Full Version: The Tale of Jonacin
Two excellent additions. As always, the duel scene was well-written; the unexpected twist of losing both parents will keep us guessing.
Here's an update at long last
It was a week since Jonacin’s mother had killed herself. While he still occasionally broke down in tears thinking about it, he had begun to recover from it. The Hall had now become his home, with a room set aside for him to sleep in.
Otherwise, training continued as normal. He had begun training himself in the use of Heavy Armour, knowing that the extra protection afforded made up for the loss in mobility. He had been using Steel Armour to practice in, but he knew that one day he would have better.
The sparring match ended much as others had recently, with Jonacin losing to his unarmored opponent. He was too slow to keep up in his heavy steel Armour, but he was determined to keep trying. He was moving faster now than he had been the day before, and he would only get better with more practice. He drew back from his opponent and gave the salute, before removing his helm and going over to a nearby water fountain. He splashed water over his face, cooling himself off. One of the instructors came over to him and asked if he wished to retire for the day, but he refused, wanting at least one more sparring match.
His opponent was chosen, and he entered the sparring ring. He was armed with a short sword, whilst Jonacin was armed with a katana, as he always was. The instructor signaled for the match to begin, and his opponent leapt to the attack. Jonacin clanked backwards awkwardly, dodging as many blows as he could and blocking or parrying the rest. He saw an opening and lunged, but his opponent leapt lightly aside, his sword flashing out and clanging against Jonacin’s shoulder. The instructor held up his hand to end the bout, but Jonacin shouted out “No! This match to three blows!” The instructor looked puzzled, but lowered his hand. Jonacin concentrated all his energy on his opponent, and began to notice a pattern to his attacks. He would always feint twice, usually to Jonacin’s sword hand, before striking towards the shield. Every third or so attack, he would reverse the process, feinting twice towards shield and attacking sword. Jonacin began reading his moves, and knew what was coming next. He made no move for the feints, and when his opponent lashed out towards his sword side, he crashed his blade down, knocking the sword from his hand, and then striking his throat lightly with a reverse cut. It was now one blow each.
It was a week since Jonacin’s mother had killed herself. While he still occasionally broke down in tears thinking about it, he had begun to recover from it. The Hall had now become his home, with a room set aside for him to sleep in.
Otherwise, training continued as normal. He had begun training himself in the use of Heavy Armour, knowing that the extra protection afforded made up for the loss in mobility. He had been using Steel Armour to practice in, but he knew that one day he would have better.
The sparring match ended much as others had recently, with Jonacin losing to his unarmored opponent. He was too slow to keep up in his heavy steel Armour, but he was determined to keep trying. He was moving faster now than he had been the day before, and he would only get better with more practice. He drew back from his opponent and gave the salute, before removing his helm and going over to a nearby water fountain. He splashed water over his face, cooling himself off. One of the instructors came over to him and asked if he wished to retire for the day, but he refused, wanting at least one more sparring match.
His opponent was chosen, and he entered the sparring ring. He was armed with a short sword, whilst Jonacin was armed with a katana, as he always was. The instructor signaled for the match to begin, and his opponent leapt to the attack. Jonacin clanked backwards awkwardly, dodging as many blows as he could and blocking or parrying the rest. He saw an opening and lunged, but his opponent leapt lightly aside, his sword flashing out and clanging against Jonacin’s shoulder. The instructor held up his hand to end the bout, but Jonacin shouted out “No! This match to three blows!” The instructor looked puzzled, but lowered his hand. Jonacin concentrated all his energy on his opponent, and began to notice a pattern to his attacks. He would always feint twice, usually to Jonacin’s sword hand, before striking towards the shield. Every third or so attack, he would reverse the process, feinting twice towards shield and attacking sword. Jonacin began reading his moves, and knew what was coming next. He made no move for the feints, and when his opponent lashed out towards his sword side, he crashed his blade down, knocking the sword from his hand, and then striking his throat lightly with a reverse cut. It was now one blow each.
Nice Wolfie! A very good installment, well balanced good writing
Keep it coming
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Keep it coming
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Short n' sweet!
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[quote=Dantrag]Short n' sweet!
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Can only agree..! :goodjob:
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Can only agree..! :goodjob:
Good description of the limitations of heavier weapons and armor- plus a bit more insight into Jonacin.
Update Time 
Jonacin and his opponent now circled each other warily, each looking for an opening, a weakness in the other’s guard. Jonacin suddenly spotted his opening, and leapt to the attack as fast as his heavy armour would allow. However, his opponent was faster and dodged nimbly aside, the attack going past him harmlessly. He span lightly as he dodged, and Jonacin’s armour rang like a bell as his attack connected.
Momentum and the cumbersome armour made Jonacin continue a few more steps before he turned again. He raised his sword and shield in a guarded stance and waited for the next attack. It was sudden when it came, and blows rained down on him. He blocked as best he could, and those he couldn’t block he parried. His riposte was vicious, and his opponent struggled to block. Jonacin followed up on his sudden advantage, and kept attacking. His opponent was fast enough to dodge or parry most of the attacks, but eventually one slid past his guard and thudded into his chest. The match was now tied again at two blows each.
