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Wolfie
Well, it's been a long time since i ended the first chapter, but here goes smile.gif Also, please note that there may be a slight editing to this first bit, but i'll inform you if such a happening occurs (hopefully someone still wants to read this....)
Oh yeah and here's Chapter 1


The Tale Of Jonacin
Chapter 2

As he lay in the dust, his sight fading, Jonacin thought back on the events of the past five years. He had mastered the art of fighting in heavy armour, becoming skilled enough to defeat all opponents he was matched against in practice duels. After the resident masters deemed him worthy, he was granted the title Master Ansei, and they offered him a position as an instructor in the Hall. He accepted, and spent the next three years teaching those who had entered the Hall after him in the arts of the Ansei.

However, after a while he had grown weary of teaching, wanting to go out into the world and see what there was to see, and he had also grown tired of the frequent practise duels he fought. He longed for real combat, a chance to test his skills in a situation that wasn't rigidly controlled by both a strict code of honour, and even stricter rules. One of the things he most wished to try was combat against more than one foe, as he knew it would be one of the best tests of his skills, but in the Hall bouts were always one on one. So he resigned his post at the Hall, although he was informed there would always be a place for him should he return and want it. He set out into what was, to him, the unknown. He traveled from place to place, never spending long anywhere. Any who asked his aid, whether it be in matters martial or menial, he gave it, asking only for a hot meal or a warm bed in payment.

It was this that caused him to be out in the desert. A farmer had asked him to go and deal with some bandits who had been troubling him and several other nearby farmers, stealing crops and livestock or simply destroying them. Jonacin had agreed, and had set out in search of them after replenishing his waterskin from the farmer’s well. He followed the directions the farmer had given him, and soon came across tracks. He followed them, and came upon the bandit camp.

He came upon them at night, and counted five men around the fire, three of them sleeping and two of them on watch. His stomach growled as the scent of the meat they had roasted earlier wafted over to him, so he backed off a safe distance and pulled some dried guarmeat from his pack, reflecting, as he chewed upon the tough, salty meat, that travelling light definitely had it's bad points, before lying down to sleep, deciding to go into the camp at dawn. He woke at the hour known to soldiers as Wolf’s Tail, a time when the sun was just rising and bleached the colour from everything it touched, turning the world grey. He checked his armour, making sure all the straps were tight, and loosened his katana in its sheath. He crept up on the camp once more, and saw the closest sentry had fallen asleep, as was evidenced by the gentle snoring to be heard. Obviously these men had become lazy, having nothing to fear except a few farmers up till now. He swiftly ran into the camp, calling out as he did so. To some, announcing his presence might have seemed foolish. But such was the way of the Ansei. Besides satisfying the needs of honor, the shout disoriented unprepared enemies and gave him a few precious seconds to close the last few feet into the camp. His shout roused the bandits from their slumber, and he cut one down with a thrust through his throat as he rose from his sleeping roll, still bleary eyed and unsure of what was happening. One of the sentries died next, his sword half out of his sheath as Jonacin’s katana pierced his heart. Jonacin heard a sudden movement behind him, and spun about, raising his shield as he did so. The bandit’s sword rang against the shield like a bell, and his attacker stumbled backwards. Jonacin followed with a swift disemboweling slash, and completed the reverse figure eight with a cut across the throat.

Suddenly something heavy smashed against his shield, and he felt his arm shatter under the blow. His eyes teared up with the sudden pain, and he staggered backwards. When he cleared his eyes, he saw the remaining two bandits bearing down on him, one with a sword and the other with a heavy warhammer, obviously the one who had shattered his arm. He knew he could not hold them both off at once with a broken arm, as it left his left side completely open. Unfortunately for him, so did they. The man with the sword circled to his right, and the one with the warhammer to his left. Jonacin turned to the one with the sword first, hoping to dispatch him before the other could line up a blow with his ponderous weapon. He attacked, and the man parried, but wasn’t quick enough to fully block the blow, as it rolled round his guard and bit into his throat. Just as it did, however, the bandit with the warhammer struck. His weapon crashed against Jonacin’s helm, and it was ripped from his head.

Dazed and barely able to see, Jonacin staggered backwards, lashing out blindly in front of him. He gave a satisfied smile as he felt his blade bite into flesh, followed by with a yelp of pain. He felt, rather than heard, the heavy warhammer coming at him, and leapt to his side just as it whistled through the space his head had occupied but a moment beforehand. He quickly stabbed out with his sword, and felt it slide through the man’s gut.

