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Geonox
Took me some time to translate the story, I'm not very good at translating. The story is finished, well finished it has an open ending biggrin.gif , about 13 chapters blink.gif but they are all kind of short the whole story is about 18 pages. Anyways here's the next chapter;

Index

Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3


Silence

Chapter 4 - Darkness

The next morning Sahniir stepped into Ziirrah’s office.
”A soldier has been missing on the fifteenth wall” he said to Ziirah with a serious look in his eyes.
”I don’t know what it is, but from now on it’s best to keep an eye on eachother. I don’t want to see any soldiers walking on their own across and inside the wall and towers. I want to make small groups of soldiers so nobody will be alone anymore.” Zirrah replied to Sahniir’s message.
Sahniir knotted with his head and gave Ziirah a letter which he was holding in his hands.
”a message from the sixteenth tower” He said and left the room.

”Zirrah,

The nineteenth tower is in trouble, soldiers have been gone missing, simply disapearing from the tower. Vanishing into oblivion but we can’t seem to figure out what is happening. We have contacted the Illunarim but since then we received no word from them.
This is a serious problem and the other towers should be informed. Please be carefull.

Caenir”

Ziirah left the letter on his desk and walked to the stairs which led to the wall. Again, the sun was going down to fast. It was as if the days were shorter and the nights grew longer.

That night was darker than any other nights. Sahniir was nervous just like the nights before and didn’t pulled his eyes away from the dead plain in front of him for one second. The soldiers were standing in small groups of three on the wall. Nobody made a sound untill they heared a scream, comming from below. Again, shortly after that another scream came from beneath the sharp rocks on the bottom of the tower. It was as if it was spreading in front of the wall from the first till the sixteenth tower. Ziirah noticed a dark cloud in the distance, drawing near them with an immense speed. The dark cloud came out of nothing, like a huge black wave which was going to hit the tower.
”THERE THEY COME!” said Ziirah to the soldiers on the wall. The darkness was not very far from them and for the first time Ziirah saw shapes of figures comming out of the cloud.
Figures with arms which allmost reached their feet, slim and long figures with a small head on top of it. Ziirah wanted to give the soldiers the sign to fire their crossbows when the creatures allmost reached the wall. But they vanished into nothing like they ran into the wall and exploded into million peices.
The soldiers were confused and didn’t knew if they had to shoot.
”this...is not good” said Sahnirr.
Ziirah heared some noises on the wall, like small explosions and looked down where he saw the soldiers were paniced and disapeared into the wall one by one. The creatures now appeared on the wall and reached for their swords. The soldiers were defending themselves with all their strength agains the dark creatures. Ziirah noticed how the creatures entered the towers on each side. There was no time to lose, he ran downstairs together with Sahniir, but he knew this battle was already decided.