Jonacin was determined to win this match, but the heavy armour was taking its toll on him and he was tiring rapidly. His opponent could sense this, but knew that an all out attack would be foolish. He bided his time, probing Jonacin’s defenses for weakness and slowly wearing him down. Jonacin knew he was finished if he didn’t end the match soon, and made a choice. He suddenly launched an all out attack, reasoning that if it didn’t work, he had only brought about the end of the match a little earlier.
His attacks came at his opponent from all directions, yet still he parried or dodged them all. Jonacin was almost out of energy, and knew it was now or never. He attacked with a wide slash that made his opponent leap backward, and then raised his katana over his head for a powerful downward cut. His opponent, not having enough time to dodge, raised his sword to parry, but Jonacin had put his full weight behind the blow and the lighter blade was knocked aside. The blow smashed into his shoulder, and the sound of breaking bone was clearly audible. The instructor quickly raised his arm to end the match, and the combatants stepped apart. Wearily, Jonacin raised his sword in salute, and his opponent did the same, even though his eyes showed how much pain he was in from his smashed shoulder.
Jonacin and his opponent now circled each other warily, each looking for an opening, a weakness in the other’s guard. Jonacin suddenly spotted his opening, and leapt to the attack as fast as his heavy armour would allow. However, his opponent was faster and dodged nimbly aside, the attack going past him harmlessly. He span lightly as he dodged, and Jonacin’s armour rang like a bell as his attack connected.
Momentum and the cumbersome armour made Jonacin continue a few more steps before he turned again. He raised his sword and shield in a guarded stance and waited for the next attack. It was sudden when it came, and blows rained down on him. He blocked as best he could, and those he couldn’t block he parried. His riposte was vicious, and his opponent struggled to block. Jonacin followed up on his sudden advantage, and kept attacking. His opponent was fast enough to dodge or parry most of the attacks, but eventually one slid past his guard and thudded into his chest. The match was now tied again at two blows each.
Jonacin was determined to win this match, but the heavy armour was taking its toll on him and he was tiring rapidly. His opponent could sense this, but knew that an all out attack would be foolish. He bided his time, probing Jonacin’s defenses for weakness and slowly wearing him down. Jonacin knew he was finished if he didn’t end the match soon, and made a choice. He suddenly launched an all out attack, reasoning that if it didn’t work, he had only brought about the end of the match a little earlier.
His attacks came at his opponent from all directions, yet still he parried or dodged them all. Jonacin was almost out of energy, and knew it was now or never. He attacked with a wide slash that made his opponent leap backward, and then raised his katana over his head for a powerful downward cut. His opponent, not having enough time to dodge, raised his sword to parry, but Jonacin had put his full weight behind the blow and the lighter blade was knocked aside. The blow smashed into his shoulder, and the sound of breaking bone was clearly audible. The instructor quickly raised his arm to end the match, and the combatants stepped apart. Wearily, Jonacin raised his sword in salute, and his opponent did the same, even though his eyes showed how much pain he was in from his smashed shoulder.
Good Job Wolfie! Very vivid description of the fight....it´s as you can feel the pain aweat and agony...Really Good I´d say!
Cool scene. 
No one seems to have noticed i updated, so maybe now they will 
Nice written combat scene as always Wolf.. Also nice to see that Jonacin has some trouble addapting(sp?) into using Heavy Armor, but still he manage to find a solution to the win the find in a very risky way
Keep it up!
Keep it up!
This isn't an update, i just want to inform anyone who cares that the last update was the end of Chapter one. God only knows when chapter two will be posted, because i can't think of what to do in it
Well I had to read through a few pages but wow.. Great work and nice combat scene. Can't wait for next chapter.
Well well LoneWolf... I have also had this that I dont update for a long time on my stories and it suddently gets a little bit boring and I have no way to go with the stories. Tried to change that in my newest Fan Fic... but doesn't seemed to have changed anything.
But your story about Jonacin is very good and well written so I have you can keep it up...
But your story about Jonacin is very good and well written so I have you can keep it up...
Just managed to find this one (how could I have missed it?). You have a very unique story here, with a storytelling approach somewhat different from most of the others. I hope you find time/inspiration to continue working on this story, since I feel it adds something very special to these forums.
In case anyone is interested, the first part of chapter 2 will be coming soon, hopefully
QUOTE(Wolfie @ Feb 25 2006, 06:49 PM)
In case anyone is interested, the first part of chapter 2 will be coming soon, hopefully
YAYYYYY Wolfie! I do look forward to read more about my favourite Redguard!!!
I will also be looking forward to the next chapter.
Loved the first chapter...please keep it coming in chapter 2,
Woohoo I can't wait for chapter 2. I really enjoyed your sparring match. It was so accurate in how his mobility was hindered due to his armor. I loved it and I will be watching for the next installment!
QUOTE(Taillus @ Mar 7 2006, 01:32 PM)
Woohoo I can't wait for chapter 2. I really enjoyed your sparring match. It was so accurate in how his mobility was hindered due to his armor. I loved it and I will be watching for the next installment!
You mean this one?
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