As his head cleared a bit, he knew he had to get out of the sun quickly and see what he could do about his arm. He grabbed at his waterskin, and his shoulders sagged as he felt its wet, empty bulk at his side. He had split it open when he had dodged the last blow from the warhammer. He saw a cave in a nearby cliff, probably where the bandits had stored their loot from previous raids. He began to make his way towards it. As he walked, he thought that maybe he should have attacked the man with the warhammer first, as his armour could most likely have withstood one or two blows of the sword until he could deal with that bandit. But at least he had survived to not make the same mistake again. He was about halfway to the cave when suddenly his legs collapsed beneath him and he slumped down into the dust with a muffled clang. The acrid taste of the desert sand filled his mouth, his vision faded to black, and he lost consciousness.
Red
Hazaa! A new chapter! I've always loved this character and your writing style. No critiques here, except that it revels my amazingly beautiful writing masterpieces [/self centered]. Bravo.
jack cloudy
Nice. The way you wrote that battlescene is amazing. I could practically see every single movement.
minque
Yeah.....Wolfie-dear! You are the master of battle-scenes! yes yes I will certainly ask you for assistance again

Great job Wolfie! really!
treydog
I must add my vote to those who find your fight scenes well-written. The movements are exciting and clear. Add in the insights into Jonacin's motivations- story-telling magic.
Wolfie
Oh yeah, i'd like to thank my editors/proof readers for their help with this, so thanks Minque, Treydog and Janus Geminus smile.gif
mplantinga
Oh dear. Jonacin has certainly gotten himself into a pickle. Now would be a great time for another honorable adventurer to come to his rescue. I do hope he'll be alright.

Thanks for this great start to chapter 2. I can't wait to see how Jonacin gets out of this mess.

Edit: After some more thought, I'm a little confused about how he got into this mess. If he is the well-trained combat master that you claim he is, how could he be caught by surprise so easily? I understand that losing battles may have some literary necessity, but I'm really curious how simple bandits could defeat our favorite Ansei master.
Wolfie
Ok, i've made a few edits, which i have put in italics. The italics will be removed after a week or so, i'm just leaving them in for a while so those who have read this already will get a chance to see what's been changed, if they're still interested.
minque
Nice! It improved the part quite a bit! Good work Wolfie.....I definitely know where to turn when I need help with battlescenes..... wink.gif
Kiln
I really should have caught up with this sooner, you do fight scenes very well Wolf and you're not too bad at the rest of the stuff either. tongue.gif

J/K wolf, I like your writing style so please continue when you can.
mplantinga
Great edits. I think that cleared up some things. It was especially good to see him contemplate the battle afterword, to see what he could learn from his near-death experience.
Tellie
Exellent wolfie....clearly being on the dark side of moderatorship laugh.gif have given you great writing powers...

Please give me more, I love your story, so stay in there, your story rocks just as much as everyone else ( and more than mine, I think unsure.gif ) stories.

Love to read more...peace man.
Wolfie
ok, time for an addition to this thing smile.gif Much thanks to Janus Geminus for his help with the dialogue smile.gif

Jonacin came to with a groan. As his head cleared, he looked around and saw he was in a cave. But how had he gotten there? He sat up, and the blanket he had been covered with fell away. It was then he realized his armour and clothing had been removed. He heard a clattering around a bend in the cave, and then an old man came into view.
“You're awake.” he said with a smile. “I was beginning to wonder.”
“Wonder what?” asked Jonacin, gingerly rubbing his head.
“How long you'd remain unconscious. It's been three days now.”
Jonacin stared at him in disbelief. “Three days? How is that possible?”
“Well now, your head wasn't designed to get clobbered like that. It takes the body time to repair.” he said, and then moved towards him, and peered at the wound with interest. “Though it doesn't appear to have caused lasting damage. Either you have strong bones or a very thick skull, whichever it is I'd be grateful.”
“I guess you're right.” he replied. “Though it still hurts like hell. Might I be permitted to ask one question though?”
“Of course.” replied the old man.
“Erm. Where are my clothes?”
The old man laughed and pointed to a part of the cave that was behind him. He looked around, and saw his clothes neatly folded, and his armour on a mannequin designed for the purpose.
“I was unable to find the helm though.” said the old man. “I looked for several minutes, but there was no sign.”
Jonacin shrugged, and said with a little smile. “That's alright. I don't think I'll be wearing one again after that. I learned my lesson, they restrict your vision too much.”