When he reached the first hall he noticed two large creatures who were supprized to see any living soldiers inside the wall. Ziirah and Sahniir didn’t hesitated a moment and drawed their swords. One moved around and stepped in the red light which was hanging from the ceiling.
Ziirah could see his face, it was small allmost like a skull with a thin skin wrapped arround it. Two huge eyes stared at him, two yellow eyes with a dark iris in the center. Two long arms reached for the four swords which were hanging on his waist. Two extra arms appeared from his back which grabbed the remaining two swords. The creature screamed at them, it was as if the jaw was not connected to the rest of the skull.
Ziirah gnarled and started the attack followed by Sahniir. The creatures were strong and not an easy opponent. One of them allmost hit Ziirah who was running towards them. He quickly dropped himself on the ground and chopped the feet from the creatures legs. The creature screamed out loud and fell down on the floor. Ziirah quickly jumped on his feet again and put the sword in the chest of the creature. The creature slowly turned into black dust and disapeared.
Sahniir didn’t noticed what happened and fought agains his enemy.
Ziirah noticed how the creature hit Sahniir’s right arm and put his other sword in his leg. Sahniir fell down on the floor and the creature was ready to finish the job. But Ziirah quickly cut his sword through the neck of the creature which turned into dust, just like the other one.
Ziirah put his sword away and ran back to Sahniir who was laying on the floor.
That same moment a Darhjiin soldier ran down the stairs and noticed the two Chiniir in the hall.
”WE HAVE TO GO! THE WALL HAS BEEN DEFEATED! He yelled.
”EVERYBODY IS DEAD!”
Ziirah got Sahniir on his feet and dragged him downstairs. He could hear that the creatures left the tower and were now comming from above. Ziirah ran down the small stairs of the tower into the sables.
A few Darhjiin were already prepairing to leave the tower.
”Release the Sinjun!” he yelled at the soldiers. The soldiers opened the stables and four large creatures walked into the hall. Their feet were flat, perfectly to walk through the sand. They had a large body and a pointy head with a horn on top of his head.
The soldiers put the saddle on the back of the sinjuns. Ziirah hopped on one of them and put Sahniir in front of him. He could hear that the creatures allmost reached the sables.
Ziirah quickly pointed his finger to the soldier who he saw in the tower. His blue face was covered with blood and his cuirass allmost fell appart.
”You, you will ride to Iillunairim, warn Ariisiss and the Illunarim” he said to the soldier who was already sitting on a sinjun. “I will bring Sahniir to the Oasis of Dihnnjir, to the camp of Illahnin” Ziirah said. His grey fur was covered with red spots of blood and he also felt he was exhausted. As quick as he could he gave his sinjun the sign to leave, and left the tower, followed by the other soldiers. Heading into the darkness of the night.
mplantinga
Your story seems sadly neglected. I wonder why other people don't seem to be reading it? Regardless, a great installment. Now that the wall has fallen, I wonder what will happen next; perhaps there is still hope?
Sirin
Your story definitely had its short comings. but, above all, I'd say that this was a good post. Keep it up! I want more!
Geonox
thanks guys...since I got no replies I thought nobody liked my story laugh.gif
minque
QUOTE(Geonox @ Mar 1 2006, 08:56 PM)
thanks guys...since I got no replies I thought nobody liked my story  laugh.gif
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Awwww.....but really! I´ve said it before and I´ll say it again....just because I don´t reply after every installment does NOT mean I don´t like your story.....I read it and I like it ...honestly! Hmmm think I´ll better be more frequent in my commenting... tongue.gif
Kiln
Oh I'm sorry Geo, I thought for sure I'd commented on this at beyondoblivion but I guess I missed it. It's quite good as I've said before I enjoy it very much so please continue soon.

Man I'm gonna have to get back onto commenting on the stories again, I seem to have neglected doing so.
Geonox
QUOTE(minque @ Mar 1 2006, 10:49 PM)
Awwww.....but really! I´ve said it before and I´ll say it again....just because I don´t reply after every installment does NOT mean I don´t like your story.....I read it and I like it ...honestly! Hmmm think I´ll better be more frequent in my commenting... tongue.gif
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aw thanks minque! ^^ But I thought nobody realy liked it or wasn't interrested in it cos my bad gramar or cos it wasn't directely related to the elderscrolls lore stuff. tongue.gif

QUOTE(Kiln @ Mar 2 2006, 04:56 AM)
Oh I'm sorry Geo, I thought for sure I'd commented on this at beyondoblivion but I guess I missed it.  It's quite good as I've said before I enjoy it very much so please continue soon.

Man I'm gonna have to get back onto commenting on the stories again, I seem to have neglected doing so.
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Thanks biggrin.gif
mplantinga
There have been so many new additions to the fan fiction section lately that we sometimes have trouble keeping up. Please don't take that as an insult to your story. I have really enjoyed the many unique stories in these forums, especially those that don't directly follow any of the (well-known) lore. It gives the authors a lot of freedom to make things the way they want, and be unrestricted in their creativity. Your story has done a superb job of prolonging the suspense, giving us just enough information to give us greater insight into the events, while still maintaining an immense degree of mystery and uncertainty. Please continue working on this story; I will definitely look forward to each new installment with eager anticipation.
Geonox
thanks mplantinga ^^ I finished some new chapters but I'm not 100% happy with the result so I might change em a little bit before posting them biggrin.gif
Taillus
I am soooo sorry I have neglected to read this but since I am done chapter 4 of my story I want to give my fingers a rest and probably get a new keyboard. The lack of comfort on this old ratty thing is making my wrists hurt. But forget about all of that! I have completely read through the entire history of this story, and I have to say that I really, really enjoyed it. Great job and keep writing.
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