character. (We need more female BrotherHood/assassins! )


I'm not at all offended, MerGirl, I thank you for the nice comments, and I advice you to check in later today, as I will most propably have given out a new one.


I just want to say one thing though.

Happy New Year

-"Telina, you have been progressing well"."Today, you must do continue on your path".

-"Find the masters, from the house of magic, only through them can you prevail, find them continue on your path for in you hand lies the fate of an entire nation, save my people Telina".

I woke up, swet was running down my back. For the second time in one week, Azura had spoken to me. "Seek the masters from the house of magic", what did she mean with that.

I walked towards the temple, and without a second thought, I walked inside. After a quick look, around the room, my eyes filled with tears. People were lying all around the room, some was looking just ill, but some was looking directly disgusting, their skin was nearly ash coloured, and all warmt and spark in their eyes was gone.

Other people was begging for food, and not before the temple master came up, did the other in the room silence themselves. He walked in a way that clearly radiated of power, and I knew in an instant that this man was more powerfull than his rank in the temple revealed.

-"All of you, get into lines, and come forward one by one", he said.
-"Those of you who need food and water, line up in the right part of the room, with the counter there, those other who nned treatment get over to the left side of the room".

He wispered something to another temple employee, ant that person quickly got with him four others, and they shoved those, who looked like pure monsters out of the temple. Normally people would have reacted against something like that, but in all the chaous, with people rushing over to the other sides of the room, no one seemed to get attention to it, sake for me.

After some 3 hours, the diseased, and hungry ones, had left, and I walked up to the temple master.

-"Anything on your mind, outlander"? he asked in a bothersome way.

-"Yes, do you know where the masters of the house of magic resides?. I answered back quickly.

-"Ah, you are looking for the Telvannies, you see, here in Morrowind, there are diferent great houses, here on Vvardenfell, you will find only three though".

-"There is the Redorans, who are honorable, but wery strict, and the Hlaalu, who are a bunch of men and mer's, who only want to make money". "Ant then it is the Telvanni, a gang of century old backstabbing mages, whose power is so great, that they can expand their lives by tenfoldds, the master Aryon is the youngest and most modern maste, Merly 900 yers old". He said with a grin on his face.

-"So, go to the mages guild here in Ald-Rhuun, and travel to Sadrith-Mora, from there you will have to ask the mages there how to find the Telvanni council hall".

I walked back ot, while pondering on what I had just learned. So Azura wanted me to join a house full of old crazy dimentional paranoid backstabbers, why did the gods hate me so much?

When I entered the mages guild hall, I had to adjust my eyes, the room was almost completly dark, with only a shimmering blue lamp in the roof. I was suddenly met by another Dunmer.

-"Hello, you are a new one here right". But before I got the chance to answer back, she continued.

-"Would you want me to learn you a woid-walk spell"?

I had heard of these spells, but a small peek into my money pouch told me that I had by no way enough money to even buy one.

-"No, i'm so sorry, but I dont even have a hundred septims, but when I get money I shall come back", with that I took my leave and finally found the one who offered transport.

-"Sadrith-Mora please".


HAPPY NEW YEAR FELLOW READERS.

Aha another update, and a good one it is! I sure hope she joins the Telvanni, theyre the best house keep on writing. Btw why to you type "very" are "wery"? Just curious...

Excellent updates. It was an interesting twist to have Azura tell Telina to seek out the Telvanni. I'm looking forward to seeing how the Telvanni treat her.

for the first time, I travelled, by magic. I felt my body being ripped into small particles and move at an astonishing speed, all was just a whirlwind of colours, and suddenly I felt my body being put together again, and it stopped.

I stood in a building, with some people in it, and altough I was quite dizzy, I moved myself fast out of the room, before anyone got to talk to me. I stood on the top of a large staircase, and figured that the only way out was by going down.at a door I saw the sign of the imperial cult, and since the scenes in the Ald-Rhuun temple still bothered me, I decided to go in and give a little donation.

In there I walked over to the shrine and picked up some five-septim coins and dropped them in the silver bowl, instantly I felt better, and the reduced strength, that I had felt since I was wounded in the cave, was gone, and with that I took my leave and headed out the door.

I quickly noticed where I was, I was obviously in the imperial part of town, and in the fort courtyard where I stood, I noticed some guards standing around. I walked down the stairs, and headed out of the gate, just as I had set my foot on the bridge, some voices reached my ears.

-"Hey, troopers, thats Telina Delvanni the woman that broke out of fort Moonmoth and killed one of the guards".

-"You there Delvanni, you are under arres".

-"Oh bugger, she is choosing the hard way".

-"Delvanni, get back here".

But I was aleredy far away, and at one point the guards just stopped, and started to argue with some other guards, clad in some kind of bone armour.

-"That woman, broke out of prison, and killed one of the legioneers".

-"Well, we'll handle her, and the legioneer, cant possibly such of a loss outlander, as you outlanders have to many of them, to weep over just one".

The imperial guard leader, looked as though he was about to smash that boneclad guard into a hissing pool of protopazmic goo(he he, I read that once, but cant remember wher, but I just had to use it ), but he restrained himself adn the all walked back to the fort.


Ok I know it is a little short, but it was all I had time to write. By the way it's good to se you back mplantinga, I have missed your encouraging comments, and thanks to everyone else to for commenting on it.