so dont hate on my story plz, i just wanted to express my self through lore and such, so here

pick flowers in the field where he lived with his ashlander parents.

but that was then, this is now; dumb founded and gazing at the vivec arena fighter quarters door accompanied by a old discusting swine of a man dressed in exquisite clothing

the well dressed imperial man behind him wispered behind the commonly dressed little dunmer, "you know what you do, now find the fool and get my stuff and the girl or his head on a plate Van!" soon the imperial man pushed dunmer boy, then the little dunmer went into a rage as he punched the door in half and scaned the room. the young dunmer and his "master" entered the room looking for the man who owed his "master" a large shipment of cyrodillic brandy and a slave from an ashlander camp, only to find 3 men in netch armor charging towards him.

"die you slave driven dog! you cant be serious that we would really give you our brandy or my slave! your a fool to come into the arena canton with an unarmored, half beaten, stupid, worthless runt like that do you?"

As the 3 men unsheathed their blades in unison and prepared to strike, van swept his leg across the floor as they were tossed into the air. soon after van(as we now know him) caught the fighters in mid-air with some sort of telekinisis and clenched his fists together.

soon van's master came in the room saying "come now gentelmen lets be reasonable and just hand me my goods? in a more deaper, angrier voice he said "now dont waist my time, give me my brandy and the slave girl!"

The man who was dressed in clothing fit for a duke in the middle of the choking men suspended in mid-air cryed out, "take her! she is in the middle room withthe brandy ina crate! just take her and go!"

with a satisfied smirk on his old, devilish face he said "now now boys, was that so hard? did we really have to go through all this tourment and punishment? hmm? well Van kill them! and remember to get the girl, and my brandy!"

"what!?! we said we would give them to you! please let us go!"

"I Adimar Verdinand has never been humiliated like this before! come now men! i am a man of trade, fortune and respect! you do not really expect me to let you live! not after you called me a fool and called my guard a runt and a slave driven dog!?! "hmph! kill them!!!"

as so he did, with no remorse, fear or any emotion at all, van closed his fist and blood which came from the men, doused the fire and stained vans face and clothing.

"hahaha!" laughed Adimar "what a show van my boy! Im felling good right now and would like to buy you something, any thing you want!" and as he said that, van replied "i dont want anything, i just want to go to sleep..." soon after he went blank, and with out a word van started to pick up the box and search for the ashlander girl and going about his buissness.

"van! you dont want a single thing? no toy or some book of you choosing?" van hoisted the box full of cyrodillic brandy onto his back and said with a soft voice, "no, i dont want a thing.." and he soon came across a teen looking ashlander girl shackled by very large chains, "please help me.. ive been worked like a dog here and taken away from my home, i just want to go home..(sniff sniff)" she wept and pleaded van to help her escape..

van alwayed wanted to run away from Adimar, due to the fact that he was repeatedly forced to kill and fight for him, yet he had to stay with him because Adimar said that he was the only one who knew where he came from.

but his heart said he should help her and get away from this place.

His heart said that he the gods and ancestors would guide him.

as the wind blew from the back door leading to the halls of the arena canton, van breathed hard as he said, "ok! lets get out of here!" he placed the box of brandy down and the girl said, "thank you so very much! but how do i get out of these chains?"

Van took her hand and, with one punch, he broke the chains in to grains, as if they were made by no more than sand.

the girl was in awe as she said "... how did you do that?" Van sighed and said "lets get out of here!" he took the girl by her wrist and ran out of the room into the halls of the canton.

they ran past an ordinator and said "sir! there is an old sorcerer who just murdered three arena warriors and is trying steal a box of cyrodillic brandy!"

The ordinator said, "what!?! tell me where this man is" van pointed in the direction whre adimar was and said to the ordinator, "he is a crazed old sorcerer who is out of control! you must stop him" the ordinator nodded his head and bashed the door in with a mace where van and the girl came from "where are you you evil swine!!! There will be no sorccery in my canton!" and van and the girl ran out towards the exits to the outside of vivec giggling and they ran off to their start to freedom.....

It´s good! Really you must continue this! I liked it....yeah..

Nice. The only thing I can see wrong with it is it needs more description on the girl and Van.(I would ask what Adimar looked like but he won't matter much anymore.)

GAAAH! CAPITALIZATION! (just showing you what it looked like)

other than that - awesome.