Jonacin motioned to the old man, with some embarrassment, that he would like some privacy, who obliged by going back to whatever he head been doing. Jonacin grabbed his clothing and got dressed, but decided he wouldn’t put his armour back on yet. As he followed the old man round the corner, he saw what had caused the clattering. Old bits of armour and weapons were strewn about the floor, it appeared the old man had been trying to repair them, although even with his only rudimentary knowledge of the art of smithing, Jonacin didn’t think any smith would be able to salvage the junk lying about for much more than scrap metal.

He saw the old man sitting in the cave mouth cooking something over a fire, and suddenly he realized how hungry he was. He walked up to the man and sat down by the fire.
“My apologies friend.” said Jonacin. “Where are my manners? You've done so much for me already, and I haven't even asked you your name or introduced myself. I'm Jonacin, what may I call you?”
“What may you call me?” The old man seemed to find that very amusing. “Why, you may call me... Garrett. Yes, I think Garrett's a fine name.”
Jonacin shook his head slightly in amusement. It obviously wasn't his real name, however he didn’t mind much, as his stomach was distracting him by growling fiercely as the delicious smell wafted into his nostrils from the guar meat and kwama eggs being fried over the fire.
“How long till the foods ready?” he asked hopefully.
Garett laughed again. He seemed to find almost anything funny. “Only a few more minutes now. I'll call you when it's ready.”

Jonacin nodded and went a short distance away from the cave mouth, and began practicing his Shehai forms, although he didn’t summon his Shehai. When he finished, he noticed Garett watching him with a strange look on his face.
“Whats wrong?” Jonacin asked.
Garett smiled again. “Nothing. Come, the food is ready, and you must be starving.”

Jonacin took the plate of food that was handed to him, and began eating with gusto. The food was delicious, and when he looked up from eating he saw Garett watching him again with that odd little half smile.
“Something wrong?” asked Jonacin, in between mouthfuls.
“No, it's nothing.”
The meal was finished in silence. Garrett leaned forwards, as though he'd finally come to a decision.
“You may stay until you're fully recovered, Master Jonacin. I will of course expect you to pull your weight, and do some of the hunting and chores though. If this sounds acceptable to you, then you're welcome to stay.”
Jonacin looked at him intently. There was something about this man, much more to him than met the eye.
“I would be honoured Garrett.” he replied.

And thus began his training as a Blademaster, though he did not know it yet.
Agent Griff
Great update Wolfie! I liked the scene with the old man, you portrayed the dialogue very well. The scene was also a bit querky, I didn't know what to think of 'Garett'. I was afraid that he was going to pounce on Jonacin the next second. I have one gripe with it though, aren't Guars and Kwamas indigenous to Morrowind? I didn't know they lived in Hammerfell. Maybe they were exported food, who knows?
minque
Ahh very impressive dear Wolfie! So janus helped you? hmmm if you haven´t told I´n never guessed there was a touch of someone else!

Indeed a great addition and I can´t wait to read more!
treydog
Excellent update. I, too, enjoyed the interaction between Jonacin and Garett. Looking forward to more of his experiences with this mysterious trainer.
Wolfie
QUOTE(Agent Griff @ Mar 15 2006, 05:35 PM)
Great update Wolfie! I liked the scene with the old man, you portrayed the dialogue very well. The scene was also a bit querky, I didn't know what to think of 'Garett'. I was afraid that he was going to pounce on Jonacin the next second. I have one gripe with it though, aren't Guars and Kwamas indigenous to Morrowind? I didn't know they lived in Hammerfell. Maybe they were exported food, who knows?
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Erm, well i mostly couldn't think of any other foods beside earth food, so i just used them tongue.gif Nothing more too it lol
Kiln
Great update wolf, there is less action than in the other parts but it is just as interesting and quite well written. Very good mate, keep up the good work.
doubleimage
Is this story still going? Seems a shame to give up on it, I was enjoying it. Might have to watch over you and get you writing again emot-ninja1.gif
Wolfie
QUOTE(doubleimage @ Jul 10 2006, 08:20 PM) *

Is this story still going? Seems a shame to give up on it, I was enjoying it. Might have to watch over you and get you writing again emot-ninja1.gif

Currently i seem to be suffering from a disticnt lack of motivation towards updating this. I may do it one day, but i'm not sure how far of that day will be